Pirates: There Is No Justice

The writing context is okay But it's too watery, repetitive and cumbersome. It takes a long time to talk about insignificant things, which is the biggest shortcoming of this book Build a base to write about a bunch of unimportant slave feelings, steal a Seraph to explain the reasons for a long time, and escape the government's blame after explaining a few times Wait a hundred words, I won't be able to hold on to the end Suggestions to the author: Keep it simple and clear, and write more words about the third party's views on the event. For example, in the early stage, the franchise country was destroyed by the protagonist's natural disaster. The navy, world government, and revolutionary army cannot not react at all to such a big event. Happy New Year, come on! 😁

You can refer to Yunzhi Tianwu in the Rabbit Gang Thunder, Rain, and Cloud are three inseparable families

Eniru's ultimate move, Lei Ying, is to gather thunder clouds together, which is extremely powerful. Should the protagonist Yunyun Guo be able to use this move more easily, right? It can even be strengthened, giving the impression that if it were not a plot kill, Lei Ying would even surpass the full blow of the Four Emperors

Speaking of clouds, I think of the cloud control technique of the male mainstream star in "Stealing Stars". Wraps high-speed moving clouds around the edges of its body, thereby developing a cloud shield that can deflect enemy attacks. It can also speed up cloud creation and develop the cloud fist for long-range attacks. There is also the black energy after drinking the devil's blood. Unfortunately, the male protagonist in "Stealing Stars" did not develop the cloud control technique very well, and the male protagonist himself did not have many plots.

It feels like the protagonist is acting like a dog to the Celestial Dragons. He will be the first to do whatever the Celestial Dragons want. Even if the Celestial Dragons want a male favorite for the protagonist, they will not hesitate to offend the Four Emperors. What about next time? Just make any excuse and arrest the girlfriend of the Chief of Staff of the Revolutionary Army? So what is the difference between him and the human traffickers who capture slaves for the Celestial Dragons?

The protagonist who originally had no weaknesses took the initiative to add weaknesses to himself. If One Piece is updated later and there is a big pit of Devil Fruit, half of the One Piece fans will be buried.

If I eat Yunyun Fruit, I will develop it like this. First, I will study the components of natural clouds - water vapor plus various particles and gases. I can develop moves [Acid Rain Cloud] [Mist Hidden Technique] [Thunder Cumulus Cloud] [Hydrogen Bomb Cloud~High density of various gases and particles, and then violent friction and detonation] [Flying. Cloud Climbing Technique. Somersault Cloud], [Water Mist Optical Refraction] . Invisibility. Telescope Technique] A bit of metaphysics - the wind is invisible, the clouds are formless, the clouds are rolling and smooth, and they are unpredictable. After learning the knowledge related to the human body structure, you can develop moves [Strong and Soft Tai Chi] [Cloud Expelling Palm] [Silk Wrapping Hand. When fighting, break down the clouds into strands, and penetrate into the enemy's skin texture without leaving a trace, imprisoning and pulling].

The phantom beast species are now a bit too strengthened.

Farewell. I still prefer the kind of devil fruits that open and close, such as shaking, freezing, etc. This kind of feeling has no offensive power.

I feel like Kaido is being made weak. In the anime, the old whitebeard beating Akainu is like beating his son. Come here to write that Kaido, who was in his prime and at his peak, was suppressed by Akainu. My brother, the Yonko-level combat power is not something that a general can touch. His combat power is broken. The combat power of Emperor Kaido in your novel is weaker than that of General Akainu. The decline in combat power is a bit serious. When I saw you wrote about the war on top, I didn't want to subscribe anymore.

I feel that this fruit has no effect at all so far, and it is not as effective as the sound waves of pig's feet.

If you have to be a cheating Goldfinger, 100 One Piece readers and ten prisoners who have seen the food are considered too many. I don't even want to give Goldfinger an explanation. He is just enjoying himself.

It's too watery. You repeat one sentence over and over again and explain endlessly. If you continue writing like this, it will definitely end badly.

Such fruit, I feel the rhythm of you trying to pounce

I just finished fighting Kaido and then fighting Whitebeard. I don't know why I'm a little speechless. Is there a big fight with Big Mom in the next chapter, and a fight with the red hair in the next chapter 😅 The first New World Operation and the fight with the Four Emperors.

The inexplicable addition of a sonic golden finger is really outrageous The cloud fruit set by the author has not shown its power at all. First of all, the protagonist can control clouds. If you try hard, it is water vapor. First of all, the protagonist can compress the air. The impact of high-pressure and high-flow water vapor is very strong This can be used as an attack method and flight power And the power of compressed water vapor is not only that Cumulonimbus clouds will discharge when the potential difference is large enough to a certain extent. The discharge can electrolyze water into hydrogen and oxygen, and then burn it, the power can be imagined

This fruit makes me feel that it is more supportive. Not much desire to read more

The author seems to be a little confused about what is a human and what is an animal 😅. Even if you are a social animal, it is hard and tiring, and you make clean money, you still have to have basic human nature. Paying attention to interests does not mean that you can do anything for the sake of interests.

I can't stand it, it's too watery.

In the world of pirates, will determines everything, and the protagonist in this book works as a dog for the Celestial Dragons. His will determines that he cannot be overlord, so let's go.

What else is natural in this version?

Updates are made every two days. This is a vicious cycle. The less updates there are, the more people will support them. If they support the author, there will be no income. If there is no income, there will be fewer updates. Author, you are destroying the book.

Where is Shennong? How is this book?

Now this pirate fan author always wants to get you a weird fruit to show off your imagination. As a result, everyone is divided, some agree and some criticize. Devil fruits are just abilities in the final analysis. They say devil fruits can develop many abilities. I also believe it. The key person is not good. Devil fruits have no limits, but people have limits. Why can't Kizaru speed up at the speed of light after eating the Shining Fruit? A single shock can turn Whitebeard into that state, let alone those weird things, and domineering in the pirate world view is the basis of everything. Knowledge, knowledge, armed color, overlord color, this is the way, Devil Fruit belongs to the category of jutsu, top domineering combined with top fruit is the real power. Or, if the top fruit is given to Bucky, it will be useless. The devil fruit must be combined with your profession. If you can't combine it, it will only have a few more abilities. As long as the Haki in the pirate worldview is still there and has not broken through the defense, then even if you drop a nuclear bomb on him, he will not die, let alone the fruit's ability.

Do all the novels you open have multiple female protagonists?

It feels like a lot of places are just one sentence and then explained over and over again.

It's too YY. I actually used yy.

You wrote that the protagonist traveled through a Devil Fruit and had 1:2 awakenings: the previous owner who can awaken twice. Niubi: The swordsman is a bit embarrassed to hold a knife: the author, you just write the fruit that changes in size: develops to the second awakening into a certain form of the giant spirit god: Otherwise, the author, you make up a fruit yourself, and the protagonist is best I know that there is a protagonist in One Piece, Luffy has watched it a little bit in the short video: I don't want a protagonist who knows everything: a protagonist who knows everything becomes stronger too fast. The protagonist becomes invincible in two or three hundred chapters. The map is so small: I have watched a lot of books where the protagonist is even with Kaido in more than two hundred chapters. What's interesting next?

Recommend a pirate fan novel: "Pirates: Becoming the King of the World from the Age of Rocks" [Decisive Killing + Dominance + Great Swordsman + Pirate Group + Age of Rocks + World Domination] Return to the era of Rocks, join the Rocks Pirates and become a cadre, grab the gold from the sky, massacre the Celestial Dragons during the Battle of the Valley of Gods, and form a pirate group after Rocks' death to dominate one side. During the second celebration of the Celestial Dragons, all the pirate groups in the new world of the Alliance once again launched the Battle of the Valley of the Gods, snatching the Celestial Dragons' treasures and devil fruits, massacring the Celestial Dragons again, killing Lord Garin, Army General, and CP0 Chief... Hawkeye Homick: The world's greatest swordsman? No, no, no, this is not me, but Li Yuan. Ever since I started learning swordsmanship, I have been pursuing his path of swordsmanship. Whitebeard: The strongest man in the world is not me, but Li Yuan. That guy is so outrageous that even my ability to awaken the Shock Fruit cannot defeat him! Five Old Stars: Obviously I am immortal and can passively teleport to save my life. Why am I still being killed?

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