Cultivation and Longevity: Starting with Grinding Proficiency!

The first few chapters were alright, but the later ones weren't so good. In an upgrade story, you need to focus on the main theme, which is getting stronger. Other details should be simplified. For example, if Old Deng says that there is a competitor who is making him irritable, a normal sentence would be enough: "There is a competitor, and he looks distressed." Instead of writing hundreds of words to describe it indirectly. Do not write it as an explanatory text.

The chapters starting with "Joining the Marketplace" are so awkward and below par; you should read them from the beginning yourself.

Your punctuation is not very good. The sentence breaks are so awkward, with several long pauses in one sentence!

Holy crap, it's three watches a day!