It Was the Girl Who Flirted with Her First, I Really Didn't Take the Initiative.

Smoking is the most annoying thing. It makes me sick when I look at it. I quit smoking.

Brothers, keep reading, don't support the author to death, thank you

I haven't started reading this book yet. I'm used to reading the comments first. I didn't expect that now people are talking about smoking. Damn it, let's not just abstain from sex, buddy. What a lunatic. If the word count is increased because of writing about smoking water, then it needs to be criticized.

Is this okay? I feel like I can at least keep reading, and I will continue to read it once it is released. Those Luo Li Ba Sui readers, why do you care so much! Those people live by the sea and have opinions on everything. They see the situation in Syria more clearly than anyone else. Keep writing, you have to believe in miracles! ! !

One of the reasons for the low reading collection is that the plot of the book is too bland. The plot may be good, but it is not compact enough. What I understand is that it is clearly 5 chapters, but you wrote 15 chapters. It feels very bland or too detailed, and readers cannot imagine the subsequent plot in their minds. This book is about urban love. There are always two points in love. A man pursues a woman or a woman pursues a man. Whether it is pure love or a harem, the core is these two points. It is very important whether the characters have distinct personalities. Reading the book actually focuses on one point, which is expectation. What are your expectations for the harem novel? The male protagonist will soon get the first female protagonist, whether it is Qingmei, a classmate in his class, or a big sister in the workplace outside school. He will win the next chapter or a few chapters, and I am looking forward to it and will want to read it every day. Or maybe after you win the first heroine, you can conquer the second one, and then you can win the second one right away. Or it could be that the first and second heroines are about to go out to the Shura field. These are all plots that I want to watch. Recruiting a girl into a harem cannot be like a single heroine. The process is very complicated. After all, there are many heroines. The process of repeatedly watching the ambiguity, holding hands, kissing, and getting on base is the last step. The male protagonist is a Neptune character. If you have experience and can guide the process, the process will go smoothly. What matters is the sweet love between different female protagonists, or how to avoid the Shura field between the female protagonists. If you are a single heroine, you should enjoy the process of falling in love. Every detail must be detailed. The ambiguous period is very long, different scenes, different times, all kinds of teasing for the heroine. Holding hands is very important, the first physical contact, the first kiss, the first hug, the first time you feel alone, etc., Because the ending of the single heroine is to hit the base. If it is a woman chasing a man, it is actually a matter of changing the personality and changing the initiative of the man and woman. I read this book from the first chapter to the last chapter in one go, and it felt too bland. It's not that the plot is bad, it's just like a movie or a TV series, there's no peeing throughout the whole thing, and you can't wait to watch it until the end. This book is like any chapter. I can interrupt it because of thirst, going to the toilet, eating, or sleeping. I don't have a strong feeling of continuing to read, which leads to the poor performance of this book. If someone clicks to read it after charging, they can read all the free chapters and then subscribe to a few chapters. Take a look at the follow-up. If it is still dull, it is most likely that you will leave it for the time being, or simply remove it from the bookshelf. It feels inappropriate to write a single female protagonist in this book. If you write multiple female protagonists, 3-5 female protagonists are most suitable. If there are less, there will be nothing to write. After all, I am not here to see your business, nor are I here to see you make money. Qingmei, classmate, senior sister, teacher, big sister in the workplace are the most suitable ones to write about. The author can choose by himself. Light novels and urban romance are two major categories. This type of book is most likely to produce problems and is also the least likely to produce problems. If the comparison is poor, it will be miserable, but if the comparison is good, it will become popular. This is just a personal opinion, I hope it will be useful to the author.