Cultivating in a World of Gods and Strange Martial Arts

Brother Jiang can be stubborn, but he is submissive in the world of immortality. I don't eat beef in other worlds. Don't say anything too outrageous. If you finish the book well, it won't be a high-quality product. The supporting characters can be more refined, with more words and space. For example, for the character Gu Long, use more words to portray his loving and selfless character in a deeper way. It will definitely be It's a good supporting role. Also, don't just be happy. There are a lot of cool stories about fantasy, and the plot has more ups and downs. If you want to read a cool story, I'll go directly to fantasy, not fairy tales. It doesn't matter if you write about other world plots, but those in the world of cultivating immortals must have ups and downs.

The description of the environment at the beginning of the first chapter is a few hundred words very good. "The shape and shape of Daqing Mountain stretch for thousands of miles, and are lush and green. There are many beautiful peaks in it. It has attracted many people who seek immortality and enlightenment to come here, learn from their teachers, and embark on a journey of eternal life." This is probably the case. It cannot be copied. I was very confused when I saw this paragraph, because there are many handsome peaks on a green mountain, and the scenery is very good, and then attract people who seek immortality and seek knowledge to come and learn from the teacher. I feel very confused. Your description of the predicate object is wrong. The subject indicates the object of the predicate statement. If this is the case, "Daqing Mountain stretches for thousands of miles, with lush trees and thousands of peaks. There is a Taoist temple on the mountain, which attracts many people who want to seek immortality and seek knowledge." Oh, there is a Taoist temple on the mountain, so it attracts many people who want to seek immortality and knowledge. You may say that we will talk about the Dragon and Tiger View later, yes, but your wording and sentence construction are wrong, and "stepping on a pair of black and white steps" means walking. Why use "stepping on feet"? It is an inappropriate word. Ignore this mistake for the time being. Then a few hundred words of description of the environment lead to the Dragon and Tiger Temple, and then the protagonist appears and talks to himself. Through the protagonist's soliloquy, he tells the reader that there is an old temple master; Meaningless self-talk, readers will feel very strange after reading this. Why did the author write a lot of self-talk? The author writes this to explain the setting through the protagonist's soliloquy. Can readers accept it? If you are a newbie reading it, you will probably give up after reading three or four pages. Instead of the protagonist muttering a few words to himself, I read two chapters and kept muttering to himself, giving people the feeling of being crazy. Through the protagonist's mouth, he also told readers that there was a member of the Li family who was about to go up the mountain. He also said to himself in shock: "It's not fake. It's better to wear a vest." He said to the air, "I hope you don't cause trouble." This is from Chapter 1, not Chapter 2. Aren't you embarrassed? In particular, there is a line where the protagonist says to himself, "It's good to open a trumpet account or a vest. At least it will give you an extra guarantee of survival." It seems that the author is enjoying himself. There is a joke in Shibaliu TV series: introductory lines. I was afraid that the audience wouldn't understand it and was too lazy to use a better way to present it, so I asked the characters to speak the information the audience needed to know as lines. You want the readers to know what the protagonist's cultivation is and how long he has been in this world, and then you ask the protagonist to say it to himself. There is Mr. Li, and the person the protagonist is waiting for is him. You are afraid that the readers will not know, and then you have the protagonist say it to himself. Because you don't know how to narrate, let the protagonist speak it and let the readers memorize the lines This is a bad way of expression, super bad. At the end of the first chapter, when Li Yuanwai meets the protagonist, he calls himself a villain and bows down. At the beginning of the second chapter, "Li Yuanwai is humble and orderly, not as domineering as the protagonist imagines." People are like this when they meet. Isn't the sentence you wrote at the beginning of the second chapter redundant? His thinking is confusing. Small problems can be ignored. Leader Li left, and another description of the environment came, "The Taoist temple is hidden in the dark mountains and forests, like a fairyland that escapes the world. The ancient eaves and corners appear and disappear in the darkness, poetic and picturesque." Can you use metaphors? Return to fairyland; poetic and picturesque. The dilapidated Taoist temple, the cards are all falling, the words and sentences are improperly chosen, and the rhetoric is wrong; there is also the rosin and soil at the back, which is meaningless rhetoric and is very long-winded. Log in to the account later, how many years is Shenwu, Shenwu... Year, how are you in Shenwu NN year, how are you in Shenwu xx year, these two words are confusing! A long paragraph of introductory settings is given to the reader, such as: Someone told Xiaosun that your grandma died. The second aunt collapsed again. Your second aunt's third uncle also died. The fourth uncle's father-in-law passed away in May, and the fourth uncle's father-in-law's sister also passed away. Damn it, most newcomers will definitely not be able to stand it when they see it. I can evaluate it so clearly and carefully because I read it carefully twice. I have read novels about this kind of simulation system, but your description of the simulation should not be more than ten paragraphs. Isn't it just courting death that the second chapter is just about numbers?

1. Is this book a slow hit? Answer: Yes and no. The main plot of this book is slow to pick up, but the plot of the trumpet world progresses rapidly. 2. Was the first trumpet world in ancient times? Answer: No. It is a unified dynasty that transitioned from ancient normality to modern society. During the period when the protagonist Xiao Xiao was born, the Six Nations were at war with the Iron Alliance, so he appeared with the protagonist's family fleeing famine. If you bring in other book settings to make a difference, then you'll be happy. 3. What is the character of the protagonist? Answer: The main character tends to be stoic, while the trumpet has various personalities. Currently, the number one trumpet is Wu Chi, and the character attributes in this direction will be strengthened in the future. 4. Why doesn't the protagonist kill decisively? Answer: Anyone who says this must not have read the book. If you don't believe me, ask the readers who actually read the book. 5. Why is the protagonist's IQ so low, not as high as mine? Answer: Are you reading the book from God's perspective, or are you reading the plot I arranged, and then mocking the protagonist in the drama? You can imagine who has a lower IQ. 6. Why do you want to let the enemy run away? Why doesn't the protagonist just act like a bulldozer without saying a word? Answer: The supporting characters are not dead, and it is normal for them to run away if they cannot be beaten. In addition, the plot requires it. As for why the protagonist is not a bulldozer, people who can say such things, if you read a trivial novel, the protagonist is already a bulldozer, what else should I write? If there are new questions in the future, I will update this post and provide answers. Please also ask for support.

Chapter five and six are amplifying the poison, it's simply

To be honest, I quite hate the various adjectives used to beautify female characters in novels. Just because she is a woman, her pussy is fragrant?

This is the first few chapters. . . I feel five years younger

If you can't, quit your job. It's too hard for you to work overtime every day.

The writing is good, but who is this father-in-law? Or an outstation?

Comrades from all over the world, this is the first time you come to our territory of Longhuguan, please leave your surname. In the future, when fellow Taoists have successfully cultivated and ascended to the immortal world, it will be possible for those who come after me to admire the immortal appearance of one or two of these fellow Taoists.

How embarrassing, Black God Fighting Competition, Black Devil Claw, the name is useless