I Am a Taoist Priest in Marvel

Why do people who go to Marvel have to chase the widow😅😅

^_^，，， This book has much better results than that one, and I now have 3,000 in my collection. Regardless of whether the book reviews are good or bad, to be honest, I am reluctant to delete them. After all, it means that someone will read my writing, which can be regarded as an encouragement.             ， Some of my suggestions hit the mark, and I revised the entire book three times. There were a lot of negative reviews, and I couldn't bear to delete the book review after reading it. I've been through it alone, but am I still afraid of being scolded? But I had to delete a few articles, after all, too many people would be discouraged from reading because of these negative reviews. I opened this post, everyone who wants to scold me or give me bad reviews should be gathered here. I come in and get scolded by everyone every day, will it make me feel like I am on fire? Haha.

The first thing I saw was the post the author left in the book review, which was very sad, so I started reading it seriously, but there were many problems... The first and most important thing is that it is not good. It's an American comic, the protagonist's profession is a Taoist priest, and the quest line is Dr. Banner. The corresponding background humanities are the theme of modern American science fiction movies. The protagonist has a cooler and more alternative profession-a Taoist priest. But the background is not well written. The author's description is like briefly telling a hearsay story again. I don't know if everyone can understand what I say. It means that there is no humanistic background supported by real life experience, and it is described in a copy-cat way, which leads to reading fatigue. This description of the United States is still stuck in the description of the United States in the "American Dream" in the 1980s. "Unique product", "surname", "lazy sleep", "openness"... I don't know what the United States is like (let's be honest, I have never been there), but many articles have described this country. I think since the author has written about this subject, shouldn't he collect some "tacit" information and open up a novel perspective? Assuming that the author really does not have this ability, it is okay to find one or two popular passages related to the subject matter without writing it. Once you use a cookie-cutter introduction, it is equivalent to defining your book as a cookie-cutter thing. If I hadn't seen the author's self-report in the comment area at the beginning, I might not have wanted to finish the three chapters. Then let me talk about the writing style. The writing style of this book is very detailed, but also very ordinary. I looked at the description of the humanistic background, which is equivalent to the decoration of your novel. It is decorated but very cheap. Plot, setting, how should I put it? The plot corresponds to the layout and positioning of this house. The setting belongs to the house style, whether it is modern leisure, forest wonderland or farmhouse. This book by the author belongs to an ordinary city, ordinary housing, ordinary community... The main theme is ordinary. I saw Chapter 5. Except for the protagonist pulling out a golden light spell from the Hulk, the rest was a "plain" text, retelling a fragment from the movie to me... Brother, in the Internet era, what did you write in the five chapters? Will you go back and examine it yourself? The fragments in the original work are not particularly classic - such as when Stark snapped his fingers and said: I am Iron Man. Or some interesting jokes (with great power comes great responsibility, I can fight like this for a whole day... Captain America said in the elevator: Long live Hydra... Etc.), What would you describe him to do? What's the significance? Long paragraphs of watery text, madly tearing at the reader's patience? Which one is more impactful, the movie scene or your description? If I have this skill, I can search this paragraph on Baidu. The receiving method is definitely less laborious than reading, has a stronger impact, and is more direct to the senses! Isn't the most important thing at the beginning not to explain the protagonist and career settings, and to bury the main story? You said that you spent a long paragraph describing the two idiots who kidnapped the long-legged girl. You should be trying to embody the golden light curse, right? But have you finally explained the golden light curse clearly? No! You only left me - two fools, who stabbed the golden light with knives, but couldn't get through. In the end, they fell into an illusion-like escape trap, killing the two fools in the same way Itachi killed the two Anbu... The IQ is too low... The brains you assigned to these two gangsters are not worthy of the number of words in this paragraph. Their brains are obviously not on the average line. There is no "suspiciousness", "abnormality", "panic when encountering unexpected events", not even the "instinct" of animals encountering special situations! The characters portrayed do not look like living creatures! It can be seen that your explanation of setting and characterization is very weak, really weak. I am not mocking the author, but I am expressing my opinion realistically. Such a special profession, such a special background, such useful spells, please explain it! In the end, I only saw two fools stabbing themselves with knives and stabbing themselves to death. Just such a story took a long chapter to write. What about long legs? When you write female characters, don't you portray the key? Words don't produce hormones. I only handed over a seed, probably a tool that the system needs to collect. Explain the settings by the way. But you didn't even explain it to Banner! Why did you create this seemingly original character again? The only thing I can think of is hormones, but you didn't write about it. Or if you can't write, why write about her? Really, I read it very carefully and helped you read it, and then I realized that this is a simple white article. If the author doesn't like me, just delete the post. I read your self-report and your novel carefully and then replied seriously. I think there are a lot of problems - of course, I mean compared with those excellent online novels. If not compared to the top, then compared to the bottom. I can also cite many advantages. For example, the description is relatively simple and delicate, and the story and logic are still very clear. But if this is all you ask for, it can only be said that there is no progress. I have seen many great writers write American comics. Not everyone has rich experience and cannot write about real foreign humanistic backgrounds. Can they avoid the important and take the light? Or check the information and design a plot in the first chapter or two to make it fascinating. Then use a lot of writing on the story line and the protagonist's preliminary explanation and outlook. The kind that makes you think after watching it - why is this protagonist like this? Write an article, be the protagonist, don't think about yourself, imagine what kind of protagonist the public needs? Don't "bind" the protagonist with your own morality and shame. The protagonist is different from us and not in reality, so why not have some "personality"? From your description of the American background and your description of the woman when the protagonist appears, I feel like you are setting up the protagonist's character traits. There is a particularly "restricted" feeling. It's very fake and empty... Don't use this writing method to elevate the protagonist by denying the setting of a bitch. You haven't achieved this kind of writing effect. There are many details here, and people are complex and diverse. A beautiful Bichi, which attribute is more important to her is beauty or Bichi? Of course it's beautiful. So what you reject is not appearance, but personality value. How do you deny her any value? There needs to be comparison! It's not her "stamp collecting" that makes the protagonist disgusted, but the protagonist is such a "badass". This Bichi is ordinary in front of him. After he trains himself, there will be as many people like him as possible. This is the reason why the protagonist finally rejects her. Your failure to explain it is like writing a diaosi talk about the success of second-hand Porsches, which is not down to earth... It is a boring topic for diaosi to discuss second-hand Porsches, because no matter how many Porsches they have, diaosi are just talking. But if it is discussed by a second generation, it is another matter. From the beginning to the end, if you haven't explained the protagonist well, don't expand on the side... I won't say more at the end, because I only read Chapter 6. Generally speaking, I think that after seeing this, I should have some hope for what happened to the protagonist in the early stage. And these six chapters we have now have given me the feeling that they are dispensable. Well, I didn't mean to ridicule the author at all. Should I write a book about this? My personal foundation is different, and I am not qualified to ridicule it. I'm just telling you how an old bookworm feels when reading this passage. There is a lot more I haven't said, but that's it for now,

Thank you all for your messages. Some of my suggestions are very pertinent. For example, the skills of traditional Taoist priests are too little and have not enough impact on the original plot. They have been revised again in the past two days. I would like to express my gratitude. There are also some suggestions that are slightly different from my ideas, and I have not adopted them for the time being. I also express my gratitude. One person is short in wisdom and ten is strong in wisdom. Finally, I would like to collect some interesting Taoist spells from you so that you can communicate with each other. I wish you all a happy life.

There is a saying that the main character is a bit 🤡. Can you arrange something for the main character to pursue? Beauty, power, anything will do. Now the protagonist is a hammer in the East and a stick in the West. As the plot develops, the protagonist moves. What is the motivation of the protagonist? Jumping up and down🤡?

Even if the main character gives a girl to someone else, this book is a must-have. What age is it, and girls are still given away?

Huh?

It's really hard to describe in one sentence. I suggest the author to have a deeper understanding of his country's culture before writing a book! You must know that Taoism and Taoism are not the same thing; Zhengyi and Quanzhen are not the same thing; flying with a sword and flying with a sword are not the same thing! If you really can't understand the history and mythology system of Taoism, then you can read The Legend of Shushan Swordsman by Huanzhu Louzhu!

The power system is a bit messy, going up and down. The first intermediate-level Golden Light Spell can catch the attack of the Abomination, and can also restrain the Abomination, but then it can no longer catch the attack of the Kingpin. What are you doing, playing around? It can withstand the attack of the Abomination with a force of more than ten tons or even dozens of tons, but the Jinpin can't catch the power of several hundred kilograms or less than one ton at most?

Sure enough, I knew it was a eunuch again, the investment failed! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! !

Does it matter to you whether Hulk goes berserk or not?

Um, is the author trying to write about a Taoist priest from the Zhengyi sect? However, if you are easily tied to a woman, there is no other meaning. The protagonist approaches Fan Ning with a strong purpose and is utilitarian. Fan Ning has the illusion because of the protagonist's behavior, thinking that the protagonist cares about him. But in my opinion, the two have only met a few times. The male protagonist may have never seen a woman, nor does he have a palace, so he is constantly being disturbed by it.

I feel like I can promote myself as a Taoist priest, but don't really be a Taoist priest. Just create a Taoist system. This looks very strange. To be honest, even a legendary Taoist system would be fine.

I haven't read the book yet, but I would like to ask if the pig's feet are eunuchs. If so, I'll give up chasing them 🐷🐷🐷

Not a traditional Taoist priest, but a systematic Taoist priest.

When writing about a preacher, add a little bit of the protagonist's appearance in training. You can get some training techniques and magic tools to refine the fire. Techniques such as elixir training are not learned directly after you get them, but you have to practice them after you get them. A few suggestions.

Shouldn't Tony's piece be about weapon refining? What the hell is Zhuyoushu? Zhao Hailun is the one who is tired of treatment, right?

Great, I love watching Black Widow 😁

After three months off, he should be a eunuch!