When I Travel Through Shoji, I Can Go to the Anime Gourmet Show

The characters are too intertwined, the plot seems too confusing, and at the same time, many places are taken for granted. The author himself knows that there are other settings for these relationships, but the readers don't know, and they seem confused. Then there is the protagonist, whose cooking skills are inexplicable at the beginning. Although he writes a little bit later, I still feel that way after reading it (that is, the author tacitly assumes that the readers know and understand the original plot, but in fact it is not the case). In my opinion, the protagonist's first learning experience should be added before writing about Erina, instead of mentioning it casually later. Furthermore, the description of the background of the world of the little master seems too false and empty. I think it makes no difference whether to write it or not. It is better to write more character descriptions to let readers understand who these people are, instead of two popping up here and two popping out at the same time, which is too dramatic. At the same time, the presence of the protagonist and Goldfinger is too low throughout the story. It feels like they are not the protagonist but a supporting role that promotes the development of the plot. Then, it is not clear what the role of Goldfinger is. Is it simply so that the protagonist can wear it? And the talent of the protagonist, sometimes it doesn't work, but sometimes it works. The author, you write about the young master's father saying that the protagonist's talent is average, but because of other factors, he passed on the talent of Qi training to the protagonist, and what about the cooking skills? Does it mean that if you are good at practicing qi, you can cook? In the final analysis, the origin of the protagonist's cooking skills is not described enough. The places that need more description are described in one stroke, and the places that can be described in one stroke are described in detail. I don't understand the point. Your current plot is too generic, author. Compared with other plots in Yuanyue, the plot is much better, but there are still problems. It is still with the protagonist. The sense of involvement is too poor, and the characters in the plot appear too abruptly. There is no understanding process, or there is too little understanding process. (Or because the author assumes that readers know these original works very well, and does not take into account that readers may only know little or not at all) It is really baffling from the reader's perspective from beginning to end. Author, are you writing for yourself or for everyone to see? You have to consider the reader's perspective.

That's right, he only knows the spicy and spicy Sichuan cuisine, and he was judged to be a special chef in this novel. The comparison is with Little Master, which is equivalent to a fantasy world. Have you watched Little Master? In the four-year special chef evaluation of Guangzhou Little Master, only the protagonists Little Master and Lan Feihong were awarded the title. You are a special chef because you know Sichuan numbness and spicy food. Who are you insulting? I only know that Ma He La is probably better than any of New Oriental's graduating students. So, does that mean New Oriental has dozens of top chefs every year?

The plot is a mess, there is no connection between the plots, and the plot is confusing.

There are too many strings that are difficult to control, and the portrayal of the male protagonist is not ideal. The writing style needs to be improved

I felt dizzy while reading. I knew every paragraph, but the next paragraph skipped to another place and I couldn't connect.

It doesn't look good, it's messy, and it's confusing to look at.

The plot of the original book is very similar. It's the egg fried rice and mapo tofu that Xiaodangjia wrote about Shao An. There is also the three-egg dish from the Spirit of the Shokiji and the banquet at Jixingliao. Everyone has written it, so it should be omitted. How to say? Just like writing Douluo's Awakening of the Martial Spirit, you cannot copy the original work. Harry Potter cannot copy the sorting ceremony. If there is any disharmony, it is to pass the trial.

In fact, it's quite difficult to swallow. As soon as he appeared on the scene, he didn't say anything and just mentioned a lot of relationship background. Then he went to eat for no reason, and there was a game after dinner. It was inexplicable.

After listening to Chapter 3, what is this about?

First of all, the Chinese Little Master world integrates the magical chef Xiao Fugui as a supplement to the daily world. Why? Because Kaiyu directly controls him with the Eight Demon-Breaking Formations, it is better to let Lord K let Kaiyou in. The two major culinary circles in daily life have political backings. Secondly, why is the power of Yang Qi unclear? In the follow-up Ji comics, it is very clear that Kaiyu has the power of yin energy, and then I let Maru have the power of yang energy. Isn't this normal? The fusion of yin and yang can reach the next level, which is our culture. I have considered the basic settings, and I have made the background of the Chinese Little Master reasonable. The timeline is after the duck and before the kingdom of heaven. After the second duck, Japan no longer brought green fruits to the country. How could it be possible for Shiro to come to learn the art? Direct force coercion was like this during the Japanese occupation. Speaking of Potian, the young master's top combat power can only ignite a section of the Yangtze River, and extraordinary is not extraordinary enough. World view, I hate directly looking into the setting. I just said before that you have the power of Yang Qi. Everyone regards this as a kind of Qi ability. It is enough when the protagonist has the power of the special class and the top ten. The protagonist will fail. I hate invincible novels. There must be reasonable growth.

If you're not a buddy, you still need fan points to post a comment. Just subscribe to a chapter specifically for comments. I was persuaded to give up after reading a few chapters. I can only say that there are a lot of interpersonal relationships in the front, but it is too messy and the plot is incoherent. I only explained in the comments that I will learn it later, but the plot has no foreshadowing.

When I read Chapter 6, the protagonist immediately learned how to cook, I thought I had missed reading several chapters. When the author in the comment section said when he learned how to cook, I can only say that it was too sudden. At least there must be another learning experience that has been mentioned before! All I can say is it's too messy.

Baffling to read? The protagonist sometimes builds his own club, and sometimes tries to join other clubs but is rejected. Overall, it's still interesting.

The writing was okay, but it was so confusing that it made me think I skipped chapters.

How can I put it, if you haven't watched the anime and TV series sewn into the book, this book is not suitable for you. The author seems to assume that the readers have read those works. The characterization and introduction of the characters are very poor, and the three golden chapters are hard to describe in one sentence. Those characters can be drawn out slowly bit by bit. If you have to sew so many at once, can you, the author, grasp the power of your writing? It doesn't work at all, it feels very bad when written. There are too many supporting characters, resulting in too little and too thin description of the protagonist. Personally I feel that the author missed the point. After three scenes, the impression I got from the protagonist was that the grandma doesn't love the little transparent person that the uncle doesn't love. At home, the family doesn't care about the protagonist, but outside, he refuses others without understanding. Don't eat it even if you know it tastes bad. Your character is too weak and you feel like a sissy.

In the Food Captive World, the delicacies of level 0-2 are okay, but at higher levels, they are extremely poisonous for normal people to eat. The heat explosion is like a rainbow fruit. Just one drop of juice can turn a pool of water into delicious juice. What do you think about the concept? You have to ask why ordinary people in the Food Captive World have nothing to eat. It is because everyone has gourmet cells. The level 0 seasonings in the Food Captive World are all defeated in the Soul of Shokiji... One bite of such delicacies as gem meat can kill the girls in the daily series...

1. The text is written, which doesn't fit in well with fan light novels with neon backgrounds. It reads strangely, and what about you, classmates, and Tian Zhan... It's too strange. 2. Secondary issues. For example, Goro likes to be his boss with Utako and works part-time as a food critic. I don't understand how the former affects the subsequent plot. Do you only need contact information? The method of exchanging interests in the article is not the same as the future uncle. The latter said that this novel sets the status of food to be high, so the career is set this way, but after reading Chapter 70, I didn't see this except the author's reply in the comments. And the characters that are supposed to attract readers are nowhere to be seen except at the beginning. 3. The author's thinking is too fast. Many times the plot moves to the next link inexplicably, and I don't understand it at all. For example, at the beginning of Girls' Day, ① didn't I accompany the leftover women of Tekken and Wakako to participate in a sushi competition? Why did I say shopping for eight hours in the morning and afternoon later? ② How come there were suddenly more competitions for Suixingen cakes and peach blossom cakes, and Shiko (the protagonist's mother) was there to taste them. Where did that come from ③ The protagonist's skill level is average at the beginning, but he feels that he can go to other worlds and so on. How come he knows sushi and pancakes during the competition? Did I miss it when he learned it? Can the ability you learned in China be added to Japanese cuisine and related common sense...

The protagonist is wearing the little master's body? Just write it like this for the plot?

It's too complicated. Although I've read the original work, I wasn't that impressed. I think it's a bit complicated. I can only say that the audience is a bit small.

Maze Rice World Comic It will be animated soon The dishes in it are very interesting

Should I write a God of Cooking novel? I don't want to read a harem novel.

I have no desire to follow up anymore😮‍💨

The idea is very good, but there is no such weird and imaginative combination of the spirit of the halberd-eater and the prisoner of food. It depends on the author's writing style and whether he can tell the story wonderfully and explain it clearly. It is recommended not to write about Okita Huangguangzhu. The luminous cuisine is as if it has been added with fluorescent powder and cannot be eaten.

Why don't you go to Hannibal? I'm so angry. Isn't what my uncle Baht cooks delicious?😃

Zzz is really not what I need

Is there a heroine? Is it Erina?