My Own War Game

I have seen quite good works recently, but unfortunately many early settings have been abandoned in order to finish from the middle to the later stages. For example, the system of tokens to improve skills is no longer described. For example, the copy of the huge parallel world view that travels between two worlds is directly in the copy. As for why it can stay in the copy for a long time, there is no explanation and rationalization. After the robots appear, the world view becomes petty and petty, etc. However, as an author, it is very good for a complete novel. I look forward to improving it in the next part.

It seems pretty good to me, just pay attention to the logic Like 👍

Ah Minos, old eunuch😡😡😡😡😡😡😡😡

Sorry, I defected and went to the artillery arc next door because it is so damn good to read, and the content has a lot of useful information. It is very reasonable and has no outrageous cheats. I can only say that it is a very good-looking book.

It's very interesting, but I hope the author won't be a eunuch. For every book you eunuch, fewer people will follow your next book, and your grades will be worse. Then you will want to cut books even more, so don't eunuch

The writing is okay, but the logic has too many flaws For example: the reporter was wearing pajamas when she was bombed, the protagonist rescued her, and then the reporter took out the colonel suit from the box later. Good guy has an extra-dimensional chrysanthemum, right?

I feel bad that I gave my sister so much plot, but ended up giving it to a young adult version of the male protagonist.

Can you write less about robots, or don't write about them at all? Why don't you think of the Omnic Crisis in the world and stick to the dungeon world in reality, making it sticky?

I'm reading "The Photographer's Notes" and I've finished "The Digger". Looking for similar novels? Qiuqiu Spicy

How can anyone still read these 25 and 26 chapters?

After reading Chapter 20, I can't stand it. Under the pressure of survival, the protagonist always changes to all kinds of inexplicable things. The survival skills are pointless. It seems that he knows that he will not die. He changes to all kinds of messy things, but nothing is the key point.

It was okay at first, but from the time the doctor and lawyer appeared to the few chapters after Laura's appearance, I didn't want to read it anymore. . .

Make some suggestions. 1. The dungeon timeline should not be too large across servers. For example, you can write a few more dungeons before ending a battle. I was confused by the jump to World War II 2. There is no need to have the same Chinese identity every time, and it doesn't even have to be a man. You can refer to the crisis management game. 3. Focusing too much on the copy, the separation from reality is too serious. You can add more ties to reality, such as the queen giving you things in the dungeon. In the real world, you go to visit him before he dies, which triggers a series of guesses to achieve the effect of loading coins. 4. It's really too poisonous to send your sister as a gift. It's not that you can't send your sister as a gift. But your sister gave it too casually. This sister has been there since the beginning of the chapter, but a man's appearance was only given away after 10 chapters, and there is nothing outstanding about this man. It was as abrupt as Zhou Zhiruo from The Legend of Heaven and Dragon Slaying when he passed by an inn and suddenly fell in love with the waiter. You must give it away. You can write dozens more chapters to shape the supporting actor before giving it away. 5. Don't write about it in China, it's too sensitive. 6. You can interact more with celebrities in the dungeon, such as Churchill in the British dungeon, so that it can be mapped to reality and interact with British high-level officials.

The novel is well written, but there is a problem with the stance ~ He always sits on the side of the Angsa gang... Although Er Dezi is not a good guy, at least he has no direct conflict with us. It is more attractive to help Er Dezi to weaken and attack the Angsa gang and the shameless oil queen Grandet... Hahaha... I guess I will be sprayed by the Ergouzi who are raised by the West again...

Have you ever watched Little John Khan? Isn't every copy of the protagonist a hard-core ruthless plot?

The advantage is that the copy is well written and the writing style is great, making people want to read it. The disadvantage is that there are some minor logical flaws in the plot, but it is not a big problem if ignored. There is also a small point that is the gift of the daughter (?). The younger sister is portrayed very well, but is she with Sean later? In fact, I feel that this character is more three-dimensional than my sister. I thought she would be with the protagonist in the previous portrayal, but I still felt a little disappointed when I saw it later. Of course this is my personal feeling. Generally speaking, it is a good book with no flaws.

Pimp is a bit disgusting. In the early stage, various interactions with the younger sister are described, and then in the middle, there is a pimp and the second boy. Speechless. This book is not as good as the photographer's notes. The only uncomfortable thing about the Photographer's Notes is that the protagonist is just a spectator, and history remains the same without him. The best thing about this book is that the protagonist participated in changing history.

The writing is so awesome at the beginning, especially the housekeeping part, a classic YY plot.

It feels weird since the beginning of Robot. The desire to read is getting lower and lower, and the plot is becoming more and more fragmented.

The author's writing skills and plot are very online, but there is no clear outline. After reading it in one go, I can feel that the overall arrangement of characters (especially women) is unreasonable. The character of the protagonist who has not been frustrated at the beginning is actually much more likable than at the beginning. However, compared to the arrangement of female characters, readers really feel that In fact, it is very greedy. If you spend (a lot of) writing to describe the character, if it makes the readers feel like it, and then 'marry' him to a passerby who is actually a passerby character in my opinion, who appears in no more than 3 chapters, this abrupt arrangement is very corrupting. In fact, in my opinion, until The final main line appears quite abruptly, to the point of not being associated with people. Although it has been foreshadowing since the beginning of the robot, I don't think there is any connection between these characters (from the time I came into contact with the robot). Let's talk about the most disappointing thing, it is too excessive, and it does not match the previous ones. Point, the ending that was supposed to end more magnificently even made people feel disillusioned, "Is this all over?" Not to mention your main characters, and even the characters that some readers may pay more attention to, the characters that are more equipped with plots and scenes, there is no scene at all in the final chapter, the bond between the protagonist and the team members? Not at all, the truth about robots? This foreshadowing was not revealed, everyone knew nothing, and the story came to an ending without explaining anything. Especially the αβ and other things, they were all characters that appeared suddenly, purely for the plot. How did they come, how did they become like this, how did they save the world, all of which were not written. In my opinion, the plot should be explained in the main line, rather than being included in the extras.

Reading the comments section, I thought it was such a good book. After seeing chapters 25 and 26, everyone, is this book worthy of your exaggeration?

In the early stages of becoming a god, I felt that a lot of pitfalls were filled in hastily in the later stages. However, the biggest advantage of this book is that I still listen to the advice and be more thorough. If there are more female protagonists, be more straightforward. If you like modern times, just have more modern descriptions. I feel that the emotional line has been changed very well.

In fact, the writing is not as good as the previous one, but I still support it. I support it with nine votes. Has it been refined?

Is holding the grass and raising it finished?

Very good. I like the war plot very much. Although the emotional line is thin, it is still a good article.

The writing is sophisticated and the plot is reasonable! Three monthly passes support it, but the update is too slow. You need to support it first, otherwise it will be uncomfortable.

The writing style is still relatively immature, some parts are good, but other parts are just not that good.

The pseudo-infinite flow of crossing two worlds inevitably requires describing the relationship between the two worlds. The author chose a very old but commonly used routine (not in a derogatory sense), pursuing a smooth and smooth landing, and it seems that it should be successful. Generally speaking, it is an ultimate bucket style that passes all aspects. The bonus points worth mentioning are in the early and middle stages, especially the depiction of the war in the early stage. The depiction is relatively good. The only drawback is that it does not dare to use the knife, otherwise it may become a special feature. Of course, the protagonist is portrayed in the direction of an omnipotent agent, and the knife is not easy to use. In addition, the author couldn't write the story anymore, and it was obvious that it would be implemented quickly.

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