Ordinary Fantasy Adventure in Faerûn

Prologue: The writing is very tasteful. I believe that everyone who continues to read will be attracted by the prologue. After the prologue is finished, abstraction begins. In the first chapter, I took notes and started to introduce the cause and effect settings. Chapter 13, I finished writing (the settings were done) and went to bed. I will start looking for things to change jobs tomorrow... It took 12 chapters to introduce the start... Forget it, it's just the start, it's understandable. Then when it was released, around chapter 60, what happened in total? The protagonist killed a wolf and a bear, held a ritual upgrade, found the devil's car and killed the devil to save people, contacted the druid and then killed all the devils and asked the druid to contact the Harper, then went to Baldur's Gate with the Paladin, and then killed a bunch of Baal believers at the Harper's contact point, 60 chapters passed... A total of three small events, upgrading, fighting the devil, fighting the Baal believers, 60 chapters...

A rare non-human and non-dragon protagonist in DND. It seems that this is the only one in DND that writes about Tiefling, and his profession is still a barbarian. It's very good just for these points. Other shortcomings aside, it's at least very novel. I don't know what's going on in other DND articles. There are a lot of races that are either humans or dragons, and most of the professions are mage. Other professions and races are almost invisible.

At the beginning, the author clearly expressed his disapproval of brainless charades, but in terms of the design of charades, he went too far and said that "adding more points will make you stronger". I think the greatest pleasure in reading DND-type novels lies in the adventure in a broad world view.

Having read Abyss, Star Forger, Green Dragon's Nest, Illithid, Marry Sister (Shadow), and Throne of Shadows, do you know how much I look forward to this purebred DND, especially the background of Baldur's Gate 3, which gives me a feeling of playing for the second time, a familiar pleasure, and like the person above said, time will give the answer.

Damn it, why did you choose the physics and melee professions? The legal system is the benefit of time travel. Bye bye.

DND with Baldur's Gate 3 as the background has no poisonous points for the time being, and the writing is smooth. Although there are too many settings and the plot is a bit slow, for an old DND reader like me, this is already super exciting, especially since I have been blogging for a long time. They say the author is water, because you have never seen The Star Caster of Pagoda, which is known as the number one DND in the past two years. Although it is true, it is a real water setting. Unlike this book, the setting of the author can at least promote a little plot. I really, really hope that the author can keep writing. I will go to the post bar to recommend it to you. As readers, we don't want the author to generate electricity for love. Our sincere ability is limited, so we can only try our best to provide you with comfort. Come on. Time will give the answer. If this book has one million words written at the current level, it will definitely become popular in the dnd section. In recent years, there have been all nondescript dragon-style dnds. Serious dnds either have poor writing skills or too many poisonous points. Even food and grass are difficult to find. This book is already a classic.

It's overly gamified, and the first few chapters also have a lot of settings, which makes it unbearable for an old guy like me who has read dozens of pseudo-DND novels.

After seeing Chapter 14, I finally settled in Bengbu. I feel uneasy about killing a wolf in order to take office. If you are an indigenous protagonist, that is reasonable. Why are you pretending to be a modern person?

I'm very surprised. For me, what I like to see in online game novels is the process of character identity creation. This kind of straightforward and dense information output is very enjoyable to read. The first five chapters are so comfortable to read I don't know much about games such as Baldur's Gate. For me, it is a background similar to Heroes of Might and Magic or Diablo, which allows the author to have an extremely profound world as a basis for writing. What attracts me is how the author writes Some people in the comment area compared this book to Star Caster. In fact, it can be seen that the writing style of this book is slightly lacking. One shortcoming is what the protagonist's motivation is. If it is just a game of life, the upper limit is too low. The protagonist chose a tiefling for the strength of the character. This is an unusual character (abnormal), which undoubtedly requires higher standards for the story See the subscription, and rate it with Liangcao+ to see how well the author grasps the climax of the story.

This book is a long-winded one. The text seems to be rich in details, but in fact the information density is very low. A lot of space is wasted on repeating inner monologues, listing irrelevant and trivial environmental details, talking about cars and wheels over and over, etc., Which does not advance the plot well at all. The character-related settings (equipment, abilities) originally used to support ability enhancement and plot advancement are also the same as the inner monologue. They are all self-talking words that are repeated back and forth. Even a piece of equipment can write the same ability description over and over again in three or four paragraphs and hundreds of words, which makes people feel numb. The graduation thesis is here after starting from the starting point, right? In fact, if this book deletes the inner monologue Che Lulu's words, deletes half of the water's setting Che Lulu's words, and uses all the remaining content to promote the main plot or even the branch plot, then this book will definitely be a masterpiece in the genre. However, the author's writing style is like this, and it seems that he is trying to change it, but overall it seems to be inconsistent, and the rhythm has not changed much. I have entered and exited this book three times. I wanted to read this subject, but I couldn't bear to exit after clicking in. The author still has some writing skills, but his desire to talk nonsense is so overwhelming that he can't resist it. It's a pity. (I reasonably suspect that the author is a group setting party, and created a lot of setting materials such as environmental descriptions, social details, character biographies, and subtle inner changes, and then the hoarding addiction broke out, and he was reluctant to choose and throw them all into the text. Try to rape the reader's brain...) (Author, this is a disease, it needs to be cured 😅)

I've finished reading it all, and my opinion is don't read it. The description of Goldfinger in the early stage was good, but its true colors were revealed immediately. The author's plot has no tension, and the description of the fighting scenes is soft and waxy, which can be called bland. Along with it, the writing style is average, and the portrayal of the characters is mediocre. Even though the painting draws on various outstanding characters from Baldur's Gate 3, it is still a mess. It can be said that there are enough characters but none of them stand out. Regarding the improvement of combat power, I wrote whatever I thought of. There is a lot of nonsense. I suggest the author not to open a second book.

I really regret reading more than 150 of them, they are so long-winded! ! ! There are a lot of psychological descriptions at every turn. To do something, you have to go through, plan, change, analyze, determine, act, new changes, explain the reasons, explain the situation, psychological description. At chapter 10, I think it will be better in the future, in chapter 50, I think it will be better in the next chapter, and after 150 chapters... I can screw you! I've never seen anyone so verbose! ! I shouldn't see people who continue to spend money to buy content when they tend to be verbose, just like buying a fresh meat bun, with a meter thick skin and a few centimeters of filling! ! No matter how delicious it is, it won't even taste good in your mouth! Full!

For the first time, I understand the concept of "hydrology". It's really full of nonsense. Author, please teach me how to write a paper.

Man, to be honest, you really need to streamline it. It's not that your writing is not good, but the plot progress is too slow. I wrote more than 300 chapters for the plot of El Toriel. What are you doing? Escape from Toriel, go to Bode to arrest people, send people to hell, fight, and save successfully. How much is 300 chapters for this plot? When it comes to other novels, people are almost at the beginning of the founding of the People's Republic of China, and half of the short book has passed. The long paragraphs of your text are all descriptions, all kinds of descriptions. The protagonist thinks about the description, the narration description, and the description of the protagonist's abilities. We are here to read a novel, not a paper. The plot advances for 2 or 3 chapters, and then comes various descriptions in 2 or 3 chapters. Who can stand this? It is obviously well written, but the long narrations make the readers irritated and unable to concentrate on reading. It's just as overwhelming as playing a game for 3 minutes and packing a backpack for 3 hours. I don't dare to subscribe to all of them now because I really can't stand these description chapters of yours. Now I am reading your book with high blood pressure. Please simplify it, otherwise it will be gone.

I've read more than a hundred chapters, and there are some things I can't say and feel unhappy about. The main character is really unlikable. Looking at his inner monologue, several times he felt like the sky was falling when he heard a piece of news, and then he rushed to remedy the situation. It felt like the world was about to be destroyed without the protagonist. Later he said that he didn't trust those experts to save the city and had to take action himself. This protagonist really considers himself the son of destiny. The whole world must revolve around him, otherwise problems will arise. He also has various distrusts of others. How do you, a low-level barbarian, get the qualifications to think of everyone else as a fool? You just want to use foresight to fill some loopholes. This is written as if only the protagonist is actually taking action and everyone else is waiting for the protagonist to feed him, otherwise nothing will be done. To be honest, where does the protagonist's current strength come from? The ability is directly mixed into these major events. Author, you keep giving him various plug-ins, but the result is that the survival of the entire city is entirely pinned on a low-level barbarian. Don't you think it's ridiculous, author?

There are too many ramblings in Shizhang. Although the complete background is a bonus, but the more important plot development of the protagonist later, these backgrounds can be given to readers bit by bit, mainly for the story.

Very weak, 40% setting + 30% inner chatter + 20% branch line + 10% main line advancement

There were a lot of settings thrown in before, but it was a free chapter. As a result, the paid part became more complicated, and the plot was extremely delayed + a lot of watery settings. Although I was interested in the main plot, it was too terrible and I ran away. 1. The way of advancing the main plot is always changing. First, spend a few chapters to introduce the situation and several plans, and then re-use a few chapters to change the plan soon after the execution. This cycle is repeated several times. The main plot cannot be pushed at all. It is seriously suspected that the author has no outline at all. He thinks out one thing at a time and crazily crams branch plots. The branch plots use more chapters than the main plot. The main plot is very, very slow; 2. The setting is extremely low, from the character attributes, to the character attributes. , Background introduction, scene description, there is no need to write down the detailed skills and specific attributes of the protagonist and teammates, even other NPCs. When asking for a suitable hotel to live in, write down the details of each hotel, and then ask the protagonist to recall whether there is a game plot. In the hotel, ask for the location of companions + order a meal, chat with the bartender and introduce every detailed rule of the hotel (not related to the plot), explore a room, and make sure every piece of furniture in the room is included! Every one! And every piece of jewelry! Write it out in detail! It's like readers paid to see the game settings at the starting point; 3. There are a lot of descriptions of the protagonist's mind, and most of them are, in simple terms: gaining power is a bit floating, and then suppressing it. It's less than 20 words, but basically every time you get a new ability/skill/weapon, you have to describe it in four or five paragraphs 😅 4. There are many repetitive parts, and what has been written before is written again after a few chapters.

Obviously there are so many exciting adventures to write in DND, but the author was able to procrastinate and save a city for more than 300 chapters. The paid chapters are so expensive every day. It is a Western fantasy novel that has no sense of epicness at all. It is all about setting, so why don't I read the setting collection?

The beginning of "Inverse Within Inverse" can be said to be contrary to the heaven and the ocean. Others start to fill in the water in the middle, but you start to fill in the water from the beginning. You can create five chapters by creating a character. It is really unbelievable.

The settings in the first ten chapters were fine, and they were suitable for people like me who had never played before. But when I killed a wolf in order to advance in chapter 14, I felt so uncomfortable, so ashamed that I even prayed to God and begged for forgiveness? Author, do you have any serious illness? You must know that you are a barbarian with devil blood! I really can't stand it, so let's leave it at that 😐

Che Zhuluan talked back and forth. He could bear it at first, but then he became irritable and finally cursed. It is recommended that you read it yourself after writing it.

There are too many descriptions of psychological activities. In many places, things that can be mentioned in one sentence are added with a lot of modifiers and repeated thoughts and doubts. The setting and plot development are very good, but they are too boring. Many people have reacted to this. Doesn't the author consider streamlining and simplifying?

Laugh, Crazy description of setting, Do you think you can attract many readers who don't play games and don't understand DND to read your book? It was also written that the main character wanted a sense of immersion and turned out to be a alien + barbarian. I can't tell the difference between games and novels.

As for the Devil's Lair, the main purpose was to steal the Hell Mystery Box, so I wrote 50 chapters, talking endlessly about how dangerous it was in the lair. It's only been a few days since Chapter 150, and the main plot hasn't advanced much.

I actually wrote four whole chapters about opening a treasure chest, which is outrageous.

The setting is actually good, but it's too confusing. One thing is mentioned several times in a chapter, and unrelated things have to be thought over and over again. It's boring and I'm not in the mood to continue reading.

This is not like a novel, but more like a narrative about running a group. The whole article is rambling, not like a novel.

After reading it, I will post a long post as usual. Overall, this book is very good. As an author's first book, this book is very successful. What surprised me most about this novel was the smoothness and rationality of the plot, as well as the author's innovation in the combat power of Baldur's Gate's professional system. A large number of readers in the comments are dissatisfied with the author's description of battles, but I think that for a qualified and high-quality novel, the battles described must at least be reasonable and reasonable in the context of a transcendent worldview. And in the context of Baldur's Gate, would an adventurer incur life-threatening risks because the fighting scenes are not intense enough? I think the best fighting scene is the death of evil thoughts, which is real, unexpected but reasonable. The author seems to have his own thoughts and imagination for every battle scene. The author is actually creating a world in his imagination when writing a book. What we readers have to do is appreciate the beauty of this world. If you agree with it, love it. If you don't agree with it, please don't slander it. At least the author of this book, when you read this book, you can feel that the author really wanted to write it well. This is enough. You can create a fan out of love and write a good book, which already explains a lot This novel has a very natural and smooth design for the development and process of a story. From the origin of the protagonist, the rationalization of the game in reality, the innovation of the career system, etc., These are all carefully set up. The equipment design is also a highlight. In short, there is not much to say, it is a good book, above the passing line, it is a high-quality product

. Self-celebrity article. I don't know who the settings for the first four chapters are for.