The Secret Peeper in Konoha

The second author set up a Hyuga family secret technique "Blood Wine" Spending a Byakugan and the blood of some Otsutsuki descendants to get one cup (the protagonist can optimize it into three cups), which will absorb the pupil power of the separated family through the caged bird Each cup can create a pair of Mangekyo Sharingan. According to the book, there are five lineage clans. According to two people per line, it is 20 cups. This does not include the possibility of preserving the Byakugan of previous generations People who are not from the Hyuga family take five. Mortality rate 20 cups, half mortality rate, that is to say, if the Hyuga family is drained, ten pairs of kaleidoscopes can be made And now the protagonist has exposed this secret technique, and there are Hyuga branch families, Uchiha people on the scene People from the Fugaku and Uchiha clans, and people from the Senju clan There was also an example of the Hyuga branch opening a kaleidoscope The protagonist made three cups, the branch grabbed one and drank one, and the remaining two cups were in the hands of Uchiha. This...

The author sincerely recommends that you revise these two paragraphs. What do you say? It feels very funny. The branch guy has tied up the clan with other families in Konoha, one Uchiha and one Senju. This is forcing the branch family to death. Brother, can your protagonist represent the clan as a whole? Let's just say, this happened. First, Hinata must have shrunk the tribe, resulting in fewer Hyuga ninjas on the battlefield. Second, the suppression and confinement of the branch family, restriction and exclusion prevention, and third, it gave the branch family and Konoha how to deal with Hinata. As soon as the fourth chapter of the Golden Three Chapters passed, thunder exploded, and Uchiha Shisui came to snatch him. What is his identity? There is another Senju in the Uchiha family, how about you? Hinata, is it because they should or can participate in helping the branch family to kidnap the clan family? Also, he rushed out right after the secret technique was finished and didn't even have time to get three bottles of potion. So they ambush there, and what family does Shisui belong to? Uchiha, so did he copy? Bet on his character? Isn't this a joke?

After reading three chapters, I was speechless, but the secret spy exposed himself in front of everyone. The settings were flying, and he said everything with his big mouth. He performed a secret spy ritual to create a secondary blood wine to improve himself. He was actually raped. Then everyone knew that something made of pig's feet can make Hinata and Uchiha open kaleidoscope. It is extremely poisonous! …I can't stand it, block me again

If you write fan fiction without reading the original work, you are really talented!

It's rare to see the Extraordinary Goldfinger in Lord of Mysteries, so don't be a eunuch.

The plot is okay, but it's basically an unlikable and funny protagonist who keeps licking Naruto, with black written in white. The cheating protagonist can't defeat the so-called Itachi? There has never been a plan, just like a dog in the upper echelon of Hokage, the family cannot rely on it at all. Normal people have enough scientific research and can rely on the most loyal force, their own family, and the setting of this book is still the main Hyuga lineage. Obviously, he has the ability to open the reincarnation eyes for all his so-called clan elders...

Persuading you to quit at the beginning, drinking with your mother

It is best for the author to give each chapter a chapter name, otherwise many people will not read it at all.

I don't understand. People who peep into secrets shouldn't have fun hiding themselves. The more things you know, the more dangerous you are, especially if you put yourself in the sun or let the crowd focus on you.

The title of the book is seriously inconsistent with the introduction, and there are no chapter names, making it impossible to initially understand what kind of book it is. It is difficult to have the desire to read such a book.

No, you were just a rookie at the beginning, but you directly wrote about Otsutsuki in the required materials, and also directly exposed information about the Otsutsuki blood family? Is the protagonist really not afraid that Hei Ze will come to your door tomorrow?

The Byakugan belongs to the Otsutsuki clan, and the Magatama Samsara Eye is the ability given by the fruit of the sacred tree. The two are different

If there is no title, I will not read it.

No chapter names? If you don't give any psychological expectations at all, how can you tell a fortune before reading a book?

It was exposed at the beginning and he even talked about dogs, which is seriously inconsistent with the title of the book.

I won't complain about the plot, nor will I talk about the original work. The first few pictures of this book feel like the protagonist has opened the Wind Spirit Moon Shadow, and the Blood Successor is doing addition and subtraction. I would like to call it a cyber ninja. The Blood Successor is like a prosthetic body, which can be plugged in and used.

The first chapter comes straight out, what kind of Renaissance?

Snake spirit disease, the protagonist's operation is like everyone playing chicken and you playing landlords. Obviously the style of painting is wrong. What kind of secondary design is this? It's like a Gundam flying out of the primitive world, and Pleasant Goat using the Fist of the North Star. After rolling his eyes, the protagonist used six bloodlines to collect and so on. I'm afraid you have to change your life. I really don't know what kind of brain the author has. Originally, the two films were very incompatible, and the plots were copied mechanically.

The second version of the fanfic at least respects the original work. The writing is too messy

Take my advice and write a chapter title.

You don't even have a chapter title, so it's easy to turn away readers 😁

The wine of blood is nonsense, really nonsense, the Byakugan awakens the Sharingan. . . . Byakugan and Sharingan were separated from Hamura Hagoromo. In the ninja world, only Kaguya has the Byakugan and Sharingan. The Six Paths Sage and his brother inherited different bloodlines, and neither of them could awaken the Byakugan or Sharingan. If you come to him, you can return to Kaguya's ancestors? This is really outrageous. After returning to the ancestors for many generations, the source of this branch has not returned, but has returned to the main source. Why not go back to the ancestors of Otsutsuki? The Rinnegan is the evolution of the Sharingan. The Byakugan can only evolve into the Tsansei. The order should be the Tsansei first, then a Sharingan grows on Kaguya's forehead, then the Rinne, and then the Rinne Sharingan. This is nonsense

To be honest, many people who write time travel novels don't know which camp they are in. You are already planning to join the scientific villain camp. You even ran to rescue the Hokage series. You think you are going too smoothly and want to add more opponents, right?

And let Orochimaru go save Namikaze Minato. Tsunade was the one who changed to the one with hemophobia. This writing is too nonsense. Orochimaru has no benefits after defecting. It depends on whether he goes or not. What's more, Daishoumaru may not have any resentment towards Namikaze Minato. Although he no longer cares about this after defecting. But why should he save Konoha? Moreover, he didn't save Konoha but saved a "Hokage".

If you don't even know how to write chapter names, can you still write the main text well?

After reading a few chapters, is it true that the Hyuga tribe has awakened the Sharingan?

I think your writing is very good! I like both the setting and the characters. The protagonists I like here are all very happy.

Is the author a single female protagonist? Are there more heroines?

Bulk manufacturing of kaleidoscopes? Aren't you invincible? !