A Certain Half-Blood Prince of Hogwarts

A slow start means that the first hundred chapters are not very interesting, and a semi-invincible means that the author will boast that the protagonist is invincible. As a result, he will always encounter various accidents, and then he will be helpless and sigh.

It was too forcefully involved in the plot. When meeting Lily, Raven suddenly came to speak on his own initiative. To be honest, it was a little bit of a persuasion. Then, he briefly told Lily about the situation in the magic world, which was fine, but when Lily asked if he could go to the protagonist again, The protagonist replied "As long as you are free", and suddenly the smell of dog-licking came out, completely ruining the previous impression of rationality, intelligence and focus on improving one's own image. Even if a normal person is willing to communicate with outsiders, shouldn't the answer be "As long as I am free"? Being willing to communicate with outsiders does not mean that you are willing to be disturbed at will, especially when the protagonist was previously focused on learning potions and magic, and thought that women would only affect him in waving his magic wand. However, as soon as the female character appeared, he planned to run all the way towards a love brainstorming style? Also, the problem of the protagonist's name is also quite strange. I only read the first few chapters. I am not interested in which country the protagonist is a time traveler. But since he has traveled through time, there is no need to write two names all the time. Either use the original name or just call him Snape. Also, if Eric's name is not important, then there is no need to write it out. After all, do not add entities if it is not necessary.

Here's a suggestion, either change your name directly, or just call him Severus Snape Eric appears a bit inexplicably, was he Chinese before time travel, right?

This book repeatedly mentions the threat of Muggles, but in fact, in the original work, the threat of Muggles to wizards almost only existed in ancient times, and even in ancient times, wizards who had learned something regarded it as a joke. The original work mentioned that ancient witches would be deliberately burned on the rack, cast a fire-avoiding spell, and then play it as a game. After universal education, wizards' control over ordinary people has reached a terrifying level. In the original work, the highest levels of all Muggle countries are under the unilateral contact and protection of employees of the Ministry of Magic. They are not suddenly informed of the existence of the magical world until they take office, and they cooperate with various events almost unconditionally, mainly responsible for suppressing various news. Although the original work seems to have paid attention to this aspect for a while during the Grindelwald era, in fact, it has not touched on this aspect at all during the main line period. In all plots where Muggles appear, Muggles are basically either killed casually or dealt with with the Muggle Expelling Curse or forgetfulness. They cannot even retain their own will. On the other hand, no matter how much the pure destructive power is increased, it is just a tool in the eyes of others. Assuming that the wizards who protect the Muggle leaders are withdrawn, all the countries in the world may collapse due to the successive deaths of their leaders. To be honest, it is unreasonable that no Ministry of Magic is trying to completely control the world. But after all, Harry Potter is just a fairy tale. The descriptions of magic and Hogwarts are fascinating, but when it comes to the rigor of setting the history and world view, and expanding the stage outside the school like the seventh book, the descriptions in some places become lacking, and it is difficult to delve into it.

Speaking of which, your kind of golden finger with teaching and experience is more suitable for Hufflepuff, right? Obedient, easy to get along with, good at being around people. As for talent, your golden finger doesn't mean that it only comes from the church, it comes from teaching.

Snape when he was young, Mr. Ace now

This is the first time I've seen someone write about Snape

Are you writing a Harper fanfic and you can't even figure out the basic settings? Is the heald detection magic detected by whether the wand is casting a spell? It's that small range! Harry didn't cast a spell, and Dobby's spell directly brought Harry a warning letter from the Ministry of Magic. Harry can cast spells at will when he goes to the Burrow, because there are adult wizards in that area, and the Ministry of Magic cannot tell whether the caster is a young wizard. You can cast spells without a wand in Lily's house. Yes, the Ministry of Magic doesn't know what's going on, but what the hell is the difference between you and Dobby who broke into Harry's house? ? ? Shouldn't the warning letter be sent directly to Lily, the only little wizard in that range? Besides, you didn't bring your wand when you came? You are going to be in trouble if you bring a wand. Even if you don't have a wand, it is useless to cast spells. I just sent a letter to both of you. I don't know what the author is. You are a bit leaky What? Do you think you can avoid healds by casting spells without a wand? ? Have you read the original work? ? ?

First, Ollivander doesn't know how to use snake nerves to make a wand Second, he said he would not touch Lily, and then forcibly arranged the plot Third, the skills on the system interface at the beginning were all less than level five. How did the protagonist know that he could select entries at level five? Did you tell him? Fourth, the protagonist says that he can be powerful even if he doesn't know the plot, but he doesn't have the system talent, doesn't know the plot, and can he use love to influence the enemy?

It was well written, but the character of the main character didn't stand up. At first I thought he was cold but caring about his family. I felt that after I met Lily, the writing began to go off the rails, and the character of the protagonist began to collapse. At first, I really liked the character of the protagonist. 🙂🙂🙂Besides, I feel that the emotional scenes are written strangely. The protagonist doesn't look like a nosy person. You made the encounter between the protagonist and Lily so inexplicable that I started to feel that the character of the protagonist collapsed 😅😅😅

My evaluation is that it is neither good enough nor low enough to be neither fish nor fowl, the style is not dark enough, and the justice partners are just out of interest. The main character is a refined egoist who does whatever he wants, but he has to pretend to be righteous because of society's opinions. In fact, he doesn't care about justice or injustice at all. On the other hand, the routines of novels are also high or low. After setting up an entry system at a young age, one has the ability to make money as an adult, and the magic ability is also far ahead of his peers. It is only a matter of time to make reasonable use of the system to create invincibility. As a result, he went to create a strategic protagonist, a small undercover pure-blood group just to learn magic and bribe goblins to obtain information. This high-risk operation did not bring any qualitative improvement in ability. Character creation is rigid, Lily is purely based on labels, and changing her name will not affect the development of the plot. The so-called righteous little white flower does not see how justice is done, and giving Lily a protagonist with no brains and a die-hard loyalist also has no meaning in characterization. There is not even the process of cultivating a die-hard loyalist to become a die-hard loyalist after getting along with each other for a few times. It is said that the first priority is higher than one's own three views of justice. Pure and cool writing does not explain the combination of moves just to set up a wave of people around him to be dead-set. The portrayal of the protagonist is also stiff and boring. Lily trembles when he comes and goes, and Lily feels cold. Lily looks at her expression. There is nothing new and is completely formulaic. Lupine also shows his face but does not follow up. There is a branch line, but there is no foreshadowing or description throughout. Why mention him if there is no branch line? The same goes for Peter, who uses every possible opportunity to label him poor and cowardly, and then writes about his details, but cannot see any linear connection with the protagonist. It is a complete explanation of how to write picture-based novels. When the protagonist reaches a certain scene, he will describe all the details of the scene. Someone will talk about what the person is doing, and then change to the next scene to continue the description. There are a lot of characters mentioned, but in fact they are basically irrelevant to the plot. I can only say that it is inexplicable.

I've only just read it, but the name of the protagonist really stuck in my throat, and I really don't understand what the author was thinking.

I think of something like this when the protagonist threatens Penny: You can imagine that after you comment and criticize a novel, another fan reader attacks you, puts a knife to your neck, and threatens that you must regularly write praise reviews for the novels you have criticized before, otherwise you will be tortured to the point where you are worse than death,,, this seems like haha

Just find a suitable reason to participate in the plot. Isn't it better to be generous? Just say that I don't want to get close to you and immediately forcefully create a conflict to get to know Lily. If you get to know Lupin, why don't you just have multiple friends and multiple paths? In order to bury a nail in the four-person group, the protagonist's strength at this time still needs to care about these guys? Why do some authors always like to write protagonists who are both realistic and established?

Fuck, it couldn't be just like what the big guys said in this chapter, it was taken from the international version of Penguin Novel and put as a starting point.

You and Lili are very good. Why do you have to add a female protagonist? You pay to see so much for nothing...

The love process composed of this kind of long psychological description is really embarrassing. Does anyone agree?

How should I put it? There are no big poisons, but there are constant small poisons. It is better to rewrite and optimize it.

I thought it would be very novel, but I only got to see the beginning. The love between a man and a woman cannot be avoided, the romance novel cannot be avoided, the boss mode cannot be avoided, and the disgusting plot cannot be avoided.

It was okay in the early stage, but by the second year it had completely collapsed (for Ravenclaw). It looked like a fairy tale, its combat power was completely broken, and the plot was messed up. It looked like a fairy tale novel adapted from Harry Potter. It was a complete waste of money and not recommended.

Why do you have to have a snake farm? If you see a snake farm, you will be persuaded to leave.

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Laclauvin's plot is quite interesting, but this kind of writing is extremely toxic if you don't accept it, and there's not much to say about it. Obviously it can be written as the relationship between anti-inflammatory and medicinal medicine, but the relationship between men and women must be adjusted. If it is not accepted in the end, it will be a big poison.

Eyes as deep as the sea Eyes as deep as the sea... Like Nima, I only read a few chapters, and every time the protagonist appears, his eyes are as deep as the sea Eyes as deep as the sea. Isn't the author's writing embarrassing? Is this really a recent book?

The rhythm is very smooth and the reading experience is great

The entry system is the only point of expectation. The plot is not up to par. It is unimaginable that there are still people who are undercover, high-ranking, and independent.

Has anyone read similar novels in English or foreign languages? It looks awkward.

No, if you want to rule the magical world, why don't you go to the Snake Yard? Do you have to play hell mode with all enemies in the world? What's wrong?

The writing of Jufan and the heroine is very boring.

The protagonist is a time traveler and is not the reincarnation of the original owner. Why is the female still Lily? Come on, I'm not afraid. Isn't it a coincidence? Besides, Lily's original novel doesn't feel that good.