A Certain Half-Blood Prince of Hogwarts

A slow start means that the first hundred chapters are not very interesting, and a semi-invincible means that the author will boast that the protagonist is invincible. As a result, he will always encounter various accidents, and then he will be helpless and sigh.

It was too forcefully involved in the plot. When meeting Lily, Raven suddenly came to speak on his own initiative. To be honest, it was a little bit of a persuasion. Then, he briefly told Lily about the situation in the magic world, which was fine, but when Lily asked if he could go to the protagonist again, The protagonist replied "As long as you are free", and suddenly the smell of dog-licking came out, completely ruining the previous impression of rationality, intelligence and focus on improving one's own image. Even if a normal person is willing to communicate with outsiders, shouldn't the answer be "As long as I am free"? Being willing to communicate with outsiders does not mean that you are willing to be disturbed at will, especially when the protagonist was previously focused on learning potions and magic, and thought that women would only affect him in waving his magic wand. However, as soon as the female character appeared, he planned to run all the way towards a love brainstorming style? Also, the problem of the protagonist's name is also quite strange. I only read the first few chapters. I am not interested in which country the protagonist is a time traveler. But since he has traveled through time, there is no need to write two names all the time. Either use the original name or just call him Snape. Also, if Eric's name is not important, then there is no need to write it out. After all, do not add entities if it is not necessary.

Here's a suggestion, either change your name directly, or just call him Severus Snape Eric appears a bit inexplicably, was he Chinese before time travel, right?

This book repeatedly mentions the threat of Muggles, but in fact, in the original work, the threat of Muggles to wizards almost only existed in ancient times, and even in ancient times, wizards who had learned something regarded it as a joke. The original work mentioned that ancient witches would be deliberately burned on the rack, cast a fire-avoiding spell, and then play it as a game. After universal education, wizards' control over ordinary people has reached a terrifying level. In the original work, the highest levels of all Muggle countries are under the unilateral contact and protection of employees of the Ministry of Magic. They are not suddenly informed of the existence of the magical world until they take office, and they cooperate with various events almost unconditionally, mainly responsible for suppressing various news. Although the original work seems to have paid attention to this aspect for a while during the Grindelwald era, in fact, it has not touched on this aspect at all during the main line period. In all plots where Muggles appear, Muggles are basically either killed casually or dealt with with the Muggle Expelling Curse or forgetfulness. They cannot even retain their own will. On the other hand, no matter how much the pure destructive power is increased, it is just a tool in the eyes of others. Assuming that the wizards who protect the Muggle leaders are withdrawn, all the countries in the world may collapse due to the successive deaths of their leaders. To be honest, it is unreasonable that no Ministry of Magic is trying to completely control the world. But after all, Harry Potter is just a fairy tale. The descriptions of magic and Hogwarts are fascinating, but when it comes to the rigor of setting the history and world view, and expanding the stage outside the school like the seventh book, the descriptions in some places become lacking, and it is difficult to delve into it.

Speaking of which, your kind of golden finger with teaching and experience is more suitable for Hufflepuff, right? Obedient, easy to get along with, good at being around people. As for talent, your golden finger doesn't mean that it only comes from the church, it comes from teaching.

Snape when he was young, Mr. Ace now

This is the first time I've seen someone write about Snape

Are you writing a Harper fanfic and you can't even figure out the basic settings? Is the heald detection magic detected by whether the wand is casting a spell? It's that small range! Harry didn't cast a spell, and Dobby's spell directly brought Harry a warning letter from the Ministry of Magic. Harry can cast spells at will when he goes to the Burrow, because there are adult wizards in that area, and the Ministry of Magic cannot tell whether the caster is a young wizard. You can cast spells without a wand in Lily's house. Yes, the Ministry of Magic doesn't know what's going on, but what the hell is the difference between you and Dobby who broke into Harry's house??? Shouldn't the warning letter be sent directly to Lily, the only little wizard in that range? Besides, you didn't bring your wand when you came? You are going to be in trouble if you bring a wand. Even if you don't have a wand, it is useless to cast spells. I just sent a letter to both of you. I don't know what the author is. You are a bit leaky What? Do you think you can avoid healds by casting spells without a wand?? Have you read the original work???

First, Ollivander doesn't know how to use snake nerves to make a wand Second, he said he would not touch Lily, and then forcibly arranged the plot Third, the skills on the system interface at the beginning were all less than level five. How did the protagonist know that he could select entries at level five? Did you tell him? Fourth, the protagonist says that he can be powerful even if he doesn't know the plot, but he doesn't have the system talent, doesn't know the plot, and can he use love to influence the enemy?

It was well written, but the character of the main character didn't stand up. At first I thought he was cold but caring about his family. I felt that after I met Lily, the writing began to go off the rails, and the character of the protagonist began to collapse. At first, I really liked the character of the protagonist. 🙂🙂🙂Besides, I feel that the emotional scenes are written strangely. The protagonist doesn't look like a nosy person. You made the encounter between the protagonist and Lily so inexplicable that I started to feel that the character of the protagonist collapsed 😅😅😅