Don't Mess with Senior Brother

I didn't realize it when I read Spy Play House before, but now that I'm reading this book, I realize that the mind-reading characters help the novel more than the comics. The best thing about this book is that the story and narrative structure are beautifully handled. It starts directly from the basically invincible state, and then starts to thread the thread with the great suspense of the end. It skips the adaptation period and the grassroots growth period, which are the most obscure paragraphs of all time travel novels, and directly reveals the ending of training and upgrading. Instead, it uses puzzles as the driving force, and it also establishes a light novel style relaxed tone, so that the book starts very quickly. The shortcomings of this approach are also well dealt with. The freshness and digestion process of the world view can be supplemented through the perspective of the junior sister. The role of the junior sister also has unquestionable character attributes, which is rare among the majority of starting writers who are not good at writing non-facial female characters. It can be said that this book finds a good balance between narrative and explanation. It's no wonder that the author seems to have started his career in light novels. The most interesting parts of the book are indeed some of the dramatic character interactions built around mind-reading. The mind-reading setting can forcibly connect the bright side to save the world and take care of the children, and the dark side to set fire to the sharks. It is indeed the same fun as the spy family with the big spy behind it, and it is even better, because the novel uses large sections of psychological activities in more ways and is more adaptable. In general, this book looks and feels like refreshing juice. It can be read very easily and very smoothly. But this is not a completely positive evaluation. Although refreshing is good, people in the world have different tastes. There will always be people who like to drink spicy wine and drink fizzy soda. Whether intentionally or not, this book is somewhat reserved in its in-depth characterization. The most striking example is that there are obvious gaps in the fighting scenes, and the descriptions are quite satisfactory. In addition, as a travel system writer, you can actually write a burial system and a 1% dodge rate bonus at the starting point, which are extremely low-level settings without dying suddenly. It's really your fault. If you think about it carefully, this may also be some of the differences between the Qidian Shuangwen series and the Japanese light series. In order to achieve the pleasure of heavy oil and heavy salt, the former often puts great effort into the novelty of the system, mechanism settings, humanized feedback and the main thread behind the scenes, and then creates one climax after another through extremely exaggerated fighting scenes and foreshadowing; while the latter pays more attention to character dialogue, and most of the content is for the sake of moderate interest and the purpose of the whole book. So this is not actually a shortcoming, because there is actually no need to change. It just makes people wonder whether the author has the skill to consistently describe the merits of these 100 chapters.

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Good news: This book is quite interesting🙂 Bad news: Why did I encounter this problem when I was in the seedling stage😭

Please be dedicated in emotional scenes, junior sisters will be junior sisters, and princesses will be princesses. Currently, the scenes with my junior sister feel more natural. The princess's is too routine.

Without looking at the IP, I guess the author must be from Guangdong. Most Guangdong authors have a common wording habit, using some outrageous words or words to enhance the fighting atmosphere. The three words "most ferocious, evil, and domineering" are the most used. Occasionally, some authors will also intersperse "Fist of the North Star" and Cantonese 😂😂😂

If you haven't seen it yet, then if you guard the ant nest, you will be invincible.

I feel like the human race is too cowardly. If it weren't for the protagonist Dragon Emperor, who almost killed all the younger generation, would he be the first to break up the fight? The protagonist can kill him but he still stops him. He really just goes wild on top of the human race. Don't worry about offending the dragon race. He is obviously looking for trouble to kill the younger generation. The emperor of the human race also expressed his position. If it really succeeds, what else can the human race do to enter the top ten races? The younger generation will be killed soon.

A pure and refreshing article, with an invincible start, clear narrative, and good pace. It's a read.

(￣へ￣) There are hundreds of ethnic groups, so I don't ask for more. Isn't it too much for you to write down the names of 60 ethnic groups? Let me start, Terran.

It felt like the protagonist was being taken advantage of and was being led by Taiyu (junior sister) from beginning to end. First, the protagonist led the team to Lingyuan, and the junior sister stepped in. They found an abnormality in Lingyuan and started running around. Secondly, the junior sister is the reincarnation of Taiyu (perhaps the person who seizes the body), and she will definitely not be the silly and sweet character she appears to be. If he hadn't met his senior brother, in 25 years, Taiyu would have been extremely talented and amazing. At most, he would have reached the imperial realm, and the protagonist's cheating would only be at this level. Secondly, reading people's minds is a bit unbelievable. No one else can, only senior brother can, and his mind can be revealed. Besides, the protagonist has traveled through time, so whether it's a fairyland or a supreme plateau, the protagonist is an extraterrestrial demon. In the conversation with the fairy sword, we know that powerful immortals and demons have three bodies, the past, the present, and the future. As long as you are a creature in this domain, you will have a past, present, and future. The protagonist is an extraterrestrial demon who only exists in the present. This is also the reason why Xianjian did not see the protagonist after 25 years. Cultivation is essentially about taking over the creation of heaven and earth and going against heaven. The devil in the mouth of the immortal is a "human" who cultivates and breaks through the realm after training. However, he is called a devil because of his different stance. According to the setting, the system exists to allow the protagonist to bury the world that is about to be destroyed, not to save the world. In fact, the protagonist's life trajectory for the first 25 years was carried out under Taiyu's secret control. In the next 25 years, Taiyu entered the game personally. After all, the gods have placed chess pieces everywhere in the fairyland. The demon clan was laid out more than 5,000 years ago, and the Divine Tree of Ten Thousand Tribulations is just a small minion. Other gods must have bigger plans. It is impossible for the immortals to have no countermeasures. And Taiyu placed the treasure on Ye Yu. Taiyu claims to be an immortal, but in fact he is no different from a demon. If you set up a trap in secret, your intentions can be punished.

Listening to my heart again, there are really a lot of people writing in this genre recently.

The later stage was all assembly line, and the pretense was not well written. The vest of the Wrathful Spear Emperor was not released in the whole later period. It was written too quickly. I looked at the male protagonist in confusion as he killed that one and this one, and then the inexplicable ending ended with the eunuch. The feedback on the level of pretense was a little better than in the early stage. From the first to mid-term, only the vest of the Corpse Demon had a role, and the Wrathful Heavenly Lord had no role at all.

"Spoiler Alert" —— —— —— —— —— —— —— The first half is quite exciting, but after ten years of seclusion, the protagonist is cheated and crushed, and there is basically no suspense. It can be said to be a model work with a well-written world view, interesting ideas, and a messy outline. But it's also strange that the main themes are "salvation" and "invincibility", so there is no way to delay time through Gou. Once ten years pass, can a genius be called a genius if he is not invincible? Can you survive and grow if you want to save the world? As for the situation where the combat power has skyrocketed, firstly, there are no opponents, and secondly, there is no routine, and you will get tired of pretending to be a pig and eating tigers and getting slapped in the face every day. So in fact, the outline should be revised in the mid-term, either reluctantly, turning it into a short story, finishing it as soon as possible, at least with an ending, or completely revising it, and kicking the system in the mid-term, at least limiting the protagonist's combat power, so that the development can be more interesting. But that's what writing novels is like. If you start writing for an idea and the outline is not carefully revised, the probability of being eunuched in the end is very high. This is especially true for some novels with interesting themes. Because the detailed outline is not perfect, the middle and late stages are weak, and either the combat power collapses or the character's personality collapses. I can only say that I want to write a long novel. If I don't go through several months or more than a year of preparation in the early stage, it will basically be unfinished. In the early preparation stage, I have actually written a full length novel. The rest is to fill in some details, which will not affect the outline, so it can be serialized and updated continuously. And this book obviously has no detailed outline. Once the protagonist's fighting power collapses, the outline also collapses. The early preparations are all in vain, and no matter how exciting it is later, it cannot be continued. Anyway, the junior sister is quite cute. Although the emotional scenes in the later stages are omitted, there is no doubt that the junior sister will be with the senior brother in the end. Let me take this as the ending in my heart. This is my review to commemorate the happiness of this short week. May lovers eventually get married.

Don't write your emotional scenes, it's too lame

😂The comments section of the latest chapters made me laugh. They said that the character of the protagonist was broken and that the protagonist was too weak. No, when did you think that the protagonist was not a good person? Haven't you always had a sullen personality? Where did it break? That group of people are the same as the trumpet, they all read this book first, and then Kuku said, you are more inferior than the protagonist.

Author, I feel like there is something wrong with your book, but I can't explain it clearly so far. In this case, you can send me 180 pictures of your stored chapters, and I will analyze and study it for you!

New book sent? I can't even find the homepage. When I read this book again, I got it from the classic complete version of Qidian. Classic Complete Edition × Classic Eunuch√

The reason why the novel collapsed is very simple, that is, it introduced the concepts of the law of time and the long river of destiny, and violated the grandmother's paradox. Looking at the novel world, whether it is the popular Perfect World or those unknown novels, once the grandmother's paradox is violated, it will be unfinished, because everything else can be justified. This cannot be justified, just like talking about a dead person as a living person, how can it be justified?

Although the author ends here abruptly, I think it is a wise move. In my opinion, the author's writing power starts to drop off a cliff from 70%, and about 60% of the last 30% of the content is hydrology. Looking at it separately, the author's original idea may only be enough to write a short story, and he can finish it in time. Although it is not perfect for this book, it is not completely unfinished.

Sweeping the grave to pay homage to my lovely little junior sister

It's just a short story, but I still can't control my writing skills in the later period. In the early stage, I only know three short stories.

QQ reading victim is here😭😭

Good-looking, exciting, and the first heartfelt novel you can read.

Who of you are interested in the character Xia Caiyu? I'm even a little annoyed by this character.

It's outrageous that CS made this into a video

I don't know when, "IQ Online" became a dispensable label and the choice of a few authors I don't know when, looking at the choices of most authors, you came up with the idea of ​​writing yourself At every moment when inspiration strikes, you write down the creativity, looking forward to using this creativity to add to your own work Every time At a moment when you are not understood, you open your book and look at the protagonists and supporting characters, as if you have become them, and they have become your close friends And one day, you suddenly find this comment in the vast sea of books, and suddenly encounter this book, you may get a friend, get an understanding, and get some ideas...

Let's write another book that is similar to affectionate. This kind of book is still very popular. Like the flower gardener before, the concept was very creative, but the pace was slow.

What if?

Writing about the Second World War, the invincible China and the armed forces tortured the small days and the great powers

The dual timeline setting is still very interesting, but it does create a sense of fragmentation because Ye Yu's strength has grown too fast. Moreover, for the existence of the master level, the battle is mainly a competition between the supreme Tao, rather than a competition of realm strength. As a result, the clone of the master cannot defeat Ye Yu, and the main body will definitely not be able to defeat Ye Yu. There is still a long time before the arrival of the Great Lord, which makes it impossible to write the work further. After reading the author's outline, I feel that the author wants too much and is too perfect. I think the system can be made by the immortal emperor, who needs to regroup his power to resurrect or wipe himself out in this way. The end of the work here turns to Ye Yu replacing the immortal emperor as the creator or guardian of the entire world, leading the heroine to live in the central chaotic zone. Then the story line of the junior sister can be written to death. The coming of the masters causes the world to collapse. The junior sister transforms into the sun and moon to protect the world and adds a bunch of powerful buffs to the protagonist. In the section of defeating the clone, Nancheng Yang appeared too suddenly, and I remembered the perfect later battle. You can reduce some of Ye Yu's strength, give the opportunity to take action to Shili, and then Shili dies in battle. In this case, after one crisis is resolved, another bigger crisis can be triggered. The upper limit of each attribute of the protagonist can be set to 99%. The last 1% should be buried after killing the corresponding master and obtained from the treasure chest. It can be guaranteed that Ye Yu is invincible against enemies within a period of time, but has slight weaknesses against enemies. I don't know if other readers have read the book "The Immortal Is Not Serious", which is also a dual-timeline setting. The setting of the junior sister is similar to Lin Suqing's setting, but the latter has finished the book, so it is better in terms of setting, protagonist's growth, and control of the rhythm of the work.