A Mage in Another World

There's nothing wrong with the writing, but the pace of the story feels a bit sluggish, and the selling point and enjoyment of the book are unclear. It took several chapters, but the world view has not been developed. I know that the author wants to have an adventure in another world, but that kind of writing needs to be based on a strong plot of small chapters. To be honest, the author's opening plot of rescuing the villagers is relatively mediocre, which makes it easy for people to lose their passion while reading. Western fantasy either has a distinctive style and is aimed at a specific audience. For example, when I read "Into a Different World" before, the author's story was relatively slow, but the style was very distinctive, and it felt a bit like ordinary fiction from another world. That kind of Western fantasy has a fixed audience. Then there are things like writing about Azeroth, which all have a specific audience. If you want to write well in pure fiction, currently you can only follow the ancient route, such as "Canglong", which is successful in defeating monsters and frequently stimulating the readers' senses. Of course I am not pouring cold water on the author. There is nothing wrong with the author's writing style. It is recommended to strengthen the design of the plot and make it more bright and not too dull. Come on💪

Although I really want to see you continue to record videos, but since you have transformed into a writer, let's go for it.

Follow-up reading is really important for a new book. I hope you can read it to the end. If you want to read it, I also hope you can read it to the end. Thank you all. If the results are good, it will be updated immediately after it is put on the shelves. If you say too much about anything else, you will cry. Look at my profile picture. Guys, please have some tea.

Damn it, you cut off my monthly vote and cast it in vain

The book is good, but it feels a bit too good-natured.

I still cut it, but I still have a good conscience after publishing the copy.

Didn't I leave a comment? Is it really selling or something? Your previous book was very good. Why is it that this book seems like a different person? You can write this kind of intellectual plot.

Come on author, I followed you from the last book, come on!!!

That's it, okay?

As for the author, you haven't coded for 20 days. Hurry up and start a new book.