Mage? Spell Engineer!

After reading about 20 chapters, I felt it was not what I wanted to read. When I read the synopsis, I thought it was a light novel, but it turned out that there were very few plots about learning magic, and a lot about adventures or involvement in other events. As for the plot, there are no major flaws, but quite a few minor flaws. For example, the controversial saint and duck pet appear in the article. The plot arrangement here is very abrupt and the characters are not established. The author's reply on this point in the comment area is: I understand the controversy and accordingly reduce the plot and appearances. I feel that this treatment is quite satisfactory. The problem here is not dissatisfaction with the characters, but dissatisfaction with the lack of logic in the plot. Instead of reducing it here, it is better to add a little patch in the previous text and give it a process to make the characters stand up. In short, the main reason is that the subject matter is not to my taste. This book can be regarded as a good source of information, and those who like this kind of subject can also read it.

Author, your book is not smooth to read. When will it be improved?

It's good for the author to write at his own pace. I support it.

The theme is pretty good, the power system is pretty good too, but it just doesn't look good. What's up with the sudden appearance of a coquettish and cute saint?

It is a good book in all aspects, but there is one thing that I don't know how to describe. It feels quite strange. I don't know why. The protagonist seems not to be here. He is somewhat hostile to his motherland and the empire. He is obviously a secret intelligence officer, but he does not take the initiative to report the information every time. Even if the boss comes to ask, it is just like squeezing out toothpaste, one-third or two-thirds. Logically speaking, the protagonist is an innocent imperial man and has joined the agency. Reporting the information should be good for him, and the main character The information that Jiao got now was not detrimental to him at all, but he chose not to report it every time. For example, when he found the secret text on the leather armor, the protagonist had no idea of reporting it, but the two same intelligence agents were hiding next to him. Only when you discovered it did you know that, logically speaking, these secrets were knowledge smuggled from the empire. As an imperial agent, you should report this matter out of reason and for your own sake. The organization will definitely reward you if they find out.

Kano's first annotation: Already read, nonsense (It is just Rorschach's experience and conjecture of using water-making technology in the secondary plane, it has not been strictly verified, and it is not equivalent to the relevant settings of this book)

After reading Chapter 20, overall, there are no major flaws, but there are constant minor flaws, which makes it uncomfortable to read. What makes me complain the most is that the protagonist lacks actual combat experience and is not prepared with a set of skilled spell combos. So he goes on a team adventure with strangers to act as a guard? Just to save money? What nonsense

More than one book friend complained: What kind of engineer is the protagonist? In fact, it was said at the beginning that he was a college student majoring in sinkholes who traveled through the tiankeng, and the scope has been narrowed down to biochemical environmental materials, not the two major guardians of civil engineering and machinery, and not the otherworldly space machine... So some book friends said that the protagonist does not engage in large-scale construction or build floating cities, but he is trying to sell dogs. Working shifts in a factory, drawing blueprints until your head goes bald, typing code... Those who do these may all be engineers. Perhaps it's because civil engineering has been relatively popular on the Internet in recent years, so when people saw the title of the book, they immediately clicked in to see how the protagonist used magic to remove dust. But I think it's also very interesting to bring other engineering majors into a different world. In particular, chemical reactions and chemical engineering processes are very compatible with magic and alchemy. Rorschach's understanding of the spellcasting process at the beginning is an analogy to chemical reaction kinetics regarding basic reaction assumptions, drafted normality assumptions, and rate control step assumptions. The panel also reflects the idea of ​​unit operations (of course, book friends who have played a certain game with the prefix N may feel familiar with it, and it is indeed one of the setting references). I don't think it is necessary to put the above into the text, especially the beginning. It is simply a crime worthy of death for using textbook hydrology. Regarding the content of engineers, another example is the use of thermodynamics to solve the problem of improving the direction of steam engines. This is too fucking engineer-Carnot, the original author of the Carnot cycle, was once considered an engineer and not qualified to be called a scientist (sad). To be honest, I don't think I handled this paragraph well. I didn't want to make a long discussion like a textbook, but I didn't seem to understand it clearly. But it is true that what Rorschach solves is an engineering problem, and it also provides a power basis for the subsequent stable supply of energy to the teleportation array. After learning the lesson, I later put the discussion on "Energy-Ether" in the book review area after illustrating it with Rorschach's notes. (The starting point is in internal testing of the illustration function. I will use pictures to insert them into the text in the future.) Obviously this is the idea of ​​thermodynamics, including equilibrium state, free energy, etc. Having said so much, everyone in the industry must already know that Rorschach majored in chemical engineering and technology before traveling through time. The protagonist's panel will continue to evolve around the theme of "spell engineer". As mentioned at the end of the introduction, Rorschach will strive to "make people's lives better" whether using magic or the professional knowledge brought by time travel. This is what engineers are contributing to the world regardless of their subjective wishes. Thank you all for your companionship, and I wish you a happy reading!

Druyatz (form in dream) A corner of the forest Leaves of three trees Winter painted on the Tower of Stars

Rorschach went to the Holy Kingdom to study, and then developed a series of new technologies. After returning home, he didn't mention anything. When the war started, his country suffered the loss of having no intelligence and technology, and the enemy suffered the dividends of his own technology. Although he was a time traveler, he was still his native motherland. In the early stage, he promoted that the training of mages in his motherland was more advanced, but in the later stage of the war, it was stretched. You also suffered the dividends of the empire's training system. The simple patriotic feelings in my heart are difficult to accept in recent chapters. Goodbye

The somewhat inexplicable Holy Mother... Throws a bad-hearted thief at the door of a farmer's house to see if they can save him. It gives people a feeling of... Uh... Moral kidnapping of others. Throwing the problem to others. This thief is still a cult... And may bring danger to the farmer.

Mage, data flow. Characterization II. The author of combat descriptions has a certain talent, but the language is not concise enough. The plot description is confusing, obscure and weak in logic. Give this book a death sentence and a six-month suspended sentence.

One thing I discovered is that the more niche a book is, the more people will criticize it, and most of the criticisms are untenable, which is what he himself takes for granted. Looking at the comment section, the novel did not make me feel stupid. Those comments showed my stupidity vividly. I felt like a student without much life experience, who just thinks whatever he wants, like a studio assembly line. After reading too many brainless cool articles, the novel needs a little bit of brain to connect with the previous thoughts, and then I start to find faults.

In the middle period, there were more and more literary plays, and almost no magic projects were written. The protagonist has been promoted to an intermediate mage, and there is no immediate description of how much he has grown.

The rhythm of the plot is not right, it is too deliberate. Wherever the protagonist goes in the first 30 chapters, something will happen. Moreover, when the words cult, saint, and ritual are put together, I can know what is going on. It is too cliché.

I can tolerate characters with no memorable points, blunt transitions, a lot of theories, and inexplicable plots, but I can't bear the reduction in the proportion of spell development and application. I just read the first few chapters and found it quite interesting. The potential of noiat-style spell editing and free DIY cheats is very good, but later on the editing and development of spells Almost all of them are mentioned in a few cursory sentences, almost all of them are involved in business, attending political banquets, etc. The adventures are also written in a bland way, and the protagonist has become a technical leader. It is completely selling cat meat with a dog's head (in case the author thinks that the cover is a dog's head and wronged him). Now that the book has been written so much, I guess I can't change it. I suggest changing the title and introduction directly.

Chapter 17.18 Feels like there are some problems with the handling First of all, the protagonist almost belched when he was being chased and was unconscious for three days Secondly, two of the three days of being unconscious were taken care of by a saint from the religious order who was chasing him. The origin of this so-called saint was picked up, so his teammates felt relieved to let a girl of unknown origin The girl goes to take care of the protagonist who can be said to have saved the life of the entire team. Whenever the girl has a bad intention, the protagonist will send it Thirdly, when the protagonist asks the leader of the caravan what the goods are, the leader replies very strongly, "I know this is not good for your future." But in the previous article, in front of In the description of the chase part, there is no explosion of the protagonist with a high probability of annihilation. There is no mention of the leader's back-up plan. This character has a feeling of being in a nest and does not feel that he is very powerful at all Finally, facing the fact that he almost died and his life and death were completely in the hands of others, and The protagonist's response to the possible dangers brought by the unknown caravan is that he doesn't react at all. He does whatever he needs to do. He usually uses magic to chop vegetables. There is no sense of crisis at all. At least the author does not reflect it at all. There is no description of the protagonist's desire to improve himself. Instead, he inexplicably finds a duck as a pet. The sense of fragmentation in the description is too strong. It feels like an event has passed away, and there is no follow-up that should exist after the event or the growth that the character should have. I wrote this in the middle of the night, my mind is not clear and my language may be a bit confusing. Sorry, I hope it can give the author some help.

After reading Chapter 30, the protagonist stopped learning magic and turned to playing wilderness survival battle royale...

Why do some novels nowadays always feature supporting actresses who are cute and coquettish, silly and sweet, who are beautiful and have great backgrounds? Does such a person really exist? I used to feel fine when reading novels with supporting characters like this, but now I just feel awkward and poisonous.

(If you have read Chapter 47) Dear book friends, this is Cucumber. Thank you very much for reading this. New readers and new books. Your continued reading is my greatest encouragement. As the book progresses to this day, Rorschach has gone on a journey of about 100,000 words, from the academy of the empire to the magic tower of the Holy Kingdom. The real beginning of the story I imagined took place in the royal capital of Valuvana. The royal family is deeply in huge debt, the food harvest is poor, and bread in the kingdom, especially the royal capital, is getting more expensive day by day. The captain of the guard and the nobles, the new finance minister Necker and the upstart wealthy businessman behind him, the red prime minister Du Plessis and the church, the three parties revolve around His Majesty the King to deal with or intensify the crisis on the stage of the royal capital. At the same time, focusing on the protagonist's (graduate) life in the Tower of Stars, Rorschach started from studying steam engines, began to try to combine the theory of the past life with the magic of another world, and immediately started a new adventure. Through Rorschach's perspective, you will see the attitude and role of the magic guild and spellcasters in the kingdom's crisis. In the future, Rorschach will intervene in the kingdom's storms or storms in a more powerful and proactive manner, together with the forces I have not mentioned before. I believe that some book friends have discovered the prototype of the Holy Kingdom and the corresponding historical period. Of course, I will imagine how a world with magic will have a different trajectory, instead of lamely reenacting historical dramas. But I must review that in the recent update, the plot is too messy, the rhythm is broken, and the characters appear too frequently. Objective factors: There are too many things going on recently, internships consume manuscripts, and updates are affected by frequent and long experiments and courses. From a subjective review, I have insufficient experience in writing, and my control over the rhythm of writing is not strong enough. Sometimes I even get sick of wanting to play The Riddler. I tried to take advantage of the opportunity of Rorschach and Tasia going shopping to connect the beginnings of various events, but I was afraid that writing too many words about a character like Valan would make it seem slow and accelerated, and the final transition was very abrupt. In short, this explanation should not have been written, but in order to make up for the previous mess, I still go over the plot with my book friends in order to better continue the journey of the mage. After reviewing these, I would also like to say that after Cucumber has written the outline, Rorschach will go to more places, experience more stories, gain more power, and most importantly, bring more changes to the other world. This is the author's first book. I will code it carefully and give it a happy ending. In addition, there are often mistakes and omissions when switching between the mobile phone and the PC. Thank you to the book friends for correcting them. There is no second round of recommendations this week, which is a bit low, but I receive comments and recommendation votes from book friends every day. Having everyone by my side keeps me going. Thank you. ps: I originally put it in the "works related" section, but the app always starts with "works related" which affects the reading experience, so I just put it in the comment area

The writing is immature and many paragraphs are inconsistent in context.

After seeing the first few chapters on the shelves, I would like to share my reading experience. It was quite interesting when I was studying spells at first (before chapter 25). Then after entering the royal capital, I wrote a few chapters about the academy plot but didn't see any significance. Then I went to the secret realm. The secret realm was also confusing, with a bunch of inexplicable supporting character names thrown at people's faces, and the battles were unremarkable. After I came out, I went to some party and there were a bunch of supporting roles. It's not that there are many supporting roles, but it's just that these supporting roles have nothing memorable and are boring. It's like riding a carriage and encountering the kingdom chasing Floran. I don't even remember who this dear friend is. Then the plot returns to my hometown and investigates the Black Forest. It can be described as a stagnant water, lifeless, without any waves, too bland. Your system is actually very creative, right? Instead of digging into it, you write some very bland and ordinary stories. To be honest, I had no problem just reading the beginning and end of each chapter, because the plot didn't move very quickly and there were no emotional ups and downs. Come on

And the author still refuses to change, so he has to stay there. Every reader who sees these plots really doesn't understand what the plot is? Obviously it doesn't involve any long-term issues, just change the dialogue between the characters, but he doesn't, and even ends up quarreling with the readers, as if he thinks that the plot is very clever and logical.

Take a look at it for yourself. I personally feel that the advantage of this book is that it has no logical poisonous points, which benefits from the author's science student thinking. The writing in the early stage is smooth and not poisonous. I haven't seen this kind of book for a long time. It is worth recommending. I have to complain about some authors from Qidian. They are digging for gold every day, and finally find a subject that interests them. They make some logical flaws every day, and it is useless no matter how good the subject matter is. Good subject matter ➕No logical flaws ➕Normal protagonist, you can read it no matter how you write it

Cucumber, you idiot, just finish your investment before leaving... We haven't received the full return on this investment.

Although the protagonist's ability setting in this novel is very interesting, it makes people look forward to it. However, the protagonist's goal motivation and plot advancement are very vague. The protagonist graduates from the exam. He can join the army with excellent grades, or he can enter the academy through his connections with classmates. Why choose a spy? He also said that it was cool to be a spy, but he didn't know that he would become a dirty and disposable tool like "Yakushi Kabuto"? In order to save money, I skipped the airship and joined a caravan to become an adventurer. I was followed and chased all the way. Even though I already knew that there was something wrong with the things my employer was escorting, I had a showdown with my employer, so I still wanted to go with them. Do you have to put yourself in unnecessary danger to reflect the specialness of the protagonist?

This book is readable, but there are two problems. First, there are too many private goods. I still can't figure out which group between the magic guild and the church corresponds to the real historical French Revolution. After all, these people are not ordinary priests or scholars, but human tanks with supernatural powers. There are not just one or two people in this group. Why does the Holy Kingdom (France) still follow the script of the French Revolution without any changes? This is no different from writing a fan directly copying the original work, and there is no change at all. Written mage research as real-life research, this is okay, but with less professional terminology, it is best to make it easy to understand, after all, the audience is here. The second problem is water. Many people say that the main line and straight background are scattered everywhere, but I feel that this may be the first time the author has written a book that cannot grasp the rhythm and plot logic. It can be read by changing the order. The biggest problem is water. Maybe the author feels that this thing needs to be written, but I have read the novel for so many years, and it is clear that the author's invalid word count has reached 60%. This invalid word count means spending = resentment. I know what it means by looking at the chapter names, and the French Revolution is a very long volume. I have read a lot of books, and I can tell many of the foreshadowings without even reading them, such as the Club, the Artillery School, the Bastille, and the Third Estate. The early stage of this book is like a magical version of the French Revolution. The script is exactly the same, and it has extraordinary abilities and subsequent development. It's like not having extraordinary powers. This is not for nothing. I don't know what the main plot is. It seems to be fighting against the cult (this thing is abstract enough). The plot is straightforward, the twists are blunt, the protagonist is traditional, and he will be tortured at key points. This is an ancient way of writing. What is the purpose of your book, writing about magic to change the world? Exploring a lost god? What do you rely on to attract people? How many people can understand the many research memes written? I came here just for this, and I'm tired of looking at it. The summary can be read, but 60% of the chapters can be skipped.

There have been a lot of things lately, and I can't even add more to it, so I don't have time to color it... TT Book friends, let's just read it. Book friends are welcome to color the line drawing and share it in the book review area! (However, Old Singer is not a beautiful character, so book lovers may not be interested, haha)

I finished reading it for free. I originally read it for research and construction, but there was very little plot related to it, and it was more like an adventure, which didn't fit well with the title of the book 🙂

Well, the author's writing style is difficult to describe in one sentence, which makes people have a headache.