Qingyu Xianyuan

The author, who is a native and a novice in society, should hurry up and increase the experience of the protagonist. No one likes to watch the character slowly grow, so if he still writes like this, what achievements can he achieve?

I want a large number of disciples to be unparalleled, but the description details are weak and the principles of the magic are unclear. I want to describe the cunning and ferocious demon cultivators and wipe out all the family monks, but I don't consider human nature. There are too many NPCs who die without emotional conflict. If your brother dies, he will be rescued immediately...

There are really few normal articles about cultivating immortals now. They are too boring. They are all funny articles. I feel that the author of Xianfu is not very good in character but his grades are still good. The character of the protagonist can be different from the one without it. Haoyu is also a eunuch. Come on, the author. After you finish writing, you can read more about the Virgin Mother and the protagonist eunuch.

I gave up after reading Chapter 11, there was nothing interesting to watch! Running account!

The setting is quite contradictory. There are still hundreds of decades of good life at the age of 60 and 90. How can you give up cheap labor? Are all sects charities? After cultivating it for so long, you just don't want it because you can't build the foundation? ? ? Then why not just select those with good qualifications for training? Also, the protagonist, Uncle Jiu, is obviously a person who cares about family ties. No matter how unworthy the protagonist's qualifications are, it's impossible for him to remain indifferent for ten years! ! !

The plot is cliched and not smooth, and the writing style cannot even guarantee the basic narrative.

This writing is too boring. The first chapter is just a running account. Did you eat the one on the left? What did you eat in the other one? Where did you eat today in the next one?

Everyone's preferences are different. I don't like underworld cultivating immortality. I like traditional spiritual cultivation.

Ah? Why did you finish the book? 😰

At this stage, it seems that the author's writing skills are too weak and it is difficult to write good articles!

Are mortals now considered traditional immortals?

The author's writing skills are probably at the level of junior high school students writing essays.

It is recommended not to write a bunch of settings at the beginning. It will be difficult to read. Just explain it slowly later.

I have no idea what the first three pictures are about.

Please revise it carefully. There are too many typos.

Seventy is youth. Sha Mo Xiu, the writing is very childish. The writing style is like that of a junior high school student.

In fact, now there is no need to write about people with poor spiritual abilities. We have seen more people with poor talents. I would like to read novels about protagonists with good talents.