Starting with Becoming the Magical Girl Yan Lili

There are quite a lot of stitches, but you have to pay attention to the details. Huaqiang Knifeman did it premeditated, and it was not because of the accidental incident of buying melons. The owner of the melon stall originally had a grudge against Huaqiang's family. What you wrote is not detailed enough. With Huaqiang's character, he should go to other stalls to buy melons when buying melons, and then go alone to resolve personal grudges.

If you don't want to watch it, don't watch it. As the title says, don't make each other disgusted.

1. The barrage is a bit too talkative 2. The description of the appearance is too dense (I know it looks good, but it can't be eaten. Jpg) 3. You write that a man wearing a woman looks like a woman wearing a woman, and people are confused The rest of it feels okay (ps: It's really the ultimate stitch monster)

This way of writing, the female video author must have switched jobs.

In fact, it is more suitable to be published on a female channel. There are too many descriptions of appearance, and the dialogue is also childish...

This author and this ingredient... A eunuch wholesaler

The first dozen or twenty chapters are okay, but after reading too much, you'll get better at it! Slowly, the smile gradually turned cold, and then slowly started to feel a little annoyed in my heart. Annoying how I feel. . .

Is the description of the protagonist's appearance a bit too dense?

I feel like the author is not very good at writing female characters

I feel like we don't need so many characters. There are so many worlds. If you integrate them all into one, can you write them?