Portable Shelter

How can I put it, the subject matter is good, but as a native of the wasteland, my vision is limited. Most readers like to read time-travel novels, and of course I do too!

The subject matter is relatively attractive, but the indigenous protagonist is illiterate and uninteresting, and the refuge is unplanned. Just like dawdling, avoid the thunder

How should I put it, this is a novice article written by a novice, come on.

The subject matter is good, why not give shelter an intelligent system. I am an indigenous person and have no vision. There is no intelligent system. If you don't call this a shelter, you should call it an iron box. As a shelter, it should have independent energy, water circulation, and food cultivation functions. When you are good, the only function is to eat iron.

Where are the new books? Urging the author

I would like to give the author a suggestion. You can add the settings and plots of heavy-duty mechs and part of the radiation of the past generations, so that you don't have to think about the plot. You can find these games in many places, which can save brainpower and time, and you can also play games to collect materials.

I'm already preparing a new book.

Have you played the new games of Phantom Beast Parlu and Mistlock Kingdom?

The Aboriginal protagonist looks so tired.

Juggernaut is a game I played when I was a kid. Come on, author 👍

The comic series "The Ship Girl of the Slums" and the comic series "Black Box Silent Terror" are recommended to everyone

So far, it is still in the development stage, with no super-expansion or collapse of combat power (of course, it is impossible at this stage). Some medium and large bosses have appeared, and the protagonist has relatively clear goals (repairing tanks, recruiting teammates, upgrading bosses, and exploring the secrets of the wasteland). If I have to be picky, there are still a lot of good people in the wasteland world. The thighs of big companies are willing to stretch out to hug me. The initial favorability value is really high. The other one is the first chapter, which is a summary of the background of the whole story. You can just expand it a little.

It's very beautiful, very to my liking, and the setting is very interesting.

I asked the editor for guidance. In fact, I should have cut this book long ago. It should have been cut when it had more than 100,000 words. I was so stupid that I wrote so much. But I was reluctant to write it down and wanted to write it down. Therefore, the editor said that if I want to continue writing, the first hundred chapters need to be revised. Please give me some suggestions (preferably accurate to specific chapters and plots). For those of you who are still following, let's finish this book together. If we don't change it, there won't be a single reader of this book. I am posting this suggestion without any intention of cutting it off. I want to change the previous one. Wouldn't it be fun? If you ask for it, I will change it. But for big problems that involve the entire book, you can't change them. You can only rewrite the book. (Thank you 1, young reader, I love Ahua. The suggestions made me realize that the superpower system cannot appear in the wasteland, it is not suitable.)

I really like the subject matter, but as mentioned before, the indigenous people are not humane, so I feel it is not to my liking.

The author's account logging out gave me a cake

Is the protagonist a time traveler? ? ? ?