Dreams Lead to Ancient Times? I Am Really Not an Ancient Taoist Ancestor

It may be said that you are not good at writing, but you are very good at building a large framework. The content setting is very good. You have your own style, but don't you think the emotional scene is very abrupt? There's a bloody feud and a rich life, and the entry point in the library is very awkward. My hometown was destroyed. There was too little description. The same thing happened once in the future. You described the main storyline of the Sanqing characters very well. For other plots, such as Teacher Lu, you gave very little space. They only appear for a while at the beginning, and then become full of excitement at the end. Your description skills are very good, but the integration of this detail is very awkward. It was forced into it by you, just because you think he needs to appear in this chapter. It was very abrupt to read.

Author, your writing is really good. Please keep it up. This article has soul and bones and is a great success.

Update quickly

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The Heart of a Child is well written, but its popularity may not be great. Everyone is very busy and tired. What I like to read is the kind of standard light-hearted and refreshing novels, sometimes with a little passion is better. The male protagonist of this book said that it sounds like a child's heart, but what I don't understand is that children's minds or brains are not working well, and it is not easy to think 🔥.

The story setting of this book is quite attractive at first glance, but it gets a bit embarrassing later on. We have been fighting with the Ten Thousand Tribes outside the Great Wall for so many years, and now a lot of people come out to lick the demon tribe during the peace talks. I am confused. With so many traitors, how does the Great Wall persist?

The protagonist's qualifications are so good that the leader of the Three Purities is too outrageous and out of character for the Three Purities. For a big shot at that level, what unparalleled qualifications have you not seen before? If you take a step back and say that everyone is a person who created the world, what kind of bones can't be revealed? Anyway, as long as you are within the Taoist system, it is impossible to be better than the Three Pure Ones. Under the Three Pure Ones, there is no difference between whether you are a born saint or a mediocre waste, regardless of the differences between relatives and friends.

It feels like it is imitating the book on the ranking list, but this routine of shocking the first-level newcomers to the 100-level bosses is going to collapse later. 😅

Stop writing about that daughter! It's really annoying! Although I don't know what kind of character you want to create for your daughter, so far, this daughter has behaved like a lawless brat that no one can control. You wrote Yuan and gave her all your wealth, which led to even the protagonist being suppressed in some cases. It's really exciting to watch these days.

I have read most of it I remember that I should be a little bit qualified to evaluate it I don't understand two points. One is that I am inaction, but in your novel, there is action everywhere, and you have to intervene in everything. In fact, it can be said that your personality is different. I can't compare your book with what is in other books, but you yourself also wrote Wuwei in the book. After you accepted the disciple, you didn't see any Wuwei. The second thing is that the protagonist can obviously preach and improve the overall strength of the human race, but he doesn't. He just wants people to call him when he is in danger, and he comes to resolve the disaster. It's a bit funny. Isn't the human race raised like this a waste?

Stop writing about your daughter. If my daughter behaves like this, she will be slapped to death.

This protagonist has a strong sense of separation. First, his family was broken up and then he was adopted. He has lived so long. At best, he has a pure heart. At worst, he has no brains and has been beaten less by society. You said that you wrote about a chaotic world, where ordinary people just kill when asked, and the protagonist is neither ruthless nor stunned (not to mention killing that guy from the White Tiger Martial Arts School, that thing is called self-defense or over-defense). He talks hesitantly and murmurs. It is puzzling that he has been able to grow up healthily all these years. The summary is that before the protagonist appeared, the sea was clear, and after the appearance, the people were in dire straits. The author wrote it very well, but the writing was not very anthropomorphic.

The main world is written like shit. It is full of trash and is protected by the halo of the protagonist.

Finished reading it in one sitting. It's very contradictory. The way of showing off in the ancient times is combined with the themes of the new era, which is both refreshing and embarrassing. After thinking about it for a long time, I can only say, Tuguitou

After reading more than a dozen pictures, I feel that the protagonist in this description does not have a pure heart, but a pure brain that is not well developed, with slow reaction and poor understanding. It feels like ancient novels forcibly foreshadowing the story just to show off.

You keep urging me. The author is also a human being. She also needs to rest and update constantly. Isn't she tired? But what does it have to do with me if she is tired? I suggest you update until you die if you are tired. Thank you!

Alas, the plot is too old. Even if you, the author, have added more imaginative plug-ins, it is like an apple with this gorgeous appearance. It looks high-end, but it is really ordinary to eat. Personally, I feel that perhaps the novel has developed to this point. What we readers need is no longer a plot, because too many people have written it. What kind of plot have we readers not seen? What we need is empathy. We need the words written by you, the author, after careful thinking, not by you, the author. As for the text of the plot, I hope that the author can make the work more realistic, but please listen carefully. It is truth, not realism. The addition of novel elements is not unreal, but if you can make it real and unexpected, I believe it will be more popular. Finally, the author please stop being stupid, stop pretending to be cold, and stop using empty and gorgeous words to build up the power and mystery of the protagonist. This will only be counterproductive and make us lose interest.

I ordered a few chapters and asked, is the protagonist's psychological activities still so young in the following chapters? The book has the flavor of Lao Yan, but this psychological activity... Is so difficult to read

It is tasteless to eat and a pity to throw away.

Brother, please give me one more chapter. I'm dying. Please, brother. I feel like there are ants crawling on me. I feel like I'm shaking all over. I can't breathe. Please, brother, just give me one more chapter. Just one more chapter. I'll never touch it again. Please, brother. Really, just one chapter. I swear I'll never touch this thing again. I really can't bear it anymore😭😭

I did write well at the beginning, but the further I read, the more my head hurts. Take a look at what you wrote.

No, the routines in this book are too old. I can't stand it anymore. I can guess the next step with my eyes closed.

The more I write, the more messy it becomes, and it starts to get messy after I put it on the shelves.

The author really doesn't know how to write emotional dramas. The male protagonist's experience started in a small town. He dreamed of the ancient times. He spent more than 7 years chopping firewood. He worshiped the emperor, built a jade tower, fought against the master, destroyed the heavenly man, killed the earthly immortal, fought against the greats, counted among the gods, and finally became immortal. The female protagonist called her mom. Obtain the transcendent blood that the protagonist does not have, the flat peach that the protagonist could not even imagine in the early stage, and eat and spit out the innate body that the protagonist has acquired after hundreds of years.

It's not bad, it's a cool story, it's just high-quality, it's a bit messy at the end, but it's not too bad.

Overall it's good, but the ending is a bit rushed. Also: author, you are still so young, stop being lazy and start the book! ! ! !

To be honest, the ending is a bit bad 🙂, but the beginning is still okay. The outline is confusing, the writing is a bit stuck, and the final characters and everything are a bit nondescript.

The more I look at it, the more familiar it becomes. Eunuch Li, is that you? 😱😱

The character of the protagonist. . . . .

I've given you all the monthly pass for one month, how about a little extra?