Snow, Cold-Blooded and Hot Troubled Times

Edit: Waves of hot air wafted from the tea on the table. The man sitting in front of the wooden table looked across the fence at the vast white land. "It seems to be extremely cold this winter," the man thought. "Zhao Wu, Zhao Wu" then he shouted loudly to the door. "City Lord, what are your orders?" "Take someone to follow me around the city. The nights this winter are particularly long, and I feel a little uneasy. I also want to see if the soldiers are lazy." With that said, the City Lord put on a mink robe coat and picked up the spear and sword beside the door. Zhao Wu smiled and said, "Don't worry, city lord, these brats don't dare to let down their guard." "I'm still a little worried, just let me go and have a look." "Follow your orders!" After saying that, the two of them went out, followed closely by a team of guards...

The language logic is basically smooth, but there are still flaws. In fact, it is very taboo in novels to write too convincingly and have too many details. It will give people a feeling of redundancy and opacity. You should learn Chinese imagery painting, leave more white space, and strive to be concise in language. I'll just take your first paragraph and make some changes for you. Can you compare whether your writing is better or whether I revised it better?