Give Some Shock to the World of Immortality

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The overall imagination is great The individual characters are also well created The plot is also interesting But the ending is not yet done well...

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The ingredients are very complicated, but I can understand them all. As a high school student, I think it's time to start again.

Zhou Li has been harmed by sugar pills his entire life. When eating with Tang Wan, he always thought that it would be nice if she was a man. If she caused trouble, he could beat her to death. When she took a shower, she always thought, what if her hair will clog the floor drain and I have to clean it out? She put the body-heated panties off her head, and his heart was pounding. He thought, this person's clothes will not have to be washed by me again, right? What if she asks me to wash her skirt and school uniform by hand? Then Tang Wan came out of the bathroom wearing a red mandarin duck bellyband and an jade bracelet on her snow-white jade feet. She sat on Zhou Li and asked him if he wanted to go to Wushan at night. Zhou Li said to go away and don't want any money. She was silent for a while and said, brother, I really like you (cross out this sentence)

Can the author withdraw from the group and let me in?

If I hadn't met Tang Wanwan again, maybe I would have no nostalgia for this world. Tangwanwan is really cute. She's cute when she smiles, she's cute when she's eating, she's cute when she's sleeping, and she's cute when Zhou Li hangs her up while doing all the dirty work. So I can't live without Tangwanwan. If it weren't for the sugar-coated alarm clock in the morning, I might never want to open my eyes. If I hadn't been accompanied by Tangwanwan's voice at night, I wouldn't have wanted to finish the day. Tangwanwan's eyes are so smart, it would be great if they could reflect me. Tangwanwan's smile is so gentle, it would be nice if it could only bloom for me. Tangwanwan's hair is so soft, it would be nice if I could stroke it as much as I want. Is the existence of Tangwanwan really allowed? Just silently reciting Tang Wan Wan's name like this, I feel like the happiest fool in the world. I really think about Tang Wan Wan so much that I go crazy. I think about Tangwanwan when I lie in bed, I think about Tangwanwan when I take a shower, I think about Tangwanwan when I go out, I think about Tangwanwan when I walk, I think about Tangwanwan when riding in a car, I think about Tangwanwan when I eat, I think about Tangwanwan when I sew a horse skirt, I stare at the Tangwanwan on the roadside, I stare at the Tangwanwan across the road, I stare at the Tangwanwan on the beam of the hanging house, I stare at the Tang Dynasty performance art photo ball, I stare at the portrait I stared at the Tangwanwan in Zhou Li's house. I stared straight at Tangwanwan all the time, scanning every Tangwanwan that passed by me like a radar. I really felt like I was possessed. My thoughts about Tangwanwan seemed to belong to Tangwanwan. I was so lonely! I was so lonely! Why didn't any of the Tangwanwans in the world belong to me? Do you know? Every night late at night, my chest feels very hot. I have an illness and I have to sleep with sugar pills. I can't stand it anymore. Sugar pills, my sugar pills, sugar pills, my sugar pills, sugar pills, my sugar pills, sugar pills, my sugar pills, sugar pills, my sugar pills, sugar pills, my sugar pills, sugar pills, my sugar pills, sugar pills, my sugar pills, sugar pills My sugar pills, my sugar pills, my sugar pills, my sugar pills, my sugar pills, my sugar pills, my sugar pills, my sugar pills - "Zhu Qianyun's Stay Diary"

Why are there more and more novels with very abstract introductions nowadays?

I'm so sorry, I've been banned from posting in the forum, so I have no choice but to come to the comment section. When did it happen? Damn it, can you explain it to me?

Jackie Chan's Adventures and Calabash Baby, this isn't much of a change. Electric current can cause eternal destruction and destruction.

Was the author's brain blessed by an ancient god? All chapters are alive, haha

I would like to call the protagonist of this book and Lan Qi the two newborn heroes🤗🤗

Only now I noticed that Tang Wan's character card is the female protagonist and Zhou Li is the male protagonist. This is so right! I want to watch Zhou Li fight against Tang Wan 😍😍😍 Sister Qianyun, Zhou Li is weak, please push him. I'm so perverted. What I said above has nothing to do with the real person. The person who posted the article is me on the Internet.

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You are right, but "Bringing a Life Shock to the Immortal World" is a brand-new novel independently created by Oh Si. The novel takes place in a fantasy world called "Daimei", where people selected by the ruthless workers will be awarded the "eyes of the ruthless workers" to guide the power of the ruthless workers. Zhou Li will play a mysterious character named "Zhou Li". During the adventurous adventures, he will meet companions who are all extraordinary and unique. Their fighting spirit and patience are amazing, and their secret weapons will give you unexpected surprises. Together with them, you can defeat powerful enemies and find your lost relatives (referring to Tang Wan's second brother) - and at the same time, gradually discover the truth about "hard work".

Nan Beng, the Tiger Talisman in Chapter 190 makes the male and female protagonists become good and evil and fall in love with each other. Is the doppelgänger relationship a taboo? It's still an independent individual. This one is really not as good as the brave one. Although it stretches the crotch at the back, there is no poisonous point.

The foreshadowing was pretty good. I thought I could have a tough time in Taiying, but I ended up falling apart after watching it. My relationship was greatly affected. The most pitiable thing is the tool man Han Wang. In order to promote the plot, his behavior is called abstract, extremely fragmented, and the turning points are sudden and subversive. I suggest the author overhaul it. Plot fun and plot madness are not the same thing. Please control them.

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Because of Oh Si's brain bomb operation, he wanted to post a free single chapter update after the completion, but the starting point did not allow the completion to be posted, so the book could not be updated. Please search for "Bringing some freshness to the world of cultivating immortals and shocking the final chapter". Oh Si will update the final chapter of cultivating immortals for free here.

The author is sick and said that the next chapter will be released for free after he recovers. However, the free chapter cannot be released without completion, so I will finish it first.

After reading the beginning, I want to ask, are there any brothers in sleeping clothes in Chapter 500? I'm a little confused. It's a pity that such a good brother can't sleep. But if you fall asleep again, it feels difficult to proceed with the plot.

To be honest, I'm not disgusted with the job of sexual reassignment, but don't you feel uncomfortable when you describe this kind of psychological gender male with words such as "cute", "pretty" and "breathing like orchid"? The key is that the author can always write about the protagonist's feeling of being teased inadvertently, and the protagonist does not feel disgusted. I have read stories about supporting characters changing gender in other books, and I never felt disgusted from time to time.

I have a very good taste in reading, but I fell in love with this book. Is it because I am naturally yearning for sword tombs like Zhou Li?

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What a 78 ending, a lot of holes left unfilled. And this is not a happy ending. Apart from anything else, the culprit boss is not dead yet. You can even let the deus ex machina trick the protagonist and let him beat the Lord in Yellow to death, but just let him hang around?

In the middle of the night, I saw that I had been removed from the group. I thought I had been diving for too long. When I looked carefully, there were only 11 people left in the group. Was it because the insider kicked them all out? Are you still playing some ruthless game?