Something's Wrong with My Undead

Brother, if you really can't do it, just write it without a female protagonist. Separately for emotional segments. To be honest, ecstasy is a clichéd literary concept in romantic dramas... You don't even have that ecstasy feeling when writing about bedtime interactions. It's not a big problem if you're not good at writing emotional scenes, but your text is a text with outstanding personal characteristics. Compared with the previous description, this section is flat to sunken. I just heard that game nerds are outrageous, but I didn't expect that all your fantasies are gray and white...

This style is really interesting, relaxed and enjoyable. Some aspects resonate with players. But I feel that based on this situation, the problem of the book will completely explode after about 100 chapters. First of all, there is no priority. There are too many skeletons. The dialogue and description have almost squeezed out the protagonist's role. The protagonist's personality label has been blurred. Obviously the protagonist in the first few chapters is quite interesting. If the skeletons can speak the local language, then what is the role of the protagonist? Novices should avoid group dramas. As long as the proportion of protagonists is reduced, the book will turn to group dramas. With so many players, can you write it? With all due respect, because the skeletons have similar shapes, the player's dialogue is already very similar to a person talking to himself. How to distinguish between them? Just rely on a few Internet vocabulary? An early failure was that the male skeleton did not pretend to be the elf's sister, Daisy. I don't quite understand what you mean. It's obviously pretending in the protagonist's mind. Skeletons have a strong label distinction, and can also lead to many interesting interactions. Whether it's with the protagonist or with the elf sister, it's no problem for at least hundreds of thousands of words. What's more, for many male players, playing female accounts is also a thing. There is also the protagonist who leaked the secret too quickly. This point was not handled well, but I am too lazy to type. As you write about these problems, you will find that it becomes more difficult to write and the plot becomes more and more difficult to write. Then it's up to you to patch it yourself.

Respect the blessing. I originally thought it was a plot about two players who knew the plot well and took the protagonist who didn't know the plot around, but it turned out that it was a plot that was kept hidden and made interesting. In fact, I think the author can completely go in the direction of "Blessings for a Beautiful World". There is no need to make the protagonist a powerful being. He can just write that players who know the plot take the protagonist who does not know the plot around, go on joyful adventures, and experience a wonderful world of life.

The protagonist, the loser, has good talents in all aspects at the beginning but cannot summon normal skeletons. The awakening golden finger can summon the skeletons of big boss players. The world view is similar to that of Dark Destruction. The skeleton players here are not just tools. They are all flesh and blood, and the supporting characters also have their own personality traits. Those who like group portraits will be delighted. The plot is coherent, the characters are brilliant, the world view is complete, and the main and supporting characters are intellectually sound. A very excellent traditional NPC article about the fourth natural disaster. The only bad point at the moment is the heroine. I don't know what the purpose of designing this character is. I feel like it was just for the sake of having a heroine. Moreover, because the three years of developing a relationship with the protagonist were not written at all, the emotional scenes are very abrupt, which is the same problem as the heroine of Ring of Fate. Not only me, but some readers in the previous article also complained that the heroine felt uncomfortable... Although this book has a few minor flaws, it is still worth reading overall. I hope the author can guard against arrogance and impatience and persevere. I wish the author's work will become popular as soon as possible.

Author, can I believe you? I don't even dare to order everything 🙂

Not much to say, it's good to watch, and it can also provide laughs. I'm absolutely happy to watch it, and I've never laughed before. Come and troll me, and I'll make you laugh.

The characters and personalities are well developed and really interesting. In addition, create a group and I want to have fun with book friends!

Everyone's memories are unique, and so are the experiences in the game. Perhaps you have also fantasized about adventures in another world with your relatives and friends? Even if you just cooperate with them in the game, you can still see their hidden shining points. Perhaps the attributes in the game are only fixed, but they are also a biased choice of one's own personality. The MT's perseverance (guarding), the assassin's resignation (courage), the assistant's selfless dedication (generousness), etc. But precisely because players are living people, they give the characters they control their own personal style. Integrity, kindness, love of adventure, curiosity, exploration of history, and other excellent characters. But it is also naturally accompanied by selfishness, greed, rage, cowardice and other bad qualities. It can be said that through the experience of cooperative games in the past, the author has discovered the shining points of humanity in his relatives and friends, and as a result, decent characters have been born. Players synthesized the bad deeds they had seen and heard and then abstracted them into villains one by one. Although it is said that people should be contradictory, a person should not only do justice, but also make some mistakes. No one is perfect. However, it is a novel after all, and a little more abstract and facial expression is also a writing style. I've only read a small part of it so far, it's quite fresh inspiration and ideas. We are also looking forward to the God War being serialized to the end.

When I first read it, I thought of the time I spent playing games and playing with my relatives and friends. I was reluctant to remove the bookshelf during the 2-year hiatus. Therefore, I saw that the author was able to regenerate his limbs 2 years after entering the palace 🙂 Overall, it's good, Sahua｡:.ﾟヽ(*´∀`)ﾉﾟ.:｡

I like the plot of this book and it feels good to read it so far. It's a pity that it's too short, which makes me want to watch the same type of movie

Some words were originally reserved for the post-release remarks, but in the past two days, many new friends have come to the smart push, so I will say them in advance to avoid misunderstandings. 1. I am indeed not a newbie. I have opened books on this site before. Double-digit first order, 300 for both orders, but the book was successfully completed. I won't mention the dark history. 2. There are also books at other sites, the results are not bad, and the book is finished. But this is two extremes, so I won't mention it. 3. I have nothing to do with that friend who is Wanjun but is a 500,000-word eunuch (Wow, I really didn't expect to be "taken away", so angry... 4. A newcomer at Lv1, it's not that I don't want to write more and write faster, it's just that I can't... New books on this site are now available This is a battle royale mechanism, and the referee is not the editor but the AI. The exposure of new books can only be achieved through rounds of competition and competition for quotas to get recommendations. It takes 28 days to get all four rounds of recommendations. It took me 12 days to get to the first round, which means that after the four rounds of recommendations, the score is 12+28=40 God... If you're lucky, you can go to Sanjiang, which is a big step forward. If you're not lucky, you can only rush to put it on the shelves. So there's nothing you can do about it. I have to eat. 5. Thank you for your votes and rewards. Let everyone thank you. Thank you very much. I'm very honored. 6. I don't often visit the comment section. I read it in one go and it was a big gain. I think other people's book review sections only add monthly votes. If you vote but don't get promoted, it's all my responsibility. I'm sorry for you...

I can't keep up the chase, the grinding and whining is too useless. The fact that Yuan Ling is dead and alive is just a setting. It can be passed through in a while, and it is not really writing code or programming. Are readers really interested in this? More than 170 chapters have passed and I haven't left the novice zone yet. Every chapter is spent figuring out the basic settings. The undead are good, the spirits are wonderful, and the necromancer is awesome. The game player has just passed one hand, the skill is less than one hand, the world map cannot be opened, and the game plot has not changed.

Come on, big brother who writes books

Shennong clarified that the book is very interesting and the biggest selling point is the bickering and interaction between the players (personal sense). As for the so-called "fujoshi plot" in the comment area, it is just the author's character design for the female partner in order to create different player images. There is no ambiguous plot between the male characters in the book. Please feel free to read it.

The plot has been a bit mediocre recently, to be honest, I prefer the skeleton interaction

Players who like the summoning of the fourth natural disaster, please avoid this pit. This is not a summons for players, but a time traveler summoning other time travellers. It just adds the setting that players who have played the game are summoned to the game world. Apart from the story background, it has nothing to do with the game. The summoned time-travelers of professional game players, I was curious about what profession they were in. They were really big-hearted. After time-traveling, they became skeletons. Before they had the option to exit, they acted as spoilers and actively jumped up and down to serve as tools for the protagonist. He took the initiative to kill four living people without hesitation (the good-for-nothing male protagonist did not issue specific orders), leaving a heroine for the male protagonist. When I saw this, I thought that these two people did not know that they had time-traveled. However, when they summoned new tools to join the team and they gave science knowledge to the newcomers, they clearly knew that they had time-traveled. I'm confused, wouldn't these two be murderers in their own world? Or is it a lazy dog ​​who can't tell the difference between reality and virtual reality?

Can Shen Nong tell me what it is like, grain, grass, hay, poisonous weeds?

The dialogue between the skeletons is very similar to the time-travel online game novels I read in the early years, and the protagonist's response is also good. I sincerely hope that such a good book can be written to a few million words.

"It's just a technical adjustment to the update time" "It's not impossible to take a day off" "It's acceptable to hold back a long chapter to tell the plot" "Why the hell are you a eunuch"

This is the first time I see a novel that has been updated for two years being updated. I admire the author. +1 For the anecdotes I witnessed on the Internet.

Some people are following it themselves and then write a bunch of book reviews that are going to collapse. They obviously have expectations, why don't they give it more encouragement? What are they doing with such extreme emotions? It is a good book, but it has to be written as a short article according to their requirements and then no one will read it. Then they are satisfied? If you can't accept the slow pace of the group portraits, just don't watch it. No one is forcing you to read it. When I first started following Mystery, I wasn't too exaggerated in the early stages. Now there are more than 170 chapters. Go and see if the whole pattern unfolds by Chapter 170 of Mystery. The author writes the book, not us. Another point is that the reason why the skeletons do not rebel has been made clear from the beginning. Players don't know if they are really dead when they die. The protagonist has not insulted any skeleton. The players are respected. Moreover, if the protagonist has good things, he will give priority to the skeletons. Even if you want to kill the protagonist, I can only suggest you see a psychologist. At least now, in my opinion, every character is vivid and lively, the protagonist's personality is also likeable, and the author's views are quite upright.

It seems that he is a eunuch. Once the rhythm of this kind of fourth-day disaster story breaks down, it is difficult for the author to pick it up again. He can only hope that the author will suddenly be short of rice and be forced to suppress his laziness and start a new life.

At first no one cared about the leave. .

I have read more than 100 chapters and would like to make some comments. The author does a good job of describing the banter between time travellers, and the early stages are a good highlight. Let's talk about what I think are shortcomings. 1. He is obviously not good at narrative and overall picture description. From the moment the floating city appeared, everyone was confused. Too many forces were inserted in a short period of time, and there was not enough plot foreshadowing before. Who are these forces, where do they come from, and why do they fight? 2. In terms of characterization, the main characters are quite plump, while the women and ordinary NPCs pale in comparison. The protagonist's mistress has no personality and is a completely stereotyped cliché tool person. The bottom-level NPCs are highly homogenous, and they all still stutter in the Japanese style (they speak with trembling fear, repeating the first word of each sentence, "Hai... Heine-sama!", "Ming... Understand!" This is a particularly disgusting clichéd dialogue method). 3. It's better not to grasp it accurately. In the fourth natural disaster theme, the readers are the players, not the protagonist. The protagonist is just a background board. Don't waste too much pen and ink on it. Those players are the real protagonists. Write more about the adventures and slaps in the faces of the players, and less about the protagonist's farming and strategic diplomacy.

I'm really convinced. Some people are black just for the sake of being black. If you feel uncomfortable watching it, don't watch it. If you don't feel comfortable, you still post to make others feel uncomfortable. The free chapters in front are enough for you to familiarize yourself with the general style. If you don't like this style, you post it in a post. You don't want to make others uncomfortable. I suggest you. I suggest setting a threshold for posting. I had finished reading the latest chapter and wanted to post about the latest plot trend. But it turned out that there were a lot of female teachers who disgusted him, and some skills that were not understood affected the experience. I think the previous words were detailed enough. If you don't understand, you should really learn reading comprehension. How many chapters are dedicated to a skill? Or does it mean that female faculty members cannot fall in love? The teacher is not old, married, or has a partner. What's wrong with you? Professional discrimination? There is nothing else to say, and the mood to talk about the plot has been disturbed.

I really like this book. It has been a year and I am not sure if you still have the artistic conception when you wrote this book, but I still hope to see an ending, even if the ending is not so satisfactory.

I strongly suspect that you are the author of Mushroom. Recently, Mushroom is nearing completion and the update frequency has plummeted. This book has actually been resurrected. Let's be honest! You are the fungus owner!

The author is writing about traveling directly back in time, so that's okay. He won't mess with this setting for his own life. I can't understand that kind of player writing. It just writes all players into profit-driven things. It's just too much, especially when some accounts can't be banned and the degree of freedom is so high. NPCs can't be resurrected, so I have to try to kill all NPCs, and after playing so many games, there are too few people in the chat channel who are purely for profit. At least 2/3 of the people are just worried about the world being in chaos. They don't care much about leveling and equipment, unless it is out-of-print equipment. Or if you kill me, I am quite happy. I just want to try various ways to die.

You must hold on. It's normal for newbies to have poor results. You must hold on. This book is very good. Don't lose it.

I read it again from the beginning and it was so enjoyable. The plot advanced quickly without being superficial, there were no excessive chapters, and there were no poisonous points. The emotional line was also very simple and not awkward at all. The main line was always centered around Heine and the player, and basically no other superfluous characters were depicted. The plot was very coherent and refreshing. It was like the love letter in my dream. I felt empty when I thought about it coming to an end. Will I ever see such a good book again 😭