Swallowed a Dragon Ball

After it was put on the shelf, I didn't want to read it anymore.

Let's talk about my feelings about reading books recently. One thing that is clear is that this book is not as good as the beginning. I think the main problem is deliberateness. The author is deliberately intensifying conflicts to build the plot. But this kind of deliberate writing is too deliberate. It is not the wings of a butterfly, the gray line of a grass snake, or a domino. It's just blunt, it just wants to break through the southern wall, and it has to use its head to open a door to the southern wall. On the premise that the author's writing is good, this book can barely be read. In these recent chapters, many book friends have said that Qilin is a clown. I guess the author is still a little unconvinced. After all, the plot is someone's brainstorming, and the words are coded one by one... Then let me tell you why these supporting characters have become clowns. First, the author's foreshadowing was high enough and good enough, the character was established, and the expectations were high. Second, the character design is inconsistent. Thirdly, all the supporting characters in this book are helpful and unjust. In other words, profit is the way... In the author's character list, the most outstanding supporting character at present is Qilin's younger brother. Yes, he is the one who chased the protagonist at the beginning, but the protagonist snatched the sword and broke his legs. The gate of heaven was only opened a few inches. Judging from the results, that guy is a pure clown who does not know his own abilities, but do you think how many people hate him? Why? Because he is alive and because he has his own way. But now, what did He Qilin, who was nine levels higher than him, do to the protagonist? What did Jiuxuanmen do again? A group of great practitioners of Taoism do whatever it takes to gain benefits, break promises, and bully the small. In the author's books, there are many descriptions of realms. Let me ask you, how can such a person pass the test of questioning one's heart? It's the level where the main character, Shi Niang, is stuck and can't get up! ? The same is true for He Qilin. What does he lack? He lacks nothing, even if he doesn't read the latest chapter, he recognizes the master of the Juesheng Sword, and Qilin has always been invincible. As a result, a person who has never been defeated hears about the protagonist's deeds... What is this if not a clown? Isn't this destroying the character?

This book was quite interesting at the beginning of the book: Meeting the Dragon and Going to the Mountain, but I picked it up after I became a disciple. As soon as you traveled through time, how could you now realize the world of mortals? Don't you see enough dirty things on the Internet? It's really like a ten-year-old child, acting like a child pretending to be an adult. It pulls the hips straight and drags out the plot.

This protagonist lives a very tiring life. The enemy always strikes first. He is a moral model.

The writing is very good so far. I hate people who want to engage in those theories when they go back to ancient times. They just know how to engage in social practice without looking at the era, background, humanities, and power balance.

The setting is not important, the writing is important. Books with fancy settings that take up a lot of space are 90% rubbish. Therefore, there is no problem in writing this way. Xianxia is actually the most difficult to write, as writing style and culture are both indispensable.

I swallowed a dragon ball and had a caesarean section after being born three years ago I was happy to meet an immortal who supported me, but my strength shattered the heavenly spirit.

Earlier, the protagonist's master asked the protagonist to win cleanly, and the protagonist agreed. After proving his strength in the tower, the protagonist's game was grinding and slick again, and you are only ten years old. Why are you so slick? You should be the boss of the world. The mentality of the third child, you are a swordsman, you should have a courageous mentality, and you are going to compete with the world's best person ten years from now. If you don't perform well, people will just think you are a clown, and you are still hiding it. It's really boring.

It's so boring. You not only describe the protagonist as a slick young man with a middle-aged heart who assesses the situation, but you also deliberately restrict the protagonist and deliberately make the reading process uncomfortable for readers. Regret subscribing

In fact, I would rather the protagonist actually went to the border to join the army. Like Yunqiang, he would take a different path from the practitioners of sects and aristocratic families. What makes time travelers practice better than natives is their brains, logic, and knowledge. These are completely invisible. The protagonist is just like a country bumpkin.

Recently I have seen a lot of readers talk about water, so I would like to express my personal opinion on this. The first thing is what Yu Youquan has done recently. In one word, steady, is steady wrong? Everyone, let's play games. There are often diamond lottery activities in the game, and everyone knows that this is basically a guaranteed loss but no profit. If you are lucky and get 10 times the reward, do you still have the guts to invest 10 times the reward and bet a hundred times? Yu Youquan doesn't need to gamble now, so there is less excitement. The second part is about the Heaven-cutting Sword of the Great Sage. The things that the protagonist obtains are very necessary. The first is the Sage Broken Sword. This is the sword used by the past heads of the Wu family. It is considered the third or even second echelon in the world. It will allow the protagonist to quickly improve in Wanjianhai. Then there is the intention of the Monkey King God, the Great Master. I wonder if you have noticed. The original article mentioned the Thirty-six Heavenly Gangs and the Seventy-Two Earthly Evils, and the precious Qi collected by the protagonist is the Qi of the Earthly Evils. When you think of Sun Wukong, what do you think of? Seventy-two changes! The Monkey King visualization picture must be very useful for the protagonist. After the entire exchange meeting, the protagonist put on a perfect pretense. All the genius disciples from major families were won over, and they also got the valuable treasures they needed, which was a perfect ending. The next step is to collect Juesheng Sword Qi. This process did not cause any disturbance, but this is normal. Zheng family, one sword is passed down forever. Problems will occur in the sword tomb, and it will only be those with low qualifications, so what disturbances will occur? Could it be that the astonishing talent attracted thousands of swords, and the divine sword flew out to recognize its master? But don't forget, the protagonist has already obtained the Houtian Sword, and according to the plot, Houtian Jian should be the strongest sword in the world. Those readers who feel uncomfortable may feel that the book is not exciting or spectacular enough, but that is because you are following it. Because a book cannot be stimulating and climaxing all the time. People who follow the book may long for this, but new readers will start to read the book one after another. For these people, long-term high-intensity stimulation and climax will make people feel boring. The progress of the story must have ups and downs. While appreciating the Dapeng rising with the wind in one day and soaring to 90,000 miles, you must also appreciate the accumulation before the Dapeng takes off. I started reading novels in 2006. Many times I couldn't find a book I liked. I finally found one I like. I hope everyone will stop criticizing the author for being autistic.

I recommend a book that stands out from the crowd. It's hard to find books these days. They are either written by primary school students who have no common sense about life, or they are written by studios with the same rip-off AI writing, and even with more than a dozen chapters, they are put on the shelves to cheat money. When I get older, I like to watch people who have social experience, common sense of life, basic logic, normal outlook on life, and some cultural literacy. Are these very demanding? It can actually eliminate more than 95% of the books recommended to me by Qidian.

It seems that the author meant to describe a relatively grand world, but in fact he created a story world with low expressiveness, high martial arts turned into low martial arts, and immortals turned into simple cultivators. I can't control it, but I want to show off my style, but in the end it's awkward and inexplicable. Just look at the so-called big boss in the early part of the book. There is no harm without comparison. There is a description of harm in the second realm. Two powerful ones have to look carefully at the side, and they look bad. The protagonist runs away with the snake (a half-transformed demon who can send messages) and says he is afraid that others will not be able to catch up. He only follows behind. A clear high-level swordsman, the leader of the highest sect in the country, is hesitant and indecisive.

，？          ， Joining a noble family is to reduce the process of obtaining resources and obtain a stable cultivation environment. The chapters before and after it is released basically establish the relationship between Pig's Feet between the Zheng family and the world. Later, you should use key plot points to quickly upgrade instead of wandering around.

Swallowing a golden elixir into his belly, escaped into the depths of the forest, enemies pursued him too much, went on the path of cultivation with his bare hands, coincidentally, strange things appeared in the deep valley, with dragon blood and strange beasts lying in wait, the first cry of the immortal cultivator shocked the world, an old eccentric from aristocratic family accepted him as his disciple,

It was amazing to meet the dragon in the beginning, but it started to get more and more tiring in the end. At the beginning, the youthful spirit had been caught in the mortal world, and then it felt like it was being restrained. Now it feels like it can be seen or not.

After seeing Chapter 136, let me talk about my views. At first, I came to see my destiny rise against the trend. It was indeed the same at the beginning, with a young man seeking revenge. But after becoming a disciple, this feeling disappeared. Although there was a ten-year agreement, everyone knew that the protagonist would definitely win. So, although there is conflict, there is no conflict involving life and death. As a result, the sense of oppression and tension towards the protagonist is gone. When I saw the protagonist talking about developing productivity to some children of aristocratic families, I couldn't stand it anymore. The front and back are too separated. Some people say that with such a setting, you can only join a noble family, otherwise you will not be able to gain the power to resist. I want to say that the Tou family is fine, and you can arrange to hide your identity. Therefore, the crisis of identity exposure can be arranged later. Or you can arrange another bulk gate. (I don't know why, in a world where there are clearly sects, the sect's sense of existence is so weak.) I don't know what the author thinks. The introduction is about resisting oppression, or transcending and becoming an immortal. In fact, the more you write, the more crooked it becomes. Really disappointed

I feel that the character of Qilinzi is really poorly written. What was originally a good old enemy ended up with a plot that broke the contract. The old enemy was destroyed and the elders of the Jiuxuanmen turned into clowns. Now, after the duel, he is reincarnated, and the unicorn is still following him. What is the difference between that and not dying? How to deal with his scenes later? If I still practice cultivation, will I enter the Nine Mysterious Sect again, will I uncover the mystery of the womb and awaken my past life memories? Based on the unwillingness he showed when he died, if he awakens his past life memories and doesn't trouble the protagonist, his character will collapse for the second time. Even if the author really likes this character and doesn't want to let him die, he can mention it thousands of years later, just like Ye Fan later found Qintong and found that they were just similar flowers, instead of rushing to write about his reincarnation now.

Let's give a brief review, starting with the grass jelly. It's food and grass in the mid-term, and a little poisonous in the later stage (doesn't affect viewing). At the beginning, the protagonist's tragic life experience and the He family's battle of wits and courage. And after taking revenge, the He family fled to the mountains and met the real dragon. It gives people a sense of tension and urgency. It's as if you're on the scene, and it's so logical and well-founded that you won't want to leave. After the successful escape, people breathe a sigh of relief, which is suppressed first and then lifted. Mid-term: The protagonist follows his master to return to the real world he experienced before returning to the Zheng family. It also paves the way for the protagonist to embark on the road to invincibility, and also allows readers to immerse themselves in it and experience a corner of the world. It explains some of the protagonist's personality and concepts. (A bit of martial arts style) but it does not affect the viewing of juniors fighting without any fancy tricks Later period: (Full text here is Xiaodu) After returning to the Zheng family, he faced the seven geniuses of the family "known as the Four Generations and Three Dukes" and fought. The writing is sloppy and mixed with sophistication and nonsense. There was no sense of urgency at the beginning. The author also said that in the future, he would write less about this kind of human nature and sophistication. I don't want to part with this book, The Eunuch, for fear that the author will cut it off. After all, Xiao Youquan is still very cute☺. So you can read and catch up. No matter how great a god is, it is impossible for him to write a novel without any poison at all. Please be considerate to the author to avoid being cut.

The book is a good book and the text is exquisite. Unfortunately, I am struggling with daily necessities all day long. I am no longer the person who can read a book all day long. I also start to need to go to bed early, not for my health, but because I have to get up early to go to work the next day. I want to buy sweet-scented osmanthus and carry wine, but it doesn't look the same. Young man travels Hahahahahaha

Reincarnation is outrageous. His brother He Qianyu is not dead yet! It is destined to be a life-and-death battle with the protagonist. Unless your appearance is very different after reincarnation, you cannot remember your past life, and you will not meet He Qianyu. Otherwise, we will definitely fight to the death.

The second part of this book becomes more and more depressing. If it's not a refreshing novel, it wouldn't be so depressing. There is no hope. This is not the value of today's society.

You can definitely write it like Zhetian, Hua Yunfei like Qintong, Golden Wing Xiaopeng King like Long Que. Different people, just very similar. Later, King Lao Peng also accepted Long Que as his apprentice. You can completely re-write a new person who is very similar to He Qianxing, and the saint will accept him as his disciple. It's not reincarnation.

I think the Buddhist and Taoist families should be in overt and covert competition and have healthy competition. After all, they are all people-oriented. If they really want to fight to the death, it would be too hurtful to the human race. Although the human race is the strongest in this book, there are also threats from foreign races. After all, it is not like the human race in reality where only the human race is the strongest. There is no need to live and die like reality.

Shuangwen is not like Shuangwen, and the harem does not have a harem, so it is very strange to read.

The author's brain circuit is astonishing. This plot is like someone caring about your family's property. Instead of thinking about cultivating virtues internally and martial arts externally, you want to blow up your home so that no one will care about it. It is really rubbish and negative. If we bring it to the present, if a foreign country invades, I will send nuclear bombs to plow all the fields in my house to force the invaders to leave. The invasion group is gone, but what impact will it have on the homeland?

I feel that Internet literature has ushered in a new era. I have read several such delicate and smooth novels recently, and I want to be addicted to the Internet again.

A good book, a golden elixir swallowed into the stomach, my fate is determined by me and not by God. The overall pace is good, and it feels like reading a legend. In some places, it is too deliberate to ridicule the opponent and the protagonist. It is a piece of writing that is too harsh. It's a very interesting book, but just reading a certain paragraph is not exciting enough, nor is it juvenile enough. Not enough to be the heir to the throne or the second generation, why should I play like a schoolmate or a college student on an outing? Looking back, I understand why the protagonist did what he did at that time. After all, it was a deliberate design and not so chaotic. So it reads like a legend, not like life.

It was pretty good in the early stage, but now I can only say that the starting point author is average.

I started to read the book after I ordered it for the first time, let me tell you my opinion First of all, the beginning is very good, there are new ideas in the old clichés, and the author has good writing skills and smooth writing. It is really comfortable to read. Readers who have not read it recommend reading it. It is not a loss to invest in it, really! Next, let's talk about the issues that many readers have responded to recently. Note: It involves spoilers, readers who have not finished the free content should be careful! Try not to read it! It is mainly for the author and readers who are following the update (at least after finishing the free part) Back to the topic: I saw some people saying that the sense of urgency is not enough, I think it makes sense, because there is indeed no sense of urgency at the beginning, but I think this is not the main contradiction that many people find boring. 🤔I think it's because of expectations and there's something wrong with throwing the hook. Because a book cannot be urgent all the time, it should always have relaxation, and there are also people who can write about the low points interestingly. The key point is that the transitional plot is not interesting enough and "watered". This is a problem on one hand. Objectively speaking, it is a hindrance, but is it a big problem? Water has never been a big problem in online articles Many great authors have been scolded. Why do everyone just love to read it? They can make readers reluctant to leave and willing to float in the author's spray, wanting to see what happens next. This is their ability to raise expectations. It feels like the author has an old problem. It looks good in the early stage, but becomes weak in the middle and late stages. I have read the author's Sanxingdong book before. Judging from this book, the author's worldview system structure seems to be a little thin. I can't say exactly where it is thin, but I feel like it. This is also an important reason why people don't have enough expectations. Let me talk about my views on the structure of the worldview. The following is a personal opinion and a little private speculation On the one hand, the author revealed the "whole" background of the worldview early, which resulted in a lack of follow-up and was unable to use these unknowns to attract readers. Combined with the content of the article, Let's just say, it's the general background: the Northern Wei Dynasty gave birth to a sage national master, who defeated the Jin Dynasty and moved to the south. Then the Jin Dynasty Zongshi clan gave birth to a unicorn. Everyone expected him to become a saint and fight back. He had a grudge against the protagonist Looking at this general background, can everyone directly guess the main line of the story? How much more can we expect? Personally, I feel that the content of the National Master was discussed too early, which is a failure. On the other hand, the author does not "reveal" enough. For example, the realm of spiritual practice is still in the fog. The most important thing is that there is no sense of expectation! (My most obvious experience is that the spiritual realm of this book is a bit old-fashioned like the main plot line🤔) To give a casual analogy, if there is such a book: the first realm and the second realm, when the protagonist is in the first realm, the plot combines specific events to reveal a certain feature of the second realm, and foreshadows a trouble that the protagonist must rise to second level to solve. For another example, the part about the immortal and the dragon was a bit suspenseful, but not enough, and it was hardly mentioned after that. When it comes to immortals, let's be more careful here. The lack of connection between the upper and lower realms should be considered a big taboo. It will lack a sense of coherence. Even if you want to change the map, you should at least raise your expectations first and retain the readers. If the readers cannot be retained, who will read it when you change the map later. Here are some examples from Wubaili. Take Chendong as an example, let's talk about the relationship between the upper and lower bounds of the perfect world. Needless to say, there are many pitfalls. It can be said that the connection is very close. The same goes for his other articles, the connection must be close, it is there from the beginning, and it reminds you repeatedly. Let me mention Tomato again. Some people may think that Tomato changed the map in the later period. It was obvious and the connection was not close enough. Indeed, it cannot be denied that the connections between the Three Realms and the Beyond of the Three Realms in the Wild Age, the Snow Eagle Lord Universe and the Beyond are very shallow. It can be regarded as a classic map change, but he is Tomato, and Tomato is very important to the plot of the plot. Needless to say, Zuo's grasp is very good (it is really like flowing clouds and flowing water, rising when it should rise and falling when it should fall), and the three realms and the universe have long retained readers. Let's talk about the issue of upper and lower realms. The three realms include the big world and the small world of chaos, and the universe has the divine realm, the material realm, etc. Aren't these also the upper and lower realms? This is always closely connected, right? . (Jining Golden Finger comes from outside the big world. When he was growing up, he also mentioned the Three Thousand Big Worlds, Dao Ancestors and the like from time to time. The great devil in Xueying came from outside the world) Not only the realm of cultivation, many details that can raise expectations were not written out. Combining the pros and cons, the summary is that the setting was not thrown well, resulting in insufficient suspense and unable to firmly attract readers br> One more point, back to the beginning, it is not interesting enough. I seem to know where the problem I mentioned is that it is thin - there are not enough interesting side plots, the routines are repeated too quickly, and the distance between the free part of the arena and the Zheng family's arena is too close! To sum up, what I can personally experience and summarize is that 1. The setting level is not good, and the suspense is not enough. 2. The plot structure is not planned well and the battle line cannot be extended, so it will inevitably be weak in the middle and late stages. 3. There is a lack of interesting side plots and repetitive routines, making it impossible to retain readers when the main plot is weak. Condensed into five words: The outline is not done well The author must be missing something, maybe it's part of what I said, maybe there are other things I couldn't explain, maybe this is the difference between the author, a fifth-level god, and a great god? 🤔 Has the author ever thought about this problem of his own? Note: Although I have said a lot, it is really just an objective analysis and discussion. I still like the author's style. Compared with the lack of plot structure and outline: the author's writing skills are very good 🙂