Pirate: Get Twelve Talismans at the Beginning!

When I saw this novel, I was reminded of this picture

Chapter 17: Restraining pirates from robbing civilians is really cool

Why don't you eat the fruit? Forget it if you don't eat it. Why don't you take it away? I'm confused.

Another author who was stabbed in the back

After you finish writing, check it carefully. There are many places where if you read them carefully, you will find problems in your own writing.

Does this author have any deep grudge with Mr. Kai?

Roger is the Tang San of the pirate world. He is both powerful and established. The Valley of the Gods stabs Rocks in the back. He talks about wiping you out for the sake of world stability. In fact, he is the watchdog of the Celestial Dragons. Then before his death, he starts the era of great pirates and messes up the world. It's so disgusting. Others go and fight the Celestial Dragons to stop you, and then fool others into becoming pirates who may not even be able to deal with the Celestial Dragons.

I only want tigers and horses, and a person with no weaknesses and infinite abilities is born. The tiger balances yin and yang, and the horse negates the purification.

Jump chop? Make a deep hole? I suspect that the author didn't understand this aspect at all before writing the book! If that doesn't work, just remove the protagonist's template!

Two poison points at the beginning (1) The spell entity may be robbed (2) The height of One Piece World is 185 and the third level disability (although in reality I am only this height)

There are too many abilities and they are too complicated. It is better to choose one or two out of the 12 and then develop them in depth.

The author has set the protagonist's era too far away. People who read One Piece fics are basically following the various settings and plots and characters in the One Piece world. The protagonist in your setting is set in a period a generation before the One Piece era. Although it opens up a new world view, it is easy to dissuade those who come for the original work. Generally, it is better to set the time when Roger in One Piece died or a few years earlier. It can not only fight against the previous generation, but also insert the plot of the next generation.

The new issue of You Draw and I Guess has begun. Readers, please take a look

On the first day of opening the book, I drew a small painting out of boredom. There will be a prize for guessing which character it is. I hope all readers will appreciate it🤫🤫

It's mainly about grammar and individual logic issues in the story. In the previous chapter, I obtained the Phantom Beast Thunder Dragon Fruit, but in the next chapter, there are no large-scale AOE skills. In the previous chapter, the whole group was a vicious pirate, and in the next chapter they are right too. He jerked, jerked, and jerked. There are too many minor problems such as inconsistencies and large repetitions. I suggest you revise it. The overall story is pretty good, but there are also some big holes in the plot. Come on, author💪

There might be something wrong with Kaido 🥵

Has the author changed? The way of writing has changed

Who can write better?

Come on

Too watery, slip away

Is the protagonist going to travel to another world? After Imdu is defeated, Luffy will have nothing to worry about.

Do spells require practice and development?

Is it really okay to become so strong so quickly?

Well, the big BOSS is like this. How can I write it later? . .