Something's Off About My Broken Engagement Plot

There is no sense of substitution. I personally feel that this can only be substituted for the heroine. The initiative rests entirely in the hands of the female protagonist, and the male protagonist is controlled so hard that it makes him seem very humble, which naturally makes me feel disgusted. This is an uncomfortable meal. The heroine wanted to get married because of system rewards. Even if she developed a relationship later, I still felt very unhappy. The male protagonist has no merits and his luck is terrible. Apart from the above points, the process of eating soft rice is very boring.

The highlight was that the anti-routine was gone, but the heroine only appeared for a few chapters and then disappeared. The subsequent academy plot was a complete failure.

I came to see how the male protagonist shows off his love for the female protagonist, not to see how the male protagonist Long Aotian Academy upgrades. .

Emm~ If you read the comments, you will know where your problem lies. The positioning of this book: a "soft rice novel". The heroine appears in the first dozen chapters, and the next twenty or thirty chapters are all about the academy. The key plot is still very cliché. It depends on whether you insist on writing a soft rice novel, or whether you rely on the soft rice's resources to become stronger and surpass the heroine. Don't change the anchor point easily, otherwise it will be easy to lose your writing. The kind of fight, life and death, inferior pretense and slap in the face. My lord, times have changed. I've seen too many of these cool things, and my resistance has been maxed out... Relaxation and comedy may be more suitable. Take some time to conceive and perfect the outline... 90% Of the problems with book cutting lie in the outline.

A typical example of selling dog meat on sheep's clothing. It's over 200,000 words long, and the heroine doesn't have as many roles as the supporting role.

There is something interesting in the front. After the heroine left, the protagonist didn't know what to do. Does it have anything to do with the title of the book? I'm convinced. It's all anecdote. He himself can't practice. Spending so much time in the academy is useless.

I just read the first chapter and it was okay, but when I saw that the system was not on the male protagonist, I knew it was a bad choice.

The heroine has very few roles and basically disappears after the start.

Is it appropriate for a female channel novel to appear in a male channel novel with potential?

I originally wrote a long post, but I decided not to post it. After all, the author wrote this book just for fun. If you read it because of the title, just leave it. Reading this book is better than reading a normal fantasy.