Warhammer: The Light of Hope

Hmm, honestly, I really can't capture the dark, profound, and despairing feeling of official Warhammer fiction. Maybe you should just treat this novel as a Stellaris fanfic disguised as Warhammer (just kidding). Anyway, it'll definitely involve Stellaris technology later on.

It's very well written. Angron himself is a Primarch full of tragic elements. I once read a post on Zhihu about what to do if you find a Primarch, and one of the posts described the future after finding Angron but not letting him hit the Butcher's Nails. It was very moving; he's a very charismatic Primarch. It's just that the story was too short and not satisfying. The author has written a great book; keep it up!

Actually, I'm quite curious to see how the Emperor views the male protagonist, since the Emperor would definitely be able to tell what kind of person the male protagonist is at a glance... Then, a problem arises for the Emperor: a rather decent god actually appears in the warp.

Now that we've gotten this far, let me briefly explain! Keep it up! Although you've divided it into paragraphs, there are still many descriptions of tone and expression. You could divide those into more paragraphs, and most importantly, the emotional expression during the dialogue. You could add some descriptions of actions and expressions after the speaker finishes a sentence.

I actually wrote it; that shows great initiative!

Joining the Force in Star Wars? Congratulations! This book is doomed.

Actually, the protagonist's cheat code wasn't used powerfully enough. A more traditional world model is: This system of hell, the human world, and heaven. But the Warhammer universe is a deformed child. It occupied both the celestial realm and the underworld. Moreover, it also occupies the subspace representing the concepts of past and future.

It's not bad, I hope it won't be cut.

For writing format, you can look at Ashes or others next door. If you want to write more, you'll need to do research. Besides the original book, you can also look at other original works. I've only read some of the Great Crusade expansion packs (Dutch).

I knew this kid was going to mess it up. (Someone started yelling insults.)