My Narration Is Not Serious

It's sweet, sweet to the core, but not boring. It doesn't matter even if the character's background is a bit sadistic, but please don't use the knife after the character appears! First of all, let's start with the title and introduction of the book. At first I thought it was a fantasy and mystery-type reminder narration. In fact, I originally wanted to exclude it. However, it was a book shortage period, so I wanted to take a quick look and leave. After seeing the title of the first chapter, I suddenly became interested for some reason (don't get me wrong, I'm just interested in this system), and then there is the slightly funny (inner) dialogue plot between the protagonist and the system. I have to say that the author has a good grasp of this aspect, and will not make people be discouraged after reading the first chapter, and will even make people want to continue reading the next chapter. So far, I have read 23 chapters intermittently, and I have not found any obvious poisonous points? There are limits to how you can make fun of jokes, so that you won't feel like you're in a drama, and the occasional jokes can also make people smile. I hope the author can grasp the number of chapters to start the subscription. There will not be too many free chapters and there will not be too few chapters. I will definitely subscribe to them all! I also hope that this book will not be unfinished, broken, short, etc. Support the author! (Don't you want to add some details about the author? (Bushi))

Let me extract some of the current shortcomings The main plot is unclear in the later period, and the plot becomes a daily stallion of a sexual desire monster. The routine is repetitive and homogeneous, giving people an extremely boring feeling. Although I am not an author, I still want to name the current fog from the perspective of a bystander who has been reading for ten years A clear main line is the greatest motivation for people to read on. Even light novels that are purely about love and daily life together have a clear main line, so that readers have a clear goal in mind and can continue reading with the motivation to pursue that goal. There are two plot lines presented in this book: the plot line of the Amamiya family's overt and covert struggles, which is closely related to Kikyo Kyoto; and the erotic daily lines of various girls. If you want to make the book more exciting and make it no longer a mundane daily life, don't make the Amamiya family's plot line too mysterious and limit the number of appearances. If you want to write mainly daily lines and attract readers with H and other aspects, then add a clearer main line in daily life, instead of thinking of it as a small daily theater that plays out one after another. The previous chapter and the next chapter have no connection. It is indeed possible to write this way. But there is another flaw in this book, that is, each small theater is written entirely on the basis of H, regardless of other aspects, so writing each chapter of the small theater will lead to repetitive plots and aesthetic fatigue. I hope that the appeal of books can be more unique, rather than the same erotica with the same plot. By adding a harem, it will only become more and more dazzling. I also hope that Feng Chime can handle the plot lines of each heroine. This is the largest and most complex task in this book.

Now that I've seen it on the shelves, I feel it's okay but a little uncomfortable. Most of the heroines don't know each other's existence, especially Amamiya and Serizawa. The relationship between the two of them has advanced to the point where they are just one step away from having sex, and there is no showdown yet. He comes across as a scumbag who deceives people's feelings. Have you seen the post that talks about how the relationship between the heroines is handled? If you want to open a harem, open it openly and openly, don't be too arrogant and erect.

Update

My husband was violent towards me when I was three months pregnant, my mother-in-law was sarcastic and sarcastic, and my best friend actually seduced my husband. My countless times of patience and forgiveness have only resulted in intensification. I can no longer bear it anymore. The author only needs ten more chapters to listen to my revenge plan.

If you don't like reading my book, you can just scold me, there's no need to cross it out!

Please note that the protagonist asks the heroine to work in a maid shop, and asks the heroine to wear a maid outfit and call others master. If you engage in such meaningless poisonous points to select readers, I will stop it first.

Thoroughbred, it becomes boring after a few more chapters. Except for the first girl, the others are all about constant ambiguity under the premise that the protagonist has a girlfriend. There is no buffering plot, so he accepts it inexplicably. To be honest, this kind of woman is not lovable, the Shura field is gone, and the main attraction of the harem is gone...

The video comes from the previous New Year's greetings of station b. The quality may be a bit low when it is released from the starting point. When I saw this video, I had an idea to write about this kind of daily love life, but in the end I was killed.

A young girl😏

How can a good book be without idioms? I'll go first, a gentleman

It's like asking your girlfriend to call someone else's host at coffee, while you play the piano to accompany them, right? Originally, I didn't want to say anything when writing the male protagonist Liu Xiahui, but now I've gotten into the spirit of ntr. Now this book is so violent that I can only say that it's like

Silly beautiful girl

I saw a piece of news: A man touched a woman's hand on the subway and beat her directly to avoid being considered a pervert.

If the woman in Chapter 1 had an erotic dream, regarded the dream as reality, and reported the protagonist for lewdness, with obvious fingerprints and traces, and the protagonist had no way to prove his innocence, would the protagonist go to jail?

She's a little bit poisonous. She specially asked her girlfriend to be a maid to show off to others and call them master.

People who see this picture should not be ungrateful

Dear author, I feel that you are writing too fast. You should pay more attention to it, otherwise I am afraid that you will not be able to write later.

It's been a month and you haven't come back. I no longer have the expectations I had for you. You didn't respond to me, but I will still keep your contact, I just hope that when I browse it again, the update will be displayed

Please read it!

Does this fit the image of Amamiya Sagiri in your mind?

I can't even think about not sending it, I write every day, and I don't have a main line to push. The teacher is in trouble, and he still changes his style every day...

I think, if you are cut off, you should at least make an announcement so that everyone doesn't have to wait all the time. You didn't say anything, just secretly opened a new book, and just ignored it here?

Please note that the heroine of this article, Tokiko Kuroyori, has been changed to Nadeshiko Kuroyori because her name coincides with the heroine of a certain game. The previous article has been completely revised, and this name will be used in the following articles

Everyone, please support me.

Suddenly I saw Amamiya Sagiri's first side story on my phone and I remembered this book. The group is gone. Do you have other accounts of the author?

Is there any latest news from the author?