Chicago's Demon Cop

A small suggestion: the author uses long blocks of text, which can be tiring to read. The plot is great, but this is the only aspect that's not very comfortable. Overly long passages can cause reading boredom; this has been studied in psychology.

So far, it's written quite well. However, adding some slice-of-life elements could be helpful. The frequent occurrence and resolution of cases would be tiring to read.

Is it the only one that's extraordinary? Will anything surreal appear?

From what I've written, it honestly reads like something a child would write.

In Chicago, wouldn't that be enough to write about shameless people? 🤣 My boyfriend's first girlfriend was named Karen? She was incredibly beautiful.

In a chaotic context, a walking hormone is somehow lacking in sex appeal—bad review.

Didn't they say they were going to write me into a book, and have me get beaten up by AK and forced to breakdance? Here's 666 points for you, write it for me! 🤣🤣🤣

Can you write about the Chicago Police Department? Hank is so pitiful. All those who truly understood him are gone. Lonely old Hank silently fights against this damn world all by himself.

It's well-written, but it lacks a sense of everyday life. I suggest adding some details to make the characters more three-dimensional.

It's too chaotic. I've only read up to chapter eleven, and there are just too many characters. It's so confusing, with several storylines unfolding all at once: police station, thugs, business, and daily life. My goodness!