Card World: Surviving on a Desert Island

The writing is okay. A person's survival game is also interesting, just like survival in the wilderness. There are also cards, and the plot is very logical. Are all these netizens so impetuous now? I can't even read this kind of writing. I wish I could finish the first and second chapters of the hero's book, Invincible, and finish reading a book in 2 seconds.

The plot is too long, with a lot of unnecessary words and plots, and over-description of the character's psychological activities. The character's growth and labeling need to be shown in the plot, rather than the text forcing him to say biu, he has grown up. The progress of the plot is very low, and I missed three golden chapters.

When I read Chapter 6 of Volume 2, I was speechless. A woman who has been with you from birth to death for more than a year is not as good as a neighbor who is just a familiar stranger. And as I mentioned before, I saw her medical record. Is she sick or something else? I have to think about a woman who is obviously seriously ill. Bai Mei has such a good relationship with you, and I don't know what to write about. As for your previous good feelings, was your nearly two years of survival on a deserted island in vain? It's not like he's never seen a woman before, he acts as if he's never seen a woman before, and he can't forget about her.

The modern chapter makes the island chapter look like a joke

The writing of collecting monkeys is really bad. I don't know what I'm worried about. Stockholm has already appeared. This is not enough. I directly let the system descend and create a subduing function. By the way, the system has also been transformed. In the beginning, the protagonist has to explore all functions by himself. Now, I have directly told the protagonist all the benefits of the subduing function. Can't you go slower? At worst, what if the monkey is cured and runs away, its home is gone, and then it comes back and slowly gets in touch with the protagonist? If you don't know how to write about emotional changes, it would be better for the protagonist to capture Meng Huo seven times than to cheat directly. It doesn't necessarily require a good relationship between the two of them to advance the plot. Now when the time comes to conquer the cheating, will it be written as a savior who sacrifices his life? When the protagonist was trying to survive on a deserted island a few days ago, his progress was extremely slow and he didn't look at you in a hurry.

Not to mention how good the author's writing is, the general direction is wrong. The readers selected by the novel title are all rushing to survive on the card island. Later, in "Mu Lingzhu Cultivation", you just discouraged readers. After looking at the table of contents, it seems that it will become an urban novel in the future. Aren't you wrong? Does the author have no outline? The main theme is very biased.

Before Chapter 58, it was a desert island survival with a small cheat. After Chapter 58, harvest spiritual beasts, inherit them, and start cultivating immortality. Recorded on 2023.10.8.

Has the author changed? The two are completely different genres. I don't know what the author was thinking. After writing and writing, it turned into a modern urban novel. I drew a picture of a different world, but in the end I still didn't leave the island. I feel like I really deceived the readers 😅

I still can't understand what you're writing in the second volume. Look at the title of your book. Even before the name change, the title is obviously a novel about cultivating immortals. And the first volume is also obviously a novel about spiritual cultivation, although it has some embarrassing romance mixed in. Then the end of the first volume gives people an overly modern feel, and then the Celestial Master enters Kyushu. As a prelude to the exciting article, you ended up writing dozens of chapters in the second volume (I couldn't stand it after reading more than twenty chapters). Shengsheng turned a starting point of a male cultivating immortality into a romance novel about the arrival of the Dragon King in the city. It is an inexplicable love. I can't understand where this basic feeling comes from. There is always a feeling that I suddenly fall in love and want to die. In the end, from the title of the book to the first volume, you filtered us down to readers who read spiritual novels. Now it suddenly turns into a romance novel. Can you tell me whether the next subscription will increase or decrease? Otherwise, I really can't understand your thoughts.

At first, I bought a coconut from Meituanyou. At first I started to think that I could break it open. Then I took out a kitchen knife and tried to split it. After splitting it for a long time, I took a washed awl to cut it open.