Hogwarts: I Am Such a Model Wizard

The first few chapters are too bland, with no system and no highlights. It feels worse than the original work In the middle, I finally adapted to this daily + adventure narrative, but the bad things in the original work came out. The greedy Fudge and the pink toad Umbridge looked so terrible The protagonist could have done something to improve the situation, just like he has said to Dumbledore countless times in the past five years. Reminders, and the belongings of three of the Big Four He had countless opportunities to remind Dumbledore that Fudge cannot be trusted and must be settled before going outside. Whether it is helping Crouch conceal and properly deal with Barty Jr.'S matter, reducing the impact on Sirius's unjust imprisonment or promoting the director of the Department of Magical Law Enforcement (both of which have their own insistence), he can let the Ministry of Magic He stood on the fallen front from the beginning He was still one year older than Harry when he was born, and he spent all these years trying to save those few people (although Sirius survived and was cleared of his grievances, and I am very happy that Cedric did not die). The real big thing was deliberately ignored, right? Perhaps this is also the author's purpose of not affecting the tide, destroying the advantage of "foreseeing" of time-travelers, and saving the brainpower to think about the development of the story But, this is very unpleasant In addition, the evil stepfather-in-law Sect, the ADHD patient Harry, and the little troll Ron (killing the latter two will make the main plot half as difficult), and the original seven-part series (except for Fantastic Beasts and the plot of the Dark Lord/Mrs. Delingowor) are all in the sixth part. This book is only 50%. Voldemort is in the late stage and has not been killed near the end, so it feels "so dragging"

Partially subscribed, I jumped to see the latest chapter, and I just posted a book review. It is all my personal subjective point of view, and there are slight spoilers. Friendly discussions are welcome. Main advantages: Overall relaxed and joyful, this is a very important point. In the previous plot about the protagonist having a rough time, I saw some posts complaining about the protagonist's "bad character". I personally feel that it's okay to make fun of it, but some of the above-mentioned things have affected the reading experience of a fun-loving human-type reader like me. Here I just want to quote Kyon's famous sayings. The main part of the book is basically family fun at the moment. Even in the later "Yes, Minister" stage, it is still based on various mutual traps and rarely involves fighting and killing (everyone in the hospital & the Death Eaters killed by Li Huo: am I not a human being?). When the protagonist first fights against the toad, there is a post that complains about "not using the dead hand", and can only say "look, it is urgent". Isn't the following plot that is not a shrimp but a pig-hearted one more fun than killing it directly? As for the emotional line, I personally will accept no heroine, single heroine, or multiple heroines. It just depends on whether the author writes well or not. The emotional line of this book is very clear. It is a single original heroine. At the beginning, it is a bit of a "happy enemy" element, and then slowly develops in the direction of an "old husband and wife". It can be said that it is too sweet, and you should get married quickly. The kinship between the heroine and Snape has led to Snape's completely opposite attitude towards the male and heroine. The heroine will protect Snape but will also be a "black-hearted little cotton jacket", which is the component of many happy points in the early stage. (When I read this book, my imagination opened up. If "Harry" became "Harry", and then started a stock trading article with the heroine, Snape's blood pressure would be so full) The details are very detailed and the logic is self-consistent. The author has laid a lot of foreshadowings. For example, the work of the male protagonist's mother before she became a silent person was hinted at in the first few chapters of the book. Another example is when the male protagonist was questioned against regulations and was found by the professor after changing places. All of them were described in detail. This book's second creation of the magical world and power system of Harry Potter does not go too far and has no imagination. Instead, it makes partial and reasonable expansions based on the original work, such as the relationship between magic text and alchemy (I have no impression of the original work in this regard. I forgot whether I mentioned it, but it does fit in with my imagination after watching other magic-related movies), and on this basis, it logically leads to a trap (it is obviously good for them, how can it be called a trap) The plot of the Weasley brothers going to magic class. The plot with the protagonist's halo is arranged just right. The protagonist is very strong, but not a "dark blue" protagonist. It does not waste too much writing on this aspect (should it be said that it consumes finger power and electricity bills now?), But reflects the protagonist's talent and efforts in the details (for example, in the later period, Harry, the leader, hoped that the protagonist would teach them magic and Hector). The protagonist's answer when asked by Min), it is pretentious but does not directly write too much about the plot of "showing the saint in front of others". It mainly uses bonus points and subtractions in school and summons outside school (shouting from the box is not a summon) to set off the protagonist. At the same time, it is 1.7 Million words long, and there is no sign of the collapse of the combat power. Overall, this book is very suitable for you to read casually for leisure after a busy day, but when you want to calm down and take a closer look, it can also provide you with in-depth content. It is definitely a superior work.

Plain water... It's a pity to throw it away if it's tasteless.

Among the Chinese HP fans that I haven't seen that often, this is probably the first time I've seen him making friends with Newt, Dumbledore, and Nico at the same time, and having Nico repair his crown and stuff, and also being in a Ravenclaw-only cram school. But the main character is so perfect. He can communicate with magical animals, he is good-looking, he has super learning ability, he has perfect scores without feeling any pain, and he is also very good at Quidditch. He has been the Quidditch champion for seven years and has the Academy Cup. It's just unreal. Like a game character. But there is no sense of empathy provided. There isn't much inner description or growth. Moreover, the description of the protagonist's previous life is also very downplayed. There is no reason why he looks like this. The description of love is also very downplayed. But it's nice that there's no bad smell. It took me three days to read it. I hope the author can cheer up.

This is the first HP fanfic I have read completely without skipping a chapter. I really like this book. 🌹

Kyle Chopper - the model wizard of Hogwarts A boy's perspective, birth time travel Both parents are wizards, and they are neighbors of the Weasley family's burrow, Badger Yard The younger Weasley twins Cedric, first grade, Big Harry, first grade, Have the ability to communicate with magical creatures, The protagonist is a calm and deceptive character, pretending to be a pig and eating a tiger, Giving the protagonist a golden finger is too generous, such as the protagonist's Disembodiment Curse and the Patronus Curse. If any other HP fanfic were to use these powerful spells, they would spend several chapters describing how difficult and miserable the protagonist is to learn. However, Kyle did not. How difficult is it for animals and how difficult it is to grow magic plants? This is considered a branch line The writing style is cheerful and funny, but a bit straightforward The rhythm is tight, smooth and smooth, Almost one chapter has a plot The characters have a lot of monologues, and the protagonist likes psychological complaints The plot design is funny and vivid, especially the classroom content is always the essence of comedy No matter where the protagonist wants to give Banban Breeding, Mikel, who is still a first-year student in the Badger House, used a lighting spell to create a flash bomb in the Charms class and beat up the little eagle, badger and Professor Flitwick. Professor Flitwick could no longer see him. He yelled calmness to the magic paintings on the wall. When he got off the stage, his feet were still crooked, hahaha The little wizard in the second-year Lion House used an enlarging spell in the Charms class to turn a little lion witch into a super-large balloon, floating in the classroom! Oh My God! This picture is so powerful! Laughing to death! It's really interesting! There are always surprises in the Charms class in this novel! The Potions cauldron will always explode! Because Snape's niece Connor is here, points will be deducted from Kyle, and points will be added from Connor's side. It's a very double standard for Snape! As long as the Defense Against the Dark Arts class uses small creatures as teaching materials, there will always be unexpected situations. The Transfiguration class and the Herbology class are similar to the original books, so there are no surprises The graphics are very strong, and they are very similar to children's books.

I finished reading it in one go. Overall, it is a very good HP fanfic. I have read many fanfics before this. How to judge good and bad depends on whether their writing style is relaxed and relaxed. Everyone writes fanfics to make more or less changes in this grand magical world, to change the world or change the ending. If it is well written, it is just like the original work. The fairy tale-like magic and dialogue make readers feel comfortable. However, if it is ordinary written, it will make people feel that this is not Harry Potter at the beginning. It is still difficult to write HP fan fiction in a reasonable way. Most fan fiction will gradually lose control of themselves before the secret room, or they cannot control the unfolding of the grand world view in their fan fiction. But this is also what this fanfic does well. From beginning to end, nothing was done that was very deviant from logic or the original setting of the story. Unbridled imagination is also based on certain settings. Based on this, I still give it a high rating. Especially if you read many fanfics in a short period of time, this contrast will be obvious. From what I have seen so far, although the author is still updating, the original story of Harry Potter is basically nearing the end. Although there is also a relatively sluggish development, the flaws are not concealed. It is a good story. I hope it can give a positive impression to readers who are still hesitant after reading the book review. Keep reading, it's worth it.

In the early stage, it was a fun-loving youth campus comedy mixed with a bit of a battle of wits. Later, it began to move towards the legendary political comedy "Yes, Minister of Magic". The protagonist himself was well portrayed. Except for communicating with magical animals, the rest of the improvement in strength was due to his own efforts, but it is better. It's all about connections. After all, most authors who can write a protagonist who is awesome can do it, but it's very rare to be able to write people around the protagonist with distinctive personalities, especially with a large number of self-created characters. The interaction of this entire network of connections is what makes this book worth watching.

If the love line is not well written, why not consider not writing it? After all, there is little impact without a CP. If you write a random CP, you will end up with Conan. And if you have magic, what kind of girlfriend do you want? Do you still want to be a great magician? Look at the three black and white devils, which one has a girlfriend?

Just don't be Hermione as the heroine, I'm tired of aesthetics

How about setting the pig's trotter Animagus as a crocodile? It feels like it has a strong beauty.

Personally, I think this is a very good HP novel. Mainly, I like the warm daily life on campus, the sincere friendship between friends, and the sense of ignorance and innocence. But it's not just ordinary school life, so that's why I read HP fanfiction. This book perfectly meets my requirements. The daily writing is written, the plot is complete, and the details can show that the protagonist is strong but not outrageous. It gives people the feeling of slowly growing up from the first grade (maybe because there is less pretense). Originally, I wanted to say more, but after thinking about it, it's not necessary. The protagonist is very powerful. He doesn't deliberately pretend to be a pig or "show his holiness", and he can protect the people around him from being bullied. I personally like these ordinary and real daily life, which makes me yearn for and bring me in, come on. Writing about daily life also requires skill. If you are not good at it, it will be ok (some HP is really high). At present, I personally don't seem to be good at it most of the time. I hope the author will make more updates🙏🏻

The author is considered a good hand at writing fan fiction, and it fits the original work very well. Whether it is the character design or the protagonist's ability or magic application, these are all in line with the atmosphere of the original work. The only time the author messed up the secret room chapter with his own imagination, but overall it's a good fanfic and the next one is worth looking forward to.

Just change the magic, and the heroine will be determined. Tom Riddle. Naruto has a snake aunt😏😏😏, and the magical world is not a bad idea. Tom's sister is strong, has been on the throne, has an iron-blooded struggle experience, has a firm belief, and has countless fans. She only wants to return to the throne and dominate the European magic world. The protagonist can be a strategist, a general, and a king😏

The Chamber of Secrets chapter is poorly written, and the protagonist's behavior is unbelievable. Many HP fans will write Dumbledore as a villain, but not many will write Dumbledore as Alzheimer's disease. The author is one. This precursor was already present in the Philosopher's Stone chapter. The entire Philosopher's Stone test level was carefully designed by Lao Deng. Lao Deng will definitely keep an eye on Harry at all times. The protagonist deliberately chooses the day when Harry takes action to complete the entire level. He must ask Voldemort directly about the Horcrux while Lao Deng is watching. At that time, I felt that the plot had exploded. Later, the author patched it up and said that Lao Deng didn't even see what Voldemort was doing, so he reluctantly endured it. I can't stand the secret room chapter anymore. The entire plot has exploded, and even the patches from the Big Four can't make up for it. The protagonist travels through time and attacks with a basilisk. What's the logic of his behavior? In the original work, Harry was besieged by dementors and was saved by someone using the God Guard. He traveled through time to go to that place to see who it was, but there was no one. Harry saved himself with the God Call. This logic is complete. The author's plot is that Harry is besieged by dementors, and then the dementors are deliberately attracted by Harry from the future. Why? Oh, Harry in the past was besieged by dementors, so Harry in the future has to ensure that this event will happen. How funny is that?

I read it in one go, let's talk a little bit about it. First of all, I think this is a good book. It has flaws, but the flaws do not hide the good points. It is worth reading. I write this in the hope that it will help the author improve. After all, the author writes wonderfully and it is a pleasure to read. The obvious advantages of this book. The author has indeed grasped the writing style of the original work, and it feels like the "original work" when reading it. Reading between the lines can always make people feel that this is in HP. The characters of the original work have also been expanded to varying degrees without being OOC. The thing that impressed me the most was Snape's two or three things about expanding his private arsenal of medicines. There was a sense of joy and it really seemed like something Snape could do. The various expanded interpretations of the details of the original work are both interesting and do not feel abrupt or foreign, which is rare. The flaws in what I have read so far, I feel, are mainly caused by one problem. I summarized it as "the author over-introduces the protagonist into the book". In other words, when writing a book, I failed to separate myself from the protagonist well. As a character in the book, the protagonist's own "personality" is not independent enough. But fortunately, only the protagonist is like this. I think the author still brought the other characters to life. This point reflects at least two points in the writing of this book: First, the protagonist is relatively too calm and omnipotent. 2. Some plots are slightly unclear in their writing. The protagonist is too "calm" in the face of everything that happens. At present, the plot is largely original due to the intervention of the protagonist, and the plot of the original work has been broken and can only be used as a background board. Even though the protagonist is a time traveler, he behaves too calmly. Because the author knows what is going to happen next, the protagonist also "knows" it. It is shown in the article that he is confident and does not panic at all, and can do anything with ease. There is no need to consider the negative consequences of any action taken by the protagonist, because the author has already arranged it, and subsequent development is locked, even if there are other possibilities in theory. The most typical example of this is that the devil's vine is replaced with biting cabbage in the early part of this article. According to the development of the story, the person who jumped down the trap door may be Rocky or the trio, but when the protagonist is replaced by cabbage, there is no text description to express this concern. Because it had been arranged, Wen Luoqi would jump down first and fall half to death, so the trio took the initiative to prepare brooms and fly down without being able to fall. The second point is that occasionally the description is not clear. The overall reading of this book is quite smooth, but there are always descriptions of some plots that make people feel that the context of things is not clear enough. This feels like the author has confused his own understanding with that of the protagonist. As a result, "known things" that the author has not stated before are mixed into the description, causing the reader to feel that the description is missing and the context is confusing. Fortunately, this situation does not occur frequently, and the actual expression can be basically made clear by contacting the context. This is my reflection after reading. I hope I can attract the author with my nonsense~

Beautiful, recommended. The author grasps the character of Hufflepuff very well. The little badgers are kind but not stupid. The little badger written by the author is the kind who provokes the lion and the snake to fight against the fake, then watches the show from the side, and finally sends the injured one to the hospital. So everyone remembered that the little badger would send people to the hospital, while the lion and the snake would only fight...😂 Very interesting. Actually, I feel that now, the little badgers are the kind of heroes who can both "I am a student and send me this" on the Internet😂 and at the same time, they can share seeds😜

I can say that the first half is the best I have seen in HP, but the second half is too bad. I prefer to watch the protagonist explore the magical world. I am tired of watching all kinds of gauzy Voldemort plots. I originally came here for the protagonist to explore the magical world, but the rest of the book is full of fighting with Voldemort. Why don't I read the original work? I've judged it to be a low-grade HP fanfic in recent years. Anyone who still writes the plot of the original work is already unfavorable. Other fans may not have as delicate a writing style and plot as this book, but they at least jumped out of the framework of the original plot. One Voldemort wrote half of the book, which makes it hard for me to believe that this is a new HP fanfiction. The front part is very exciting, especially the magical beasts, but the back part is disgusting. I skipped to finish reading.

Have you never read the Harry Potter fanfics? This isn't very pretty either.

I couldn't help but give up after seeing the secret room chapter. The whole secret room chapter is full of arrogance and seeking death. A time traveler took the diary and lost it. Then all subsequent misfortunes are the responsibility of this person. It's very annoying.

When I saw the protagonist in third grade, I really couldn't hold back. The most taboo thing in the novel is that the protagonist feels that everything is under control, only to be manipulated by others. If you want to write a plot where the protagonist is defeated, don't give the protagonist so many hangups. Writing a strong protagonist and then not knowing why the notebook disappeared or where the voice came from is not called a genius, this is called a clown.

Please add some details, by the way. Give me more numbness! ! ! I want to see Connor and Kyle together! ! Ah, of course, it would be best if Snape could witness the marriage, and by the way, Snape's vault should also be moved back 🤭

I like the author's plot of the interaction between friends, that's all The part about the Sorcerer's Stone is very bizarre. He knew that Lao Deng would pay attention to the Sorcerer's Stone, why did he go to it? Or what are the benefits and purposes? Ask Voldemort about Horcruxes and magic? The friend in the comment section is right, the protagonist's behavior is completely unreasonable. The secret room is even more outrageous. Where did the time turner come from to get him involved, especially when he ran to find the basilisk at the beginning? Is he really just holding his cock and pretending to be invincible? He didn't tell anyone where he went. What if something went wrong? Furthermore, the growth of the protagonist's strength is very strange. At the end of the first grade, armor and body protection appeared directly. I probably didn't see anywhere that the protagonist learned or came into contact with this magic spell. He naturally used it when fighting. All the curses in the magic stone also appeared suddenly. Snape's character design is also strange. How could Harry Potter still focus on the protagonist after entering school? Potter's hatred value is one of the highest in Snape's heart. Even if the protagonist's mother had a conflict with Snape before, it can't compare to the savior. As far as the protagonist's awesomeness comes from the mouth of the supporting character, I don't understand why the protagonist is so awesome. What did he do to be so awesome? It's entirely possible that he controlled the diary and didn't complete the part in the secret room. He wasn't even fully prepared for the fight with Riddle in the last part. The protagonist who was so prophetic was reduced to having to fight the boss directly without being prepared. The protagonist's path was too strange.

It can be said to be pretty but not too popular.

It would have been better if the protagonist had not opened the secret room earlier. He opened the secret room a semester earlier for so little material and even released a basilisk, thinking that the author was going to push the plot himself. However, in the secret room volume, everything was back to the original point, and even from the beginning of the semester to the end of the semester. Apart from highlighting the protagonist's incompetence, I can't see any meaning here. If you change the plot and go berserk, you will just wait.

I have also read a lot of HPs by authors. Every time they write about Quidditch, they are all written in one sentence and I am too lazy to read them. They cannot arouse any interest.

I have always been curious about why authors who write fan fiction would write original female protagonists. Generally, when reading fan fiction, they are not always interested in the background and content of the original work, etc. It is better to write original female protagonists than to write without female protagonists.

The character of the protagonist in this book is really abstract. I haven't read much of it. The protagonist has already done a lot of abstract things. It can be said that it is traditional to be separated into different houses and threaten the heroine. The heroine accepted the apology and gave the protagonist candy, but he refused to eat a word. When we were enjoying dancing under the moon in the Forbidden Forest in the early stage, the protagonist ruined the good atmosphere with one sentence. I didn't even say more. I don't think the protagonist's behavior is called funny, it's called low emotional intelligence. I'm sorry that I can't appreciate this kind of protagonist.

Originally, the setting for the opening chapter was quite good. He entered school a year earlier than Harry and could write some original plots or daily routines. As a result, by the time Ginny entered school, the protagonist had already obtained Voldemort's diary and had gone to the Chamber of Secrets to confirm it in advance. Later, the diary was lost inexplicably, and the basilisk came out to cause chaos. The protagonist acted like a normal person. Apart from asking Myrtle, he did not tell Dumbledore, nor did he go in to confirm the status of the basilisk, nor did he investigate the lost diary. You have been joking around in class like a normal person all day long. This is obviously out of control. Things are on the verge of getting out of control. Let's not mention the loophole that the plot can continue as usual. How can you sleep peacefully at night at your age? There is no sense of crisis at all.

I really can't help complaining about some of the content, spoiler warning ... ... ... The protagonist's combat power is a bit too abstract. After graduation, he can't defeat more than ten saints and is being chased and killed. Your protagonist has admitted that he is running out of resources and cannot directly escape from the Saints. He has to run through a battle of wits, and even with the cooperation of the Basilisk and the Monster, he is not sure to kill the strongest Saint. He even escapes and is worried about being chased and killed, so he does not dare to stay in Austria (although there is a reason to return to the UK immediately, so why add a psychological plot that the protagonist is afraid of being chased and does not dare to stay longer?)... And you have reached the stage after graduation, and the plot has reached the last fifth and is coming to an end. Not to mention trying to get past Dumbledore and Voldemort's combat power ceiling, is it a little bit that you can't even defeat a team of super soldiers under the boss of the previous version? 🤔  Then, let alone fighting Voldemort twice, you can't even run away with all your beards and tails. You still have to rely on the Apparition Ring and take a Cruciatus Curse to escape... 🙃 And does the blood debt setting really have any use other than suppressing the protagonist's combat power? After reading four-fifths of the content, it was just set up that killing people with blood debt is bad, but the bad part was not mentioned at all. I didn't see the disadvantages of having blood debt, and I didn't see the benefits of not having blood debt. Based on this setting, to prevent the use of magic to kill Death Eaters, I had to add a stage to turn the hand of a magical animal, and then it was logical to ban all the protagonist's destructive magic spells. So, does the protagonist know the killing curse? He knows how to use Shen Feng Wuying, Vulcan to clear the way, and so on. Li Huo is very familiar with it. Do you have kd? Except for the blood debt setting, there is really no KD. Either it is banned in normal combat, or it is thrown out. The opponent, whether it is an elite monster or a miscellaneous fish, will not die for various mysterious reasons.       ，kd👍， (And what's even more difficult here is that the protagonist's mother used the silent method to directly wash away the blood debt... 6) Oh, by the way, this book is not a witty protagonist, so there is no such thing as a protagonist who just relies on strategy to trick the villains around, so there is no need for combat power and there is no problem at all. As far as the battle of wits is concerned, the protagonist's unmistakable calculations only appear when targeting his own people, such as pranks and development resources (brother, what have you developed?) To solve the appeasement issue of the Ministry of Magic. Regarding dealing with Voldemort and the Death Eaters, the main focus is not to ask what measures are taken, but to take preemptive measures, so now I don't do anything. After graduation, I really won't develop anymore. I will use strategies to trick the Death Eaters into wild affairs. After watching it for a long time, I really can't see any subjective initiative of the protagonist. Finally, Dumbledore in this book abandons everyone and uses a special time turner to see his sister when the wizarding world needs him most (it's hard to say whether this plot design makes his character more full or more destructive). Then he has to rely on the protagonist to pull him back. Well……