Start from the Mysterious Heart

As one of the first to start pursuing books, let me share my thoughts. It is amazing at first glance, the prologue is a blast, and the connection between the second and third chapters is perfect (of course you have to read it carefully, you may think it is about something at a glance), and if you read further, you will find that the author exposes some problems for novices, such as it is easy to skip the scene in some places, or write too much, show off the text, and describe too much. But the author learns quickly and revise with great care. He often revitalizes previously blocked areas with just a few strokes. It can be seen from the following chapters that he has been making progress. There are still flaws in the writing, but the flaws are not to be concealed. Speaking of writing style, after reading so many books, I really can't name any popular Internet literary master who is obviously better than this author (only classical ones, personally prefer Sister Jiao's kind of flowing writing style). Overall, it looks a bit like a combination of Jin Yong and the wild fox under the tree. Although the style is ancient, people with a certain reading foundation will not have trouble reading the article. Practice your writing skills more and integrate more interesting aspects of online writing. I believe you will get good results.

It's rare to see such a surprising novel. It's not just a piece of writing.

I've read about twenty chapters. The author's writing is good, and the weird atmosphere in the golden three chapters can be created well, but the pace is too slow. The protagonist, a ghost-killing boy, encounters Fairy Han by chance and is entrusted with a valuable treasure in a critical situation. He is then deceived by an expert and compensated by a skill. Seventeen chapters of this plot, which took place in less than a day, have not yet satisfied the readers' expectations. Then the following plot briefly mentions how the protagonist practices the Four Nine Mysterious Skills and enters the world of immortality, but suddenly a cliché villain provokes him and is killed; it's really strange, okay? Then what's the point of the protagonist willing to risk his life to kill the ghost boy in order to get the chance to cultivate immortality? It's wrong to set it up. I didn't read it carefully at the end. I scanned it briefly. It was very routine. I didn't know what the protagonist wanted to do next. The main line was not clear. Online articles need to set a short-term or long-term goal and let the readers know it, so that the readers can have a sense of involvement, have the desire to pursue the book, and feel more refreshed when the climax comes. I hope the author will polish the plot and write better and better. Newcomers with this writing skills are much better than those who write vernacular anecdotes.

I saw this book on Douyin. The author is probably a classmate of my classmate's classmate? Anyway, we are all classmates, haha ​​(*￣▽￣) If you are curious, come and take a look. It felt so scary at first, but I couldn't help but want to read it. It is really well written. I watched it off and on for a long time, and finally saw the latest chapter. The male protagonist reunited with his junior sisters after going through all kinds of hardships. I particularly like the part about Xue Ying. It feels like pure love. It reminds me of my first boyfriend. We were so pure and innocent at that time. When we watched Westward Journey together, I often fantasized about him coming to save me on colorful clouds. When we read novels together, we also imagined that we were the hero and heroine who were separated by various difficulties and finally got together after all kinds of hardships. At that time, we were young and naive and made many promises, but unfortunately we failed to make it to the end. Unknowingly, I talked a lot of nonsense... I wrote it in the middle of the night yesterday. I wrote it and deleted it, deleted it and wrote it again. I'm sorry, but no one here probably knows me, so I might as well post it. Give Xueying a golden box and hope the author can write it well and give her a good ending. ≧≦ There are also poor senior sisters Mu Ting, Yu Yan, and little junior sisters, each of them has their own good points, I hope they are all well.

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I wish Brother Mu a safe and sound life outside

I feel that the author knows how to purify the story. It's okay for the senior sisters to be so miserable. Two junior sisters were kidnapped by adulterers, and the master didn't dare to go. He also described so many scenes on the way to rescue people. It gave people the feeling that a long time has passed. I feel really bad for the junior sisters. I really hope that the author is less literary. I have to say that this book is still well written.

Swifts love flowers and will look for flower seeds every time they go down the mountain.

Another fairy tale that was delayed by the title of the book... I almost clicked the cross button... Fortunately, I clicked and read a few chapters. Newbies can actually understand that you need to use a book title to attract people, but your writing style is wrong. This kind of book title style is more light-hearted. You start with a suspense + overall ancient charm. Although the writing is really awesome... But it will filter out many readers at the beginning. A serious evaluation: The writing style is a bit invincible... It's so silky, I thought it was the vest of some fairy tale boss. "The sound is like the rain beating the ice, the snow waving the wind chimes" is a self-composed word, excellent, and rarely seen in online articles... The ancient poems written at the end are also quite good... Overall, the ancient flavor is very strong, and the story is quite fascinating, but the pace could be faster, and the description in some places is a little wordy. After reading more than ten chapters, there are a lot of foreshadowings. Sometimes you will feel dizzy. It depends on whether you can deal with it later. Looking forward to the later outbreak. After taking a look, I am the first one to seriously write a book review for you, please do me a favor

By the way, I forgot to mention, I hate the harem so much, I hope the author doesn't write it as a harem...

Mu Haotian's gentle and gentle voice contained some kind of power similar to destiny.

The moon leaves only sad people

Small buns

The writing style in the book has quite a classical connotation, and it feels like reading "Journey to the West in Red Mansions" (I'm not saying it out of mind, I've read each book eight or nine times), which shows the author's cultural heritage, the plot is also very fascinating, and the characters are very vivid. I love it, and if I keep writing like this, it may not be a masterpiece. Great support to the author.

The author's writing is so good. I just read the second chapter. I predicted that the protagonist should be humane, so I will support it on the book list!

The author's writing skills are really good in this book, and he doesn't look like a new author at all. The plot design is still relatively novel. Especially the ghost story at the beginning is so well written, it feels like you are actually there. Isn't it really a trumpet account opened by some great god? ? ? It's just that the title of this book is a bit unfamiliar. If I hadn't seen the recommendation at first, I wouldn't have clicked in to read it. I suggested changing the title of the book last night.

"The little girl Qingqing has met this young master"

I looked at the character list and saw that 12 of the 14 characters were female. In this case, a harem story is the best choice. Don't make the male protagonist act like a bastard at the same time. This is even more disgusting than a harem.

To be honest, the first three chapters are not interesting.

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