This Is My Time Travel

Maybe, maybe, probably, it's not a cool novel. It's more like a light novel than a cool novel. It's okay to have a lolita and explosive killings, but it's the same as the common problem with light novels: the excitement is too slow, and it's no wonder it has to be tepid.

It's well written. It would be better if a dividing line was added during the transition.

The subject matter is good, but it made me feel sick to my stomach. Now is no longer the era of pretending to be a pig and eating a tiger. Moreover, what you are writing is basically a pig. The protagonist is mentally ill, right? When I read your introduction, I thought it was humorous, but it turned out that it was a stomach medicine, so I changed the title and introduction. It was so deceiving. Goodbye

As dull as water The master of Yuanying Peak has no salary at all, which is really ridiculous.

The heroine is not interesting at all and is annoying.

The main characters are so strong and yet they are afraid of things. They are also brainless and a bunch of garbage.

That's it? At the beginning of the first chapter, you are advised to quit, and you will definitely be a eunuch

That's so rubbish. The top boss was followed by several foundation builders all the way and he didn't even notice it. He just relied on his defense.

The Emperor is the Riddler? You've survived the tribulation, but you can't defeat the emperor? No matter how dishonest you are in front of absolute strength, you will have to kneel down

Here I suspect that the author has the potential to be an M, who can tolerate being insulted by a woman, but can hit hard from the side when insulted by a man. This is not how you wrote Shuangwen. You get cool points by insulting the protagonist and then killing him in return.

To be fair, from the first time I realized there was something wrong with King Xiao to the time I continued to look for evidence to prove that King Xiao had something wrong. Reading these chapters really makes me want to vomit. You are not a policeman. You have the strength to destroy a top-level immortal sect on your own. If you didn't say that you directly chopped down Prince Xiao's mansion with a sword, you should go directly to see Prince Xiao, right?

The combat power of this low-level monk is becoming more and more like a martial arts

The front is okay, the writing is also okay, but your combat power and the way you handle the incident are very bad. I remember that it is difficult for the foundation builder who is approaching the golden elixir to defeat a few big men with knives, or the heroine. Secondly, you often state between the lines that you don't do anything, pretend to be a pig and eat a tiger, and you are not a policeman, but you have to think of a common man in everything. I have gone through various investigations like a common person, but I am always troubled by one thing and another. I have no ability to lift the table at all, and the protagonist has no ability except to shout and draw the sword. Is he really the same as the kind of saint who can't bear bullets? Does the foundation building really not know Taoism, talismans, spells, magic weapons, sword light, sword energy and so on?

How should I put it? How do you write it? This book is more like martial arts than cultivating immortals.

You can tell what's going on from the introduction! Travel through 20 years and turn 18! I thought it was some kind of joke!

What you write is rubbish, don't write it next time

Although I don't see many poisonous points, it is still difficult for people to continue reading a mediocre novel with no highlights. Even if it is poisonous, it can still disgust the readers. A novel that is all in all is really not even noticed by eunuchs.

Come on, I hope you can survive

There is an incredible genius in the comments. I don't know if he is here to read the novel or to do Chinese homework. I will tell you an ordinary sentence and I feel that what I said makes sense. Reading a novel has a lot to do.