Mystery: Fairy of Destiny

Regarding the kiss between the protagonist and Miss Justice and their subsequent performance, not only were they embarrassed, but I was also embarrassed to watch them. They were extremely toxic. They were best friends and had sex, and the process was extremely raw.

The battle between the three angel kings of destiny is so interesting. The big snake has two sequences and one characteristic, and the small snake has sequence one plus uniqueness. The special sequence two of the destiny path can accommodate the sefirah. In this way, the destiny path can create three angel kings. Let's fight.

When making a mystery fanfic, at least the main character should not be like a low-IQ loser. Can such a thing survive more than three chapters in a mystery world? In addition, the plot is really vulgar and looks like an urban novel. Please don't pollute the mystery

Let me talk about my poisonous point first Audrey saw the Wheel of Fortune tarot card The protagonist knocked down Audrey due to the trick of Miss Destiny Goblin, a plug-in It's not that I can't accept emotional scenes. But I think this description is very embarrassing. The protagonist is like a clown🤡, standing on the stage and being manipulated by others Audrey is not stupid and sweet. I don't like to just describe her beauty and silly behavior. I like her strong and brave side. It just so happens that that side makes me think she is heroic instead of delicate.

After reading more than a dozen chapters, the subject matter is okay, but there are many problems. The problem does not lie with the plot or the heroine as some people say. After all, judging from the former, this book does not have two plots at all, and the latter does not exist. If you look at the readers and the paradox, you will know that if you are scolded for writing a heroine in a mysterious fanfic, it is definitely the author's own problem and has nothing to do with whether there is a heroine or not. It can only be said that the author's signs of being a novice are too obvious. Long paragraphs of explanations, long paragraphs or even whole chapters of psychological activities make the text look very bloated. The performance of the protagonist is also not very good. It seems that the author has given an explanation, but in fact, in most novels, an ordinary person in the previous life, the protagonist who kills decisively immediately after rebirth will be scolded for at most one chapter, but the protagonist who "slowly adapts and changes" will be scolded for half a book. There are also old antique smart plug-ins, which I can only say were probably more popular ten years ago. All these are not enough

On the surface it seems reasonable, but upon closer inspection there are many loopholes and it's okay to look at it without using your brain. It is impossible for Black Night to support Antigonus. If they have a good relationship, they will be a party rather than an enemy in the Fourth Age. Moreover, the Mother of Heaven was made into a vessel for divine descending by Black Night. If Antigonus has a chance, he will definitely beat Black Night to death.

They're already best friends, and they still want a heroine, and she's so fucking poisonous

I want to make it clear that Tianzun can never lose, and suppressing him for a while is useless. Sooner or later, Ke will wear away humanity in the long run, but God will live forever

The author hastily changed the main character's name. It's still Qin Ming after more than ten chapters. It looks really funny, and Miss Fairy is definitely a pink Fairy Miss from Beng Sanli, definitely.

The setting of the latest volume feels very poisonous. It uses one's own clone, and so does the reader next door. It uses a doll to clone one's own woman, just like myself. I remember an evil book I read before also used one's own clone to possess one's own woman. I really shouldn't write this kind of thing less, it already makes me feel sick.

Uh, are you sure this is a secret? The writing is not mature enough and the plot setting is also problematic. I can only say that it is the average-to-lower level among the mysterious fanfics I have read.

Mystery, you talk about romance, are you forcing readers to rush outside? And you have too much inner drama, and you make a lot of funny comments

20 Chapters of nonsense. What are you writing about. The plot didn't advance at all. It's all nonsense, who wants to hear it. Funny said goodbye.

After reading a few chapters, I really can't stand it anymore. Thinking about high positions in a mysterious setting is also a kind of suicide. Your rank is not yet ready to bear the power of the real names of high positions. And if you know the real names of these existences, you will either be polluted or your head will explode.

Chapter 20. Don't plan to continue. I'll take a look at the front after you put it on the shelves. The biggest problem is that you didn't explain anything clearly. Chapter 20 was a waste of time. Just outrageous, okay? He is as quiet as a chicken on the outside but turbulent on the inside. There are really a lot of inner dramas. Chapter 20. The reality is not even three hours.

Uh... To borrow a word from other book friends: It smells like a good-for-nothing male protagonist in Japanese light novels

The emotional drama is written like a romance novel, maybe it would be more suitable to be a female channel

After a little effort, I gave up I read 20 chapters It was quite good to add psychological activities But there are 20 chapters, and there is no progress There are too many psychological activities, and it is a big one at a time Five or six chapters are still there. It is a short plot, and then it is all about psychology. Can't stand it Let's go watch Lord of Mysteries again.

If it's about the same meaning, don't segment it if it's not critical. Breaking a sentence into paragraphs will make it seem like a small chapter. Although the number of pages looks like a lot when you divide it into sections like this, each page feels less. Long paragraphs and short sentences are better interleaved. Another thing is to come up with an event quickly to change the protagonist's mentality and personality. Now he is a bit of a novice and otaku.

Can't even come up with a name for the second creation character? Fusheng Xuanhuang Tianzun originally had the name of Immortal Lord, and he originally created the universe from an earlier era.

There are too many inner dramas for the protagonist, and how many chapters have been written? Isn't it too long to write a magic potion until now? There are some things that need to be written at the beginning. Wouldn't it be nice to leave a little suspense?

It looks very strange, especially the inner drama of the goblin, which feels like a light novel. Choose the brave goddess & brave man to save the world. It feels like I'm reading a novice.

The protagonist's inner drama in the first few chapters is really too much to watch.

I'm so speechless. You're already a eunuch, so why don't you push me?

The plot is so long-winded, I am speechless.

I don't quite like this book. Can the author Jun write a novel about urban gods, so that the protagonist is destined to pass through the past?

A rare first

Is there a Shennong? How is this book?