Please Listen to the Voice of Black Magic

In order to speak, I even used a coin. How should I put it? The protagonist of this book can be completely characterized as a player, or the protagonist of a European and American horror movie. No matter whether there is danger or not, no matter whether there is a warning, no matter whether it will drag others to death, he will directly go up to something when he sees it, and also persuade others to follow him to die. To be honest, if he were not the protagonist, he would not be able to survive 100 words.

I just read Chapter 11, and I feel that the male protagonist is like an RPG protagonist with a God's perspective. Although he doesn't understand anything, he just follows the mission instructions and is done. When you meet a "green-named NPC" like the Detective Professor, just press and hold the space button to skip the dialogue. When you meet a red-named monster like the Witch's Doppelgänger, just go up. From time to time, you will encounter various "tasks" (black magic induction). Follow the task guidance to encounter the plot; you will also frequently use skills outside to gain proficiency.

After reading a little bit, I wonder if the author has discovered that the protagonist's language is too naive. When interacting with others, it is basically "Okay", "Okay, okay" and "Is that so?" Especially in the conversation between the detective and the professor, the words between the detective and the professor make the protagonist look more like a novice, like a junior high school student. Didn't the key protagonist travel through time? You still need to have a basic IQ. The language can be handled better, and the term black magic actually has a natural color of "high intelligence, calmness, and depth", and the protagonist behaves more like the protagonist of an adventure group in an RPG game. You can also carve it better

The writing is good, and it's all in order, but there are a lot of typos and sentences. For example, "written" is written as "written", "borrowed" in "excuse" is written as "borrowed", "imitate" in "as if" is written as "imitate", and "curse" in "curse" is written as "zu". In some places, "/" is added or omitted, and I just saw that the author created the word "". It is the first time I see this word, isn't it "", anyway, it is quite uncomfortable to look at it.

It's even, the girl said, it still feels the same as before. This kind of perspective of the protagonist who is almost separated from the whole world. The protagonist is obviously doing things that normal people would do, but he almost doesn't take anything into his heart. It's very pitiable.

I feel like the writing is quite good, but why is there no one at all?(.•́•̀.)

If you take our country's universal values ​​and go to another world, you'll all be good people.

This magic is very magical. Nowadays, many scientific magics no longer have the sense of idealism and fantasy. I can only say that the trend is a circle and I am tired of scientific magic.

Author, can you give me one?

The writing is good. The world view of the plot is very distinctive. The development of the plot also seems to have an outline. There is a thread that connects it together. It is that the author's grasp of the ups and downs of the plot of the work is a bit poor. The whole article has the same tone, and it is easy to lose patience.