I Open the Unlimited Sword System in the War on the Top

I have subscribed to Chapter 144, and the more I read, the more uncomfortable I feel. The author's understanding of Akainu Aokiji is still different from my own. I still think that if Akainu is the marshal, the orders from above can be carried out even if most of them are cut off. If Aokiji becomes the marshal, it is for stability. If it were not for the navy, he would still be for the stability of the sea. He would not even enter the New World and continue to maintain the orders of the World Government for 800 years. It is unknown how the orders from above will be transformed when they are passed down. Maybe what I said is a little confusing, but I just can't stand Aokiji's lazy justice. Your performance is really disappointing. Even if you hesitate about the justice of the navy, you will hesitate when the war is over. For every moment you hesitate, a few more soldiers at the bottom of the navy will die. I know this is not your fault. Even if you take action, they may not survive the next fight with the pirates. But you are a naval admiral and you are in charge of your affairs. Killing one more pirate can give a navy hope to survive. As for Kizaru's top performance, isn't he always like that? So I'm not too harsh on him. It's you, just because you behave like that, you still have the nerve to compete with Akainu for the marshal (I'm talking about the original)

In fact, the author of your book is still okay, but if you don't let people comment on your book, it won't have much chance of becoming popular.

After the author has finished writing, can he proofread it again to correct typos and delete repeated words? Although these do not affect viewing to a certain extent, changing them is better than not changing them at all.

The author's writing is not bad, but at the same time and basic in the paragraphs, but still, these words appear too much. I personally suggest that the author browse them after finishing writing to see where the readers find it difficult and then make changes.

Even the only plug-in in this book so far is half-baked. I wonder if there is a possibility that Emiya's exclusive projection comes with its own combat experience and panel.

I feel like the author's understanding of Akainu and Aokiji is a little different from ordinary people.

I have tolerated all the minor mistakes in the past. For example, describing dual-wielding weapons as two-handed swords are just minor problems. How many years before this plot started, General Peach and Rabbit? I have never heard of such a general in the navy. I really learned a lot from watching the same people.

This book is okay, it just depends on how it is written in the future. In fact, I think Pirates fan fiction is relatively easy to write. The main plot is clear and the Celestial Dragons are killed, and the other plots can be rounded out.

The chant of the Golden Sword of Victory is completely wrong. The liberation of the Sword of Oath of Victory and the inclusion of Star Breath in it are because, in terms of setting, the Sword of Oath of Victory is the Holy Sword of the Stars. The liberating language of the golden sword that must win is the sword of choice. Give me the strength to shoulder the responsibility of the king, Caliburn. I haven't seen the back yet, I hope it's more rigorous. If you are not sure what to sing, please check fgo or fgowiki.

I didn't pay attention until I read the next chapter. I just turned to the first chapter again. As for Goldfinger, the justice is not reflected much. It is just a heroic spirit template and points for killing people, but it only sells some weapons matching the heroic spirit. I always feel that something is missing.

Why don't you check it after you finish writing? There are so many typos and bad sentences

I would like to make a small comment. The author can think of a scene of using the Unlimited Sword System. Different Emiya Shirou uses different Infinity Sword System. If the author has thought about it, just pretend that I didn't say it.

Did the author intend for Uta to be a companion? It feels quite appropriate for Uta to be able to say "everyone is equal" in front of the Tianlong people.

For such a small post, the author might as well cut it.

I feel like the author's writing is good, but too few people have read it, right?

To put it simply, it is a cool article. I don't know if you have a brain, but if you look at it without setting and the original work, it is indeed a bit fun to read. But here comes the key question. The author's understanding and analysis of the One Piece world are too simple. I don't even understand who gave the protagonist the courage. Do you think that you can overthrow the world government and establish naval hegemony just by relying on strong combat power? The main theme of the One Piece world is oppression, resistance, and the yearning for freedom. The author is not very clear about where the oppression comes from. Is it possible that the world without the World Government and the Celestial Dragons will immediately become better? No, the World Government has only given the entire pirate world a relatively bad order. In fact, all sources of oppression are caused by insufficient means of production or unreasonable distribution. If there were no World Government and the Celestial Dragons, the world would still be in a state of war due to the distribution of means of production. Moreover, the world is too big and there are too many islands. Even the World Government only maintains the peace of the participating countries. In many cases, it will even be late due to lack of manpower. Moreover, that kind of chaotic era cannot be solved by a naval organization. Unless the protagonist can teleport and go to fight fires around the world 24 hours a day, and can live for decades or hundreds of years, it is possible to solve the chaotic world. But when the protagonist dies, the problem of distribution of production materials will reappear, and wars will start again. Unless there is another being like the protagonist who can put out fires all over the world, otherwise it will only fall into endless chaos. It is not as good as the era when the Tianlong government was in power. Therefore, this method requires the protagonist to put out fires and cultivate talents at the same time, but even if the new political system established by this method will still deteriorate, in the end, the "poor people will suffer first" due to insufficient production means, and then people will be forced to become pirates. Unless you can directly solve the problem of the means of production, this is an unsolvable problem. Therefore, many novels that travel to the world of One Piece do not involve too much content about reforming the world. In the early stage, they are either obscenely developed, and in the later stage, they rely on Goldfinger to accumulate enough power to overthrow the Celestial Dragons and then casually unify the world. They do not write much about how to reform the political system. Either it's just completely unfinished and I can't continue writing, or I just don't know what kind of author it is.

I didn't fully order it, so I skipped reading, but the writing is okay.

Generally speaking, it is a good grass, quite good.

Author, you have too many typos Don't you want to change them? Too many typos make it difficult to attract new readers.