Immortal Mansion Enlightenment

I like similar settings (there is a fairyland space) and sincerely hope that your work will sell well. Hello author, I just read four chapters and found some problems in the article. For example, the use of punctuation marks is a big problem. It is used inappropriately in many places, which greatly affects the reading experience. I hope it can be corrected. I have no other vulgar ideas. I just want to give you some suggestions so that you can retain more readers and make more money. Let me also read better Xianfuliu novels.

Update more and enter the world of immortality as soon as possible

Can the Immortal Mansion independently absorb the spiritual energy of the void to supplement itself, and also help the protagonist? Otherwise, the level of this Immortal Mansion is too low.

I feel like I've seen a similar opening before. . Very impressive

The writing is very nice, but there are too few chapters. Please give the author a boost and update it! The author must write to chapter 2000! ! ! I'm really looking forward to the following plot! Let's wait until we gain weight and then we'll see! Read it when you reach 1,000 pictures! ! !

You have too few, please update more.

Why are chapters 4, 56 missing and not added?

The use of commas makes my head hurt. Has the author written other books before? I remember reading one and the symbols are the same as yours.

For such a popular book as Mortal Cultivation of Immortality, I can never read it because the protagonist is a native. Newcomers who are new to writing about indigenous people must be mentally prepared to survive the poor performance in the early stage.

Is this entry method the Xianxia version of Peace Elite?

Well written, please keep updating the author

Can you not be a Holy Mother, stop pretending, and be more modest?

Put it on the shelves, I must order all of it to support it!