Mortal, I Traveled Through Time a Little Early

Trafficking in women is extremely poisonous, so book friends, please stop your losses immediately!

Five books in a row have been sold out, so how can I dare to invest? Moreover, this book has no thoughts of cultivating immortals at all. It is just a dark blue book with some assembly line work.

Collect red whisks, give birth to xuan'er, dry clouds and dew

This book has serious problems, and its style is particularly contradictory. First of all, the protagonist is a body-refiner, and then he is a rob cultivator. He is a kind of evil person who often does bad things. As a result, there is a plot where his daughter is robbed and disgusted by the Chen family. The protagonist also compromised. There is a very obvious personality conflict here. According to the normal way of writing online articles, for example, the plot of the daughter being robbed should be left until after the elixir is formed, and then the protagonist knocks on the door, punches the Hier Moon Sect, and achieves the supreme evil name (from the frustration of the daughter being robbed, to the hard training to improve oneself and prepare trump cards, to the door knocking out the Hier Moon Sect, the fierce Famous, complete a closed loop of satisfaction) The plot of the Chen family can be placed in the foundation building period. If you want to write a cautious flow, then first take revenge on the person who provided the horoscope, secretly inquire about the information, and come back with revenge. It is best to slander the hostile forces and start a war. If it was a normal and exciting story, then they would just fight back. The Chen family was furious, beating the younger ones and the older ones, giving away lives and treasures along the way, and eventually turned into fuel for the protagonist. Instead of being like this book, the daughter was robbed and beaten but could not be forgiven, and the Chen family was disgusted and settled the matter because the other party was powerful. Although this is a realistic writing method, it is not a web writing method!

The Moon Moon Sect forcibly took away the protagonist's genius daughter as a disciple by kidnapping, and made the protagonist's daughter suffer the pain of losing her parents at the age of seven. Is this because the sect is developing too well, so it specially cultivates a resentful genius disciple within the sect for fun? Even if Old Monster Qiong has a weird temperament and unpredictable behavior, after he handed over the protagonist's daughter to the sect, the Yuanying monks and other golden elixirs of the Biyue Sect didn't care about it?

What rubbish? My wife was killed, my daughter was abducted, and I still want to marry her after being slandered. The key is that she still owes

Immortal grass, brothers🐶🐶🐶

Human trafficker, right? People are bought and sold, right? After reading so many novels, this is the first time I saw someone who directly tied up a woman and sold her to the Hehuan Sect. You are the first one.

I've read a lot of novels, and the main character sells human beings and traffics young girls and young women. You can kill people and take treasures. I hate human trafficking the most!

Seeing that this first ray of purple energy is actually used to strengthen a body-building pill, you can roughly tell the level of this book. Also, although there is no conflict between spiritual practice and physical cultivation, there is still a problem of specialization in this book. It can only be said that the author did not pay attention and did not read the original work. I think that when writing a fanfic, you must at least respect the setting of the original work. Random second-hand settings will lose a lot of readers.

Kneel down and lick the protagonist? Send your daughter as a gift? It makes me sick

Shuhuang came back to take a look again. It was mainly because of your selective amnesia that I didn't pursue it. My daughter Nangong Wan must be in the Hidden Moon Sect. Earlier, it was inferred that the old monster Qiong had robbed the person. Later, I didn't know where he was due to selective amnesia. What's wrong? You started the article by saying that the protagonist, a time traveler, has seen mortals. Hey.

The protagonist is not doing well. His daughter disappeared after going out to play. His wife was turned into a vegetative state by someone else's soul search. The protagonist's daughter disappeared and was hunted everywhere all day long. By the way, your daughter is called Wan'er, and she was abducted by the number one person in the Jindan period in the original work in the Yanyue Sect. Will your daughter be the Nangong Wan'er in the original work in the future? Do you want to be Han Li's father-in-law?

I feel that Nangong Yingying did not die. It was the author who forcibly prevented her from dying after seeing such a strong reaction in the comment section. At that time, Nangong Yingying was seriously injured, was soul-searched, and then received a last-ditch attack. She couldn't die, which was really far-fetched. And it's really strange that even a small foundation builder can't be found alive in a pill formation stage. I don't know what the author was thinking. It would have been fine if he didn't write it down in the first place. It would have taken so much trouble and was so unnecessary.

No negative comments, I understand everything🙃

Blood sacrifice has been a big deal recently. What kind of formation blessing can allow a Nascent Soul monk to perform a blood sacrifice of more than thirty yuan or more at the same time? Do you still think it's just rookies pecking each other during the Qi training period? It is normal for each battle group to be several miles or ten miles apart in Nascent Soul Fighting. With so many people fighting at the same time, the battle group must not spread out for hundreds of miles. What sword formation can cover such a large area? Besides, when the monsters come up, they all go all out, and not a single one of them can hold the line. Which of the Nascent Soul cultivators is not well-informed? They have only known each other for a few days and yet they feel so confident about joining your sword formation? Dozens of Nascent Soul cultivators and eighth- and ninth-level demon cultivators are all useless and have lived for hundreds or thousands of years. He didn't have any life-saving skills, and was slaughtered by the protagonist like a pig. The novel has caught up to this point, and the plot of the blood sacrifice is truly speechless.

Talk about fairy grass and good plot. Can anyone give me your contact information? I also want to make money!

A modern time traveler who has become a monk in the Danjie stage and still engages in human trafficking? He also told his subordinates how to expand the industry

Fellow Taoists: Since the timeline of time travel is a bit early, the plot structure is relatively free. If you have any ideas, you can tell me in the comment area.

The writing is very good, very good, very good, and the important things have been mentioned three times. Come on, the author.

Can you believe that the Fire Bird Technique, which is used in the primary and advanced stages of Qi training, costs 900 spirit stones?

It's really a bad life for Han Li. It's really convincing that he licks such a selfish thing.

200 Miles in one hour is 100 kilometers in two hours. The speed of 50 kilometers in one hour is not as fast as a motorcycle. The light-escape flight during the elixir formation stage is not that slow. You said that 50 kilometers in one hour of Qi training is not bad, but you have already achieved 50 kilometers in one hour.

Trash novels, definitely don't read them. My daughter was abducted and trafficked. I didn't care. I accepted it as if nothing happened.

The author writes very well and with great care. The plot is very good.

What is the most important thing about writing a novel? It is to avoid the poisonous points that many novels make! What is a poisonous point? A simple summary is that most readers will feel disgusted when they see this kind of plot and don't want to read it! For example, in order to advance the plot, the author gives the protagonist a group of wits and forcibly creates conflicts and plots. If you don't know how to write and advance the plot, you can give the enemy intelligence, but you can't give the protagonist a halo of intelligence! Otherwise it will be a big poison! Or the Holy Mother, anyone can take advantage of the protagonist and suck his blood? I still think it's natural, but the protagonist smiles and expresses his pleasure. This is also the poisonous point. And like many authors who write fan fiction: just read the original novel briefly? Don't you understand many of the original settings? I started to change the settings. I even had too many private products and liked to preach to readers. These are all poisonous points. There are also things like pimping people, or working as nannies for the original protagonists, these are all very poisonous points. There are many more poisonous points mentioned above. . . If the author of the novel can try to avoid it as much as possible, I think it will be okay even if the writing style is almost bad, and it can be considered a good thing! If the writing was better, I could use fairy grass! 😁😁

I don't know why I keep that Taoist companion. The author of the emotional drama is also very awkward. He has to take care of her during the fight. The protagonist has to find training resources. It doesn't help at all. It's just a burden. If you need it, you can spend some money. It's not embarrassing.

The ultimate trash novel. If you read it again, you will feel that you have wasted precious time in your life. The author wishes he could give himself to Han Li as a watchdog, chasing Han Li every day just to eat Han Li's rice.

40,000 Foundation-building pills, a foundation-building monk from the Chen family wants the protagonist to be his son-in-law. . If the protagonist doesn't agree, he brings the tracking weapon to chase him. The protagonist finally survived and had to compromise with the opponent's situation. My daughter was robbed, and I learned about her daughter's cultivation speed. The author is forcing the plot to go on the "right track" in order to fit in with the original plot. Gold Finger has innate purple energy, which strengthened the elixir for the first time, and he did not try any spiritual root, body, or other techniques. The author explains foreshadowing. Anyway, I couldn't stand it anymore after reading Chapter 33.

The time traveled 100 years earlier and the heroine was completely unrecognizable. Do you really want to fuck a woman that much? , You can choose Hong Fu to be the heroine, you can choose a pink skull to be the pill form a hundred years ago. If the plot doesn't start at the right time, you can go directly to Xin Ruyin, and you won't waste your brain.