I Run an Inn, and It’s Haunted

After only a few chapters of Clam Girl came out, the impression was very poor 1. Since the protagonist has branded Clam Girl as a hard-working and heartfelt tool, it would be superfluous to engage in so many psychological activities. 2. One of the weirdest aspects of the protagonist is that as a weirdo, the protagonist treats everyone equally and is indifferent to emotions. The protagonist's emotions have changed too much in the chapters since the release of Clam Girl. He looks like an ordinary person, not weird at all. Is it normal for him to have a temper? Think about it yourself, and use it as ingredients in the pot instead of letting the other party leave tears and the protagonist will go over to comfort and reassure you, looking like an ordinary person with some ability. In general, it is better to find a so-called clam girl than to find a weird and awesome waiter. Then there will be a bunch of waiters in the store who are all powerful and weird, which looks okay and can also give customers a sense of oppression. A clam girl has no use except to look good. However, who comes to this weird inn to look at beauties.

The first chapter can be written like this, with a lot of language errors, tediousness, and weak character descriptions. I don't know how to continue reading. 1. Night had fallen early, and dark clouds secretly shrouded Luoshui City during the night. The silver frost brought by the full moon did not appear at all. (The night has fallen early, dark clouds are shrouded, and the full moon has not yet lit up. The description of the scenery sets off the hasty feeling of the characters' escape, and also sets up the weird atmosphere for the appearance of the weird protagonist. It is okay, but the use of early/sneaky refrains greatly weakens this feeling. , This is because the silver frost brought by the full moon did not appear at all - two predicates in one sentence, a bad sentence) 2. Only the doors and windows blown by the strong wind kept making "bang bang" sounds, and the movement before the wind and rain was disturbing the peaceful sleeping people in the city. (Doors and windows blown by the strong wind, otherwise it is a language disorder. The movement before the wind and rain/disturbing the people sleeping peacefully is too pale and weak. And you are from an ancient background, not the people but the common people) 3. Although she carries a long sword in her left hand, she should not be an ordinary weak woman, but the long sword in her hand now does not bring her any safety. (It brings a sense of security psychologically. It brings safety when the characters come into direct contact. Instead of carrying a long sword, it should be held and held. She is not an ordinary weak woman, but a different kind of weak woman? Another logical problem) 4. "And considering how much the family attaches importance to the things we carry, we will definitely rush here as fast as possible. I expect it will arrive tomorrow." (Quote) Sick, this sentence ends with..., Definitely..., Lacking a subject, who will definitely rush here? And not at a high speed, but at a high speed/get) 5. After calming down a little, Yan Yuxiu supported the injured brother in his left arm, and the two began to walk along the street to find a suitable hiding place. Now they would be safe as long as they spent the night. (As long as you spend tonight, you will be safe. Now / spend tonight /, that's it, a logical syntax problem in timing) 6. It is now midnight, and all the shops that are still open in Luoshui City, except for the Fireworks and Wine Alley in the west of the city, have basically closed to thank customers. (Midnight at midnight? It's almost midnight) 7. "There is an inn with a really interesting name, and it seems to be different from ordinary inns." (Escape is also interesting and interesting, pretending to be a pig and eating a tiger? This woman was panicking before, but now she is in this mood and is joking?!) 8. In no time, the door opened with a creaking sound, and a young man with sword-like eyebrows and starry eyes, black and white eyes that were somewhat mysterious, and wearing a black brocade dress appeared in front of them. (Sword eyebrows and starry eyes are an old adjective; eyes that are black and white are pure nonsense, eyes that are not black and white are directly weird; there is a bit of mystery in their eyes. Whose eyes can reveal mystery? Is it logical? Xuan is black, Xuan is black, and the language is wrong.) 9. "But this girl is quite cool-looking, hand over the baggage you carry, and let the brothers have fun. , Maybe I will let you live. "Yes, hehe." (The gangster's teasing language is weak, and the younger brother's words are missing) 10. "Ahem, fighting is prohibited in your inn." (How can you treat the protagonist as a transparent person in such a weird inn? What's the reminder? And what is your inn? Are there many inns? It's another language problem)

It's so boring, I thought it was a weird stream, but I didn't expect it to be a show of pretending to slap Long Aotian in the face to save the beautiful Virgin Mary.

I feel that the writing is very unique. It is normal for a new book to have some shortcomings. Other readers should stop criticizing the author and let the author finish the work.

It's interesting at the beginning, but boring later on. The only interesting thing is that the protagonist is inhuman, but the author wants to become human later on. The protagonist's tendency towards the characters is too obvious, out of character

Looking for some ideas. If you have any ideas about monsters, you can leave your names, abilities, and detailed introduction What are the effects of cooking with monsters, dark appearance, and good taste? You can write them down. If they are good, you can borrow them

I support creative ideas, they are much better than those systematic novels.

It has started to fall apart, and it feels the same from now on.

Although you want to set up Clam Girl, but looking at it all the way, the advantages of women are not reflected in her at all, and the shortcomings are vividly reflected, which sums up a very disgusting character.

There is no weird look, I feel like a boy delivering treasures