Family, I Will Be Immortal at the Beginning

The author's writing seems too awkward. The attributive in each sentence is so long. It's just like trying to make up for the number of words in an essay before. Can't you divide that sentence into two sentences?

Xiang Shen is not afraid of the smell of wine. The subject matter is well chosen, but the writing style needs to be improved. It will get better and better in the future, come on!

In family novels, if you don't marry a wife, you are a poisonous person. If you want resources, you might as well join a sect, and you will have everything in the later stages.

A typical assembly-line work, with all kinds of ill-informed words and phrases, a preface that does not match the subtitles, and a bad book.

When people and spiritual roots become one, people take the initiative, the tree maintains tranquility, the tree nourishes the blessed land, and people practice Taoism, this is cultivation, this is the earthly immortal way.

The writing doesn't read smoothly and sucks.

You have too many typos and unclear sentences.

Every person on the first floor every day! Go, go, go! ! !

Read the comments, what do you mean? Brothers, is this a nanny-type family story with no offspring? That's so fucked up.

Let's retake Chinese. If you can't do the basic writing basics well, do you still want to get good grades? Punctuation errors, grammatical errors, wrong sentences, and wrong words are all in a mess.

There are really too many bad sentences. Can't you practice them carefully? It looks very uncomfortable.

A rogue cultivator is a rogue cultivator, and a family is a family. What kind of descendant of a rogue cultivator family? If you can't distinguish between the two things, your family will not be considered a casual cultivator, and a casual cultivator will not have a family. Really speechless.

I can guarantee that this was definitely written by machine AI

This kind of family story is so stinky and long. I don't know who sold it but the outline is almost the same.

The writing is so strange, especially the world view. How can a family develop in such a bad environment? This kind of bad environment must be caused by sects all over the country and not by small messy families.

By the way, the author didn't check himself after writing. In the first few chapters alone, there were a few bad sentences at the beginning, and they were not smooth to read. He checked them after he finished writing, and it didn't take much effort to straighten out the article. It would be a waste of time if he didn't do it now and wait until there are more words later. There is no requirement for writing skills, at least there shouldn't be typos, and there shouldn't be any bad sentences. This is at least the basic condition that a novel should have.

The sentence is somewhat strange!

It feels a bit confusing to watch, and many settings, including the protagonist's new tricks, are used directly. There is no clear positioning. After all, if the protagonist is like this, it is definitely not an invincible novel. It doesn't matter if the invincible novel is vague and vague. Anyway, it is enough to know that the protagonist is awesome. This kind of mortals still hope to know everything about the protagonist and then watch him move forward step by step. . . .

The plot could be better written. Haha, there is no other adjective except old. Damn, after listening to it for an hour, all I heard was old.

There are a lot of typos, so many of them, basically in every picture. After you finish writing, read it over and fix the typos, right?

I read Chapter 9, and I have a question. Since the protagonist can easily kill someone named Lu and keeps saying that he has no resources, why not grab it? Especially before San Gong? There are only five known people in the continent who are more powerful than him, so why don't they dare to rob him?

Why are there so many typos and wrong sentences? Don't you want to modify this? Still want us to subscribe?

The setting is good, but the writing is not good

Now that I think about it, I've read it a long time ago, because the eunuch deleted it, why is it showing up again now?

I asked why I am so familiar with the author A, Er, San and Xiao.