Immortality Begins with Contemplation

It's well written, but there are two problems. First, the rhythm is too tight, and the protagonist is always in danger, which makes people breathless. Second, the words are too loose, going too far, and it seems a bit watered down.

The writing is quite good, but could the acting in the elder years after the master's death be less pretentious? I just want to look at it and keep turning the pages in embarrassment. It's so irritating to my eyes. Don't you think it makes people feel like they're overexerting themselves?

It was okay at the beginning, a hodgepodge of various things, but it felt good and I thought there was a surprise. After 80 chapters, it was a mess and I couldn't stand it anymore. I took risks when I needed to be stubborn, and I didn't kill decisively when I needed to eradicate the roots. When you can deceive people, write it as you can't deceive people; when you can't deceive people, write it as you can deceive people. Emotions are in a mess, kindness does not feel like kindness, hatred does not feel like hate, and resentment does not feel like resentment.

I feel like there's something wrong with your way of writing. Or there are problems with plot design and character creation. From before I saw the latest listing. It's refreshing but a bit depressing. This is not a big problem. I think the big problem is that every time a disgusting person is killed, another disgusting character appears, and the disgust is connected. Moreover, there is a lack of positive characters, and one of them was finally killed. There is something wrong with the overall structure.

I've read more than thirty chapters, but I still don't know what kind of story you're going to write. It's all a bunch of nonsense.

This Haoran Sect is just to prove a sentence: The little demon in the temple is strong, but the Chi Qian is full of bastards!

I was persuaded to quit by the catalog rectification,,,

Visualize the caterpillar comprehending the art of turning into a butterfly, and visualize the husky comprehending the art of demolishing a house.

Written by Studio AI, I saw several books that were roughly the same, but I didn't like them.

I've read another book that also "visualizes" the Golden Finger, but it's the sun, the earth, and so on. The sun that the protagonist visualizes is much better than the sun from another world and has a special strengthening effect. With the visualization golden finger, after the protagonist visualizes the sun, he then practices sun-related skills that are more powerful than the original Kung Fu. The visualization in this book is about acquiring skills or techniques

The writing style above is too exaggerated, and it is extremely embarrassing to see the protagonist acting.

Immediate deletion of infringement

It's really awkward to check that part.

Crazy acting skills, too much effort, embarrassing group

There is a lot of nonsense, no end, what is the use of this sect?

All kinds of stubbornness in front, all kinds of waves in the back. One said that visitors from Blue Star can fuse memories, and the other said that they can find past life memories? Is the pig's foot still his own? Then, with the boss behind me, I watch costume competitions and have fun. Can I upgrade a little more quietly? I'm still there.

What do you say? The acting of the main character in the early stage was a bit awkward, and the writing of the two female co-stars in the middle was too disgusting, and then the progress was still relatively slow. After reading the latest chapter, it has improved a little bit. I would rather read the chapter after the Order of Immortal Fate enters the secret realm. It should be a high-level one. I hope the progress can be speeded up. Now, almost 100 chapters in, it is still a small fight.

The protagonist's character and behavior, Goldfinger, are all good, neither too big nor too small.

What's going on? I've created a book club. So far, no one has the guts to come in and play.

Build a supporting building, do you have any friends who want to play a supporting role? You can leave the name you want to appear. Since this is not a game article, I only accept serious names.

There is no way this book should be popular, 🐮

Except for the acting in the front, it becomes more and more acceptable later on. Just keep this writing method. This kind of protagonist's character is particularly suitable for the appetite. Author, come on