The Years When I Created the Ancient Heaven

I feel like the idea is good, the outline is good, and the writing is average, but the character creation is a bit poor. The strong person does not have the feeling of being strong. The protagonist's friends are the same over and over again, and they are all templates of loyal brothers, just like the 108 generals of Water Margin and the 108 Li Kui.

The author looks over, you are in it, and gives you a suggestion: This book actually deviates from the main line after the protagonist enters the sect, and is divorced from the title of the book. Most people who were attracted by the title or introduction have abandoned the book, and those who remain are those who like to read this type of content. Readers, then what you have to do at this time is to retain these people and attract new readers who like this genre, so what you have to do is to change the title of the book (give you a few titles: The end of cultivating immortality is science?, Holy Master, Cultivation of Immortality scientifically... Etc.) The content introduction must also be changed! At this point, the poisonous point has become a fairy grass for readers who like this type! If you think the suggestion is good, please give it a thumbs up! 😄

After reading Chapter 83, I found the problem, which is a bit general, like a thesis. The novel, the novel, does not tell a good story, but is scientifically cultivating immortality, like reading a textbook. Everything else is fine.

The author will think about it carefully and try to update it normally as soon as possible! ! ! I saw half of it, but it was gone. I was so anxious that I was dying.

The writing is sometimes good and sometimes bad, sometimes toxic, and a bit discouraging.

After thinking about it for a long time, I decided not to talk about the details, because it varies from person to person. Taking the author's first two books as an example, anyone who has read the second one (also the first one I read) will know that it is really bad at the beginning. The middle period, especially the second copy, is quite interesting at the beginning. However, I can't update it due to something else (it's a pity, I feel it is really well written). Although the ending is rushed, it can still complete the main plot. The first book is very interesting in the early and middle stages, but the rest is hard to describe. The first part of this book is all post-order. Although the free part feels like a lot of nonsense because of the free length, the essence of it is also the length of it that looks like nonsense. I didn't subscribe to some of them after they were put on the shelves, because they felt a bit out of my depth. Especially the previous updates feel a bit fragmented, with too many updates and poor quality. The recent Chasing I feel is a bit better, but the style of painting is not as exciting as the previous one. There is the tension of a nightmare, without the joy and achievement ahead. If the author has read something that affects his mood, please forget it and don't affect your own rhythm. Readers, if you don't like it after reading it, don't spray it.

If the mind is not clear, Chapter 27 is the limit for juniors. . It's really too wordy and doesn't make sense.

He saw it. . . . Damn your conscience. . . Damn outlook on life. . . I'm not coming. . .

So, can Croton not have such a disgusting scene?

​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​ Out of a scientific research article, and the scientific explanation is very creative, the setting is very novel. If you are interested in exploration or science, you can look at the back. Some places are like the Arcane God's exploration of the unknown.                                                                                                                                                                                                         are are are are are have are the result have been taken have been are the result have been drawn have been made are made. The obvious difference in this book is that it is in the form of scientific research notes. When you have a little inspiration, you can write a little, record a little, and write wherever you go in scientific research. It gives the impression that the protagonist and the reader know as much as each other, and there is an unexpected feeling of making progress together. But the author currently needs to adjust the distribution of space and content. The setting based on spiritual power and spirit seeds is very good. I am okay, but it is obvious that some people are not used to it and gave up on it. It is a pity that it is a good setting.

To be honest, it is too slow to heat up and not refreshing at all. It can be said to be very boring😓

I see a lot of people saying that the author's writing is long-winded. I think the author is very logical in many places. It's just that the people who comment on the long-winded comments are too impetuous and just want to watch fighting and killing. I can only say that this book is not suitable for you at the moment.

Author: Your imagination is really almost the same as mine in many aspects, but I lack knowledge and cannot express it, but you expressed it perfectly in words. I was really surprised when I saw it. It turns out that I am not the only one who thinks so. I really feel like I am a fellow-minded person, and my thinking and imagination abilities are amazingly similar. Cheers to the author for his next book😁

There is a big problem with this writing style. The author, please read the first two words of each natural paragraph in each page. Do you feel the repetition rate of the words is high? You can talk to others, but writing it as a novel is a bit problematic. The whole article was told to me in the author's tone. The protagonist's sense of existence is 0, and there is no such idea at all. The plot shows that it is the protagonist's own thinking. It is completely written in the author's oral style.

I finally read the latest chapter. Although the protagonist deviated from the main line when he entered the sect, and deviated from the title of the book in the middle, but now he has come back, and the author's imagination is so funny. To me, this book has only a few flaws, and it can be said to be a fairy tale! I would like to urge the author again to change the title of the book and the introduction!

Problem with this book. In fact, the writing level is still good, but the reason why the results did not meet expectations is mainly because the book was written like an instruction manual and lacked a sense of immersion. Although the word sense of substitution has been overused...

Ten points can be given for the research plot, but 1 point for other plots, which seriously lowers the overall level. In particular, the author likes to make the protagonist pretend to be embarrassed, and likes to make the protagonist appear holy in front of others. The social plot is also very awkward. I heard that the following year the Golden Elixir Qian Immortal and the Foundation-Building Qian Yuanying were incredible. . .

The writing is too complicated, too messy, and too boring. You can research it, but it won't work if you write down almost one-half of the whole story. Once you solve the forty-year limit, it starts to turn into a story about the protagonist pretending to be cool. It's very embarrassing. The protagonist is always portrayed as very smart, and as a result, there are a lot of stragglers in the plot later.

Abandoned, forced emotional drama. Too embarrassing

The summary is that the Holy Mother Bitch told the sect all her trump cards in more than two hundred chapters, and she couldn't see any of the cruelty in the world of immortality. Han Li joined a sect and honestly told the sect about the magic weapons he carried, the exercises he learned, and all the opportunities he had, and then he breathed a sigh of relief and finally said it out, comfortably.

As soon as I saw the phrase "scientific world view", I vomited! Everything can be said to be science, just let the cultivators go! 🙄

Those who read it hope not to be affected by the comment area. The first few chapters of this book are indeed not very good, but it becomes more and more exciting later on. But the author is not famous, and we readers are also poor, so the book is not famous either, but it is really a good book.

It's too poisonous. There is no sign of becoming the Jade Emperor in the future. No matter what achievements the male protagonist has made or how much he has contributed to the sect, he still looks like that. When the two women frown a little, the male protagonist wants to take out his heart to prove himself. There is no hesitation at all. He has been compromising and never stopped. I'm not a macho man, but you can't expect a male protagonist with no masculinity to make me pay. As of the last chapter before it is released, I have withdrawn it. I hope there will be more in the future.

It's not good to watch, there's no plot, it's all just fantasy. The author's idea of ​​cultivating immortality in this book seems to be an upgraded version of the internal strength system in martial arts novels, and then the protagonist uses some modern scientific theories to analyze it, which is completely nonsense. It's as ridiculous as using component theory to analyze Chinese medicine. The guiding ideology of Chinese medicine is the theory of rising and floating of yin and yang, which has nothing to do with Western medicine. For example, based on the ingredient theory, Western medicine says that ginseng can replenish vitality mainly due to ginsenosides, but ginseng leaves contain more ginsenosides. However, ginseng leaves not only cannot replenish qi, but are also poisonous. Rhinoceros horns have the same ingredients as nails, but grinding rhino horns into powder can immediately reduce fever and lowering the temperature. Grinding nails into powder and eating them is of no use. Furthermore, Zhengdao is the original Taoism and the Fulu sect. It is not completely true. It talks about inner alchemy. The Fulu sect cultivates merits and virtues. The Dharma is destiny and does not need to be practiced. The author uses scientific methodology to analyze it.

Come back and curse again, garbage, a waste of time. What is written in the introduction is fake. The protagonist has not yet practiced the fake thing to become the real thing. Halfway through practicing it, he told others about his golden finger. He has such a big heart, and everyone else is a kind person. The protagonist and supporting characters forcefully suppress their intelligence.

I just want to say: As the author, the protagonist you wrote is the big boss who founded the heaven, but look at what the protagonist is in your writing? ? ? The supreme person in heaven must have the most basic personality charm and deal with things well. He must not be a libertine, a mentally retarded person, or someone who plays tricks and tricks! The Supreme Being in Heaven must at least behave in an upright, upright and upright manner!

​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​Although there are some parts of the novel that are indeed bad, it does not affect the fact that this book is indeed a masterpiece! What bothers me is the name of the move! But even after I consciously forgot that chapter, it didn't affect my enjoyment of this book! Some people don't like this type of novel, saying it's about cultivating immortality through technology, but is this really about cultivating immortality through technology? It's just a modern way of thinking to create the world of immortality in the author's mind!                                                                                                                              A novel cannot be liked by everyone, so don't get hung up on this technological fantasy! Just leave if you don't like it!

It's hard to resist. There isn't enough writing power but the protagonist is forced to have a high-end character background. His behavior is at the level of a college student at best. The sense of fragmentation is extremely serious. The beginning is also chaotic. The plot arrangement is extremely deliberate. I suggest the author take a closer look at his writing style and settings. If you are writing for a novice, don't give the protagonist a too complex setting. When writing settings, you should polish the character behavior and plot transitions. .

After reading Chapter 14, the protagonist's talent was amazing, and the result was that his bone age was over 40. There were more detailed detection methods and he did not continue to test. He was forced to make a judgment. Others asked the protagonist, who is in his twenties, to make a joke: Although I look young, I am actually very old. The author of Niu, my evaluation of this forced useless writing method is, history! ! !

It's not good to watch. In the first three chapters, the protagonist is fed poison and has a heart attack. She doesn't even bother to save a young master with her own life. . . Cow ratio. I find it strange that some losers are shouting about the moral bottom line. You have seen monsters and are so frightened that you can't walk. Running away when you see monsters is a subconscious behavior. Don't compare it with saving people in modern society. Fear is greater than anything else.