Starting from a Mortal

Three or five Taoist companions are enough. It is best not to have more than 10. If there are more, it will be boring.

Come on, come on, I feel the writing is very good, I read it in one sitting

There are quite a few flaws in this book. First of all, you know Han Li. Why don't you try to get the vial? How do you know that the master of Samsara Hall, Han Tianzunyun, won't allow you to take it if you don't even try? You can't touch Han Li once he gets it, but if you take it before Han Li takes it, there's a high chance that Han Tianzun won't care about it. Second, when did Li Huayuan have the Qingyuan Sword Art? It was obtained by Han Li after he killed a big man from the Giant Sword Sect in the Blood Trial. Li Huayuan's one was mixed into a skill to refine the Green Bamboo Bee Cloud Sword. Li Huayuan himself didn't even know it. In the book, he took out a copy of Qingyuan Sword Art and gave it to Han Li as a reward. It was even more funny. Your sect came up and gave you the complete set of techniques that can help you to practice to the Nascent Soul stage? Are you not afraid of being searched for your soul? Are you afraid that you will just take the technique and leave? Third, the protagonist has practiced the metallic Tiangang Sword Art and asked Han Li what does it mean to ask for the Qingyuan Sword Art? You can't use it even if it's given to you. Do you want to waste all your efforts and start over? It's useless for you to use the Green Bamboo Bee Cloud Sword. Your skills and attributes are inconsistent and you can't exert its power at all. So the protagonist has a lot of confusing operations. Fourthly, if the protagonist obtained the Foundation Establishment Pill in advance, why didn't he try to take it immediately after entering the Bloody Forbidden Land and try to break through the Foundation Establishment Pill? In this way, the protagonist can get a lot of things. Apart from Nangong and Xiang Zhili, who are your opponents in the forbidden area? I thought that the protagonist was going out to refine more Foundation Establishment Pills and use the Foundation Establishment Pills to refine his body like Han Li. But it turned out that I was overthinking it. The protagonist went in and picked up a few melons and two dates and came out to take one Foundation Establishment Pill to break through. He also said that he could not completely refine his body like Han Li with just one Foundation Establishment Pill. I was wondering what the main character was doing by risking his life to enter the forbidden area? You must know that the protagonist is risking his life by going in (there is no such thing as invincibility during the Qi training period. The protagonist will die if he fails to pull out a piece of talisman. Everyone is high in attack and low in defense). If you don't get enough benefits, you will lose blood. Is this the result? Han Li has no choice but to enter the forbidden area. The protagonist has a 40% chance of breaking through with a Foundation Establishment Pill with his twin spiritual roots. Isn't it mentally ill to go in and get enough benefits even though he has a Foundation Establishment Pill? Once the key is revealed, it is not necessary to prepare a few Foundation Establishing Pills. You must know that the success rate is not a concept if you take one Foundation Establishing Pill one after another and if you fail to break through if you take one individually, you must take one at a time and take it again. One double spiritual root has a 40% chance of success. Taking two at the same time has a basic success rate of 70%. If three are used at the same time, it can be said that it is basically impossible to fail. I think the protagonist is so naive that he is really not suitable for cultivating immortality.

I feel that there is no need to cooperate with Han Li. It increases by 100 years at a time but it takes eight days to get a drop of green liquid. There is no need to lick it.

The front was fine... I saw that in the back I was a little angry and why he changed into Marvin... It's a pity and I'm a little disappointed.

At the end of the story, when you play hard, others have surpassed the protagonist. Even if you give a large amount of elixirs to others, you won't take them yourself. It is probably because the author failed in writing and was afraid that the protagonist would practice too fast and become a god in two seconds, so he suppressed the protagonist and ruined the plot.

Two different worlds of cultivating immortals are the biggest opportunity. Different systems, and knowing the plot, this novel is a good one to make time for cultivation.

World Building If you have any suitable world of cultivating immortals or golden fingers, you can leave a message below

Author, if you want to improve the protagonist's realm, you can go to Luofu and learn the Dharma Techniques such as the Wandering Recitation of the Heavenly Immortality Sutra, the Ten Thousand Swords Shattering Void Jue, and the Colorless Concentration Great Flower Wheel, which can open up thirteen thousand heavens. The consumption is thirteen thousand times that of ordinary people. It can definitely suppress the protagonist's state to death.

The real-life version of the Red Dust Fairy wants her boyfriend to pay for her best friend

I would like to give some suggestions to the author. There is no need to engage in dual cultivation techniques and lead a group of women around. Zhu Tianliu is basically running around with a group of women. Dual cultivation is a routine article written ten years ago.

The writing is getting worse and worse. I have been skipping chapters lately. I gave up the book after taking a look at it and it didn't work.

The protagonist's character is poorly developed

The biggest problem with your book is that the protagonist likes to give treasures to women. In the Zhu Xian chapter, how much have you let Baguio Youji take advantage of? So embarrassing

I watched more than ten pictures, and I felt that the protagonist's IQ was not online.

The author obtained a large number of spiritual stones to suppress the protagonist, including two thousand spiritual stones and one foundation building pill (Chapter 45, if it is a medium spiritual stone, two thousand equals two hundred thousand low-grade spiritual stones); other poisonous points, such as the protagonist's second spiritual root at the beginning, and ten levels of Qi training (at least), he obtained two thousand low-grade spiritual stones, which is the same as in heaven, but also I wanted to kill ordinary casual cultivators and sold the basic foundation-building pills (with protection), which took two years to collect (I didn't use a single spiritual stone in two years); and the second spiritual root, since it was still like a casual cultivator, I also participated in the Ascension to Immortal Conference and entered the door (got the first entrance). I could endure it, but the two thousand spiritual stones of the foundation-building pill sent me away, and I was never seen again.

The idea is quite good, but the author failed to write it down

The plot is not pleasant and the male protagonist is naive.

When will the author go to other female video writing worlds to have a taste of the heroine Haz 😁

The protagonist's combat power is too weak. With the foundation-building physical body and the late-stage foundation-building cultivation, he can't beat an ordinary late-stage foundation-building player. His combat power is far weaker than that of Han Li at the same level.

In fact, you don't have to stay in the cave. It's too embarrassing for a group of people to watch. You can enter the world you pass through at will, and you can't only go there once. The long-term replacement of resources in different worlds is the way to go.

Author, you can make the female characters in the original novel more plump, and you can include a few more. Ordinary people like me like to see these, unlike some hypocrites who say they don't like stallions. Haha, in reality, if you have the ability, you can't wait to change one every day. Author, please ignore them.

Why don't you write novels? Has the author been arrested?

I knew I wanted a eunuch hehe

I thought it was a single female protagonist, but... The ending was stuck. More than ten pure Teddy texts. Slipping away. We don't require a single heroine, but there are probably too many.

Look at the first chapter you wrote, what is it? Hua Lingshi opened the system for you and you are still not satisfied and your face is gloomy. You are a der. What did you write! How many spiritual stones can you earn after two years of hard work? The Foundation Establishment Pill was sold for 700. Can you get 100,000 spiritual stones in total? Only this little spiritual stone opened the system for you and you got a treasure from heaven, but you still have a gloomy face! What a big loss! Who are you showing it to? Disgusting to us readers, right?

What's going on? It's not updated anymore.

I think writing fan fiction for mortals actually doesn't require any system plug-ins. You, the author, arrange formations, talismans, elixirs for the protagonist, who have superb talents, no matter how special the physique, or directly have all the five elements and spiritual roots. Arrange an opportunity for the protagonist to practice magical powers such as five-color divine light, and then arrange various caves and blessed places, genius treasures, such as the Blood Forbidden Land, and arrange for the protagonist to get some formation diagrams or tokens by chance. , Just take the Bloody Forbidden Land with you and take it away. Set the Bloody Forbidden Land as a place where great powers from ancient times left their inheritance, and let the protagonist take away the treasure of a space. Isn't this just a mortal fan fiction?

Why don't you write novels? I want to see Mortal Fans. Everyone else's writing is terrible. Not that cool.

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