Start by Swallowing the Elixir

The background is similar to the pre-Qin era. Shinto practice is good and the writing is fluent, but it is best to only talk about practice and not state affairs. The thoughts should not be too ahead of the times, otherwise it will fall into the logic of a novice. Overall, it is good. Is the author a newcomer?

I feel like the pace is too slow. Because the protagonist has too many things to do in the follow-up. He wants to make himself famous, destroy monsters and enrich the people, and may have an uprising in troubled times in the future. In this way, it would be a thousand chapters. And then there is the foreshadowing of the elixir at the beginning, which must be throughout the whole text. Then the protagonist makes For Wu Zhu, Dang Yao will definitely lead to various follow-up backgrounds and interspersed plots of the monsters. The score is a short story of slaying monsters in 20 chapters, with a little foreshadowing and strengthening of the protagonist. It will take a thousand chapters to follow up. There are also decryptions of the inheritance of the former Qin Qi practitioners. There are too many. I am worried that the update speed will not be able to keep up.

It's too messy. An old villain just keeps going back and forth over and over again. It's okay. He hasn't practiced for a few days. He's been squandering and the monsters are coming one after another, but he still can't defeat them. 🤔

It's quite interesting to watch, but the protagonist's feelings for his senior brothers and sisters are a bit inexplicable. Isn't the protagonist a person who wants to seize the body?

The subject matter is good, but what you wrote is too weird. Every time something happens to the pig's feet, you forcefully pull the plot forward, and you keep making trouble even though you know it's not peaceful. It's almost the same as having a golden finger or not, sorry to bother you

How should I put it? It's average. You can see it, but it's not good. First of all, the protagonist's temperament is not stable after half a year of slave life. Secondly, wizards had status in the era of slavery. The result is that they are written like ordinary people. The third Qi practitioner actually relies on swordsmanship and only has spiritual power.

The first person to test the medicine was either a medicine refining person or a Death Bell sect. How could he so casually take a slave? What's the use... Also, shouldn't the spirit be taken away after the soul is immortal... Directly possessed by the traditional incense cultivating style, what's the use of this golden finger...

Everything about this book is good, but it's not good.

The latest chapter feels a bit frustrating to read. The protagonist is already transcendent, but still cannot take care of his friends due to worldly forces. He can only endure it. How can he be transcendent? What you practice will lead to a better life. Evil spirits, wild goblins, and wild monsters can kill people at will, and feudal forces can oppress the common people at will. I hope the author can make the protagonist a little more happy and happy.

It is very important to pursue reading. Dear book lovers, please do not keep reading. If you keep reading, you may die. 😢

The writing style is quite good, but it's too pretentious and routine.

Don't you mean the elixir of life? Why did it become the elixir of immortality! A funny guy

Nowadays, everything can be called the Holy Mother. The concept of the Holy Mother style is too broad. Isn't it possible that the only way to stop being called the Holy Mother is to kill decisively all the way, fight for revenge, and play unparalleled from the beginning to the end? Classical fairy tales are not about cultivating the Taoist heart, pursuing immortality, and overcoming difficulties along the way, right? It's fun to watch some classical fairy tales. It's also quite fun to read Xiaobai Shuang's novels, where you can pretend to be a slap in the face, kill all your enemies, and pick up a lot of classic plots about the dog-licking harem to satisfy the needs of those who are not virgins. Nowadays, it is too difficult to write classical fairy tales seriously. There are not many books since the time when mortals became immortals.

It feels bad for the protagonist to transform into a demon, because the golden finger of the protagonist is used to assist in cheating on the level of skills on the road of witchcraft. Humans and demons are not hostile to each other, and they are not the opposite positions of our species. If the protagonist becomes a human-monster, the sense of substitution will be reduced, and it doesn't feel good.

Wu Zhu usually uses swords as weapons? ? Not with a rattle and a strangely shaped cane? ?

It's very bland and boring. After reading about 10 chapters, I no longer have the desire to read any more.

It doesn't matter what you do, don't run around

This book is still okay, but it doesn't pay attention to the timeline, so it's very tiring for readers. We readers, grandpas, are all mortals, so we can't understand that the protagonist can grow up in just a few days. No matter how hard you study, you still need to grow up. I don't see 5-6 year olds taking the college entrance examination every year. Only a few days have passed since I saw the timeline of more than 70 chapters. The protagonist has already become a small character, and Hongjun still has a few Yuanhui to become a saint. There are also hostile monsters that can be found in just a few days. One thing happens one after another. Is the god of death coming? In general, I have little writing experience, cannot grasp the rhythm, and am eager for quick results.

Come on, good work.