A Guide to the Myriad Heavens

Here's a joke: the protagonist uses a Barrett sniper rifle to protect himself in an immortal world. There are many other flaws I'd like to criticize, but I'll refrain from doing so now; the author has it tough too. The author has been writing books for several years and has written millions of words, so why is he still so inexperienced?

He rescued the white snake himself, then gave her to Xu Xian, and later rescued him when he was in trouble. In the end, he even took the white snake in for dual cultivation... If you did just one of these things, it would be understandable, but you did them all. You're truly a cuckold!

I really dislike protagonists who are too unpredictable; they're like idiots.

What kind of nonsense is this? You witnessed Pangu creating the world and then imitated Pangu's creation techniques, yet you still couldn't break God's hand? Wang Chao could do this entirely through his own imagination and the enhancement of his artistic conception, but you, from a high-martial arts world, can't?

Again, this method of measuring strength in jin (a Chinese unit of weight) is outdated. The Xuanhuang Lie Ma (a legendary steed) isn't measured in jin. The original text describes it as capable of breaking through city walls; can such strength be measured in jin? Can the force of a thousand jin (a unit of weight) in a punch be measured in jin? A modern heavyweight boxing champion's punch has the force of a thousand jin, so don't use jin; use the impact force of the horse.

The plot drives the hard drive. I want to learn boxing, but there are no boxing manuals. He happened to have a conflict with someone else's underling. When someone's underlings came looking for trouble, after the fight, a boxing manual fell out of their arms. I want to join the Feathered Ascension Sect, but I don't have a letter of recommendation. My underling died, and my boss sent people to cause trouble again. Hey, isn't that a coincidence? I have another letter of recommendation on me.

The first chapter was alright, but after meeting that woman, the protagonist's brain just went completely blank. The protagonist's IQ should be around eleven or twelve years old. It's also inconsistent; earlier in the story, he could conjure up things like cars and toothbrushes, but later he's written like an eleven or twelve-year-old—ignorant, mischievous, and stupid person.

This is utter nonsense. From the main characters to the supporting ones, they're all idiots. To call them idiots is to give them too much credit.

The protagonist, an ordinary person, being able to comprehend the essence of Pangu's creation of the world is utter nonsense, isn't it?

When writing about various realms, it's best to avoid writing about dragons and snakes. Those characters are about dragons and snakes, and behind them lies the Star River Emperor. Most authors can't grasp this; they treat dragons and snakes as lower-level planes, using their martial arts as a foundation. In reality, once you've mastered the dragon and snake realm, you can instantly become a star-destroying powerhouse in any world with spiritual energy, securing your true godhood.