Zhutian: a Great Journey Through Thousands of Worlds

1A sense of fragmentation ① To be honest, if there was no background to explain that it was a troubled time, I would have thought it was a peaceful and prosperous time. A storyteller in a small county attracted a lot of people. ② Xiaowu's identity is split. In the first chapter, he takes care of the protagonist's busy schedule, and then gets scolded for studying. Later, he becomes noble. I really didn't notice it. 2Details and Logic ① We also don't understand why Xiaowu is short of food when he can go out as a waiter? Did the others spend all their money working to hide their identities? In these three years, don't you even have any savings? Or is it a test of the protagonist? How can you take revenge with this ability? Eating is a problem, and I worry about being taken advantage of. The protagonist said that you can get fish and meat in two or three days, but the prices are just like that. ② On the edge of Chen Bingzhou in the Great Zhou Dynasty, good fellow, is there no charge for carriage, horse and food? Can't you do it on the main road or take the trails? Surrounded by many soldiers, it is difficult to escape ③ Anyway, those who have been favored by Xiaowu's father will never betray, so why not find Miss Ren to be looked after by his father's friend's house? The tricks of looking at people are all taken care of by friends. Just to meet the protagonist like this, he has suffered so many years before. ④ When the protagonist is looking for a job, he does not sign a contract with Boss Liu. There are more than a dozen people in a teahouse, and the greedy boss does charity! ⑤ This land is so big that there are six or seven people living in it. Knowing that Xiaowu is special, he still lives with the protagonist. He is really generous. (It stands to reason that after living for three years, you have to learn to be self-sufficient and grow vegetables) ⑥ If the protagonist wants to practice martial arts, he can ask openly. Mr. Zhou and the others have a lot of knowledge, and they are not shameful. They are bullied by the boss because of this. He doesn't think about how much he can achieve in his thirties (if there is no system) [3] Introduction, a bitter hatred I haven't seen the chapter about the system yet. 4 Protagonist's character Selfish, arbitrary, vulgar, narrow-minded and arrogant, etc. ①The protagonist wanted to leave without saying goodbye at first, just to save his life haha. ②The protagonist's eyes were dishonest at first, but to be honest, modern people are cooler if they don't wear any clothes. What can this boss lady see if she wraps herself in several layers? She can only reveal that she is vulgar, and she can't even drive clearly. ③ After all, he accepted the one tael of silver and made people cry. He also said that he didn't hold grudges. It may be that he chose the wrong words. He probably didn't take it to heart. After all, it was not him who suffered the loss. ④ The arrogance of time travellers, labeling.

I haven't read it yet, but there are some ideas I hope you can try. 1. Don't let the protagonist be unable to walk when he sees a woman, and kill when he needs to. 2. Don't write strategies. Unless you are really confident, the real people in it will be like a brain disease in the eyes of readers. For example, the protagonist already has a certain strength, but at this time there are small characters who provoke the protagonist, and there is so and so behind me. But from a realistic point of view, even if you are weak now, it is normal. People will not take the initiative to provoke others, (never go anywhere where the protagonist is provoked by a minor character, refer to the eldest son of the Dou Po family who is looked down upon by the servants) 3. It is a bit logical, I think most novels now don't even have any common sense, and when you become stronger, you don't have any growth in your heart. It really starts with what character and ends with what character... Forget it, there is too much content. If the author is interested, you can chat with me + q

How can I put it, I feel it's okay, but the plot is a bit slow

Let's talk about it, 1. The introduction is not attractive enough. 2. The protagonist does not feel like a novelist, as if he has never read a novel. He asks questions here and there, doubting himself (maybe the author wants to improve the word count...) —— I only read one chapter and have no desire to continue reading. I hope it can be corrected earlier. —— Suggestions 1. Maintain a good attitude and don't give up. After writing, remember to read it yourself. It doesn't matter if it's a little clearer, as long as the sentences you read are smooth. 2. When you have inspiration, remember to write it down. Write both an outline and a detailed outline, so that your writing will not get stuck. Go online to see how to design the twists and turns of the protagonist. 3. Stay enthusiastic, don't give up, come on!

Where did you get this routine from? The character of your protagonist is not normal. According to logic, he disliked the time-traveled body in the first few chapters, but later he will be able to tell stories and molest other people's maids for the first time. Why should he not be afraid of death? Since he dared to molest someone else's maid, why was he still afraid of the boss's wife beating him? , If you don't want to be overwhelmed, the protagonist's character must be highlighted.

It's so long-winded. You wrote two chapters when others could explain it in just a few sentences.

Just like making short videos, the core routines are the same, but they must be differentiated in form. If you are interested, you can communicate more.

Those who have come from other places haven't read it yet. This theme was quite popular a few years ago, but not anymore. They are all the same routines and cannot attract old bookworms. Let me give you a suggestion, write a mock essay.

Those are the five novels I've written!

I have not read the book, only read the chapters. For me, I am not interested in world consciousness, unless this world is like the world of God's Tomb.

I haven't read it, the number of words is too few, please come on, author.

It is recommended that you refer to Samsara Paradise. After roughly reading Samsara Paradise, you will understand what your infinite stream is missing. .

I have never heard of the story, so I don't understand it very well. Should I read it according to the book? Audio novels? Are they different? When the protagonist storyteller mentioned that the Stone Monkey was born, he was confused about what? We haven't even gotten to the point yet. How can this still be exciting?

Following the example of "Protect Our Clan Leader", you can open 😃

To be honest, I only read one chapter. Personally, I feel that the content and structure are quite average. Of. The series of questions at the beginning is too affecting the perception, making it difficult for most readers to relate to it. It is recommended that direct questions be paired with descriptions of actions and the like, which will be better. Then the scene is introduced, and that part is even weirder. Is that the protagonist's own observation of the Tu Tu Temple or is it a simple description? If it is a simple description, why not put it at the beginning? If it is the protagonist's observation, why not describe other people in the Tu Tu Temple (the same goes for simple scenes)? The protagonist's clothes have also been changed, so why did others have to tell her to find out? A few more points. Shouldn't normal people ask what they do when they see a group of strangers? Just know the name, and then ask questions? Why so many people showed up at Tutu Temple was not written in time. There are too many dialogues in the first chapter. It was originally meant to introduce the background of the world. It was said directly: the protagonist lied about amnesia, and learned from Lao Wu and others that it is the Zhou Dynasty... That's it. Why are you asking one question after another? Dialogue is not meant to promote the development of the plot. What else can it do with so many descriptions other than the word count? Later, the protagonist asked them what year and month they were now, and the answer confused me. The protagonist asked about the year and month, not where they were. After answering the time, they also answered the location. How far away was it? ? ? ? So I personally recommend that you keep the detailed conversation about the background brief. Just use the protagonist to ask a question and lead to a conversation in which other people introduce the background of the era. It saves a lot of meaningless chapters and introduces the general background in the first chapter. If the setting of the first world is exciting, it will directly attract a group of readers. I still have a small problem, so I keep saying thank you. There is nothing wrong with saying thank you, but it affects the perception and the number of words is too high. If you want to create a polite character for the protagonist, you can add some action descriptions, such as writing a paragraph where someone else passes the steamed buns to the protagonist, and the protagonist gets up, bends slightly, and takes the steamed buns with both hands. That's it, no need to call back like crazy. Overall evaluation (Chapter 1): There are too many meaningless dialogues, slow plot advancement and background introduction, mediocre writing, and insufficient design for the beginning. Suggestion: Learn the master's writing method. This method is actually the most cost-effective and fastest. Masters all have their own unique skills in writing books. Watch them read the first few chapters and imitate their skills to quickly improve your own skills in a short period of time. For example: Chun Di Xiao Long, his No. 13 Mink Street, although I haven't read it much, but a small story at the beginning, connected to the main line, made me always remember that there is such a book. Chen Dong's cover of the sky directly pulls the coffin into the Nine Dragons. While ambush the pen, people can feel the majestic momentum. Tang Zhuan in Jie Yu 2 directly describes the environment, letting the protagonist know about time travel through the environment, and attracts readers with wilderness survival and less popular knowledge. But the premise is that when imitating, you should find authors who you find attractive and easy to imitate. Only in this way can you be close to your own style to a great extent and make up for your own shortcomings. The method of learning is very simple. First, take out their first three chapters (or part of the text), read it yourself, and then modify their beginning yourself to see what the difference is between what you wrote and what they wrote, and what is better about what they wrote. Second, take the first three chapters of your own and rewrite them imitating their style. Look at your original three chapters again and see the differences and your original shortcomings. This can help improve the structural ideas of the entire chapter, and at the same time improve the writing style to a certain extent.

Heavens shouldn't let you write like this. If you write like this, it belongs to fictional history. I feel like your next world should be Demi-Gods. Moreover, the current novel Zhutianwen is not that easy to write. If it is too pretentious, you may collapse in the later stage. If it is too pretentious, Zhutianwen will not look good and will not be enjoyable. If you still want to write a novel about traveling through the heavens, I personally suggest you try writing a slightly smaller series instead of a big series, such as a fairy wearing technology or a supernatural being.

If it really doesn't work and you can't write infinite flow, then simulation essays are very popular now and are easy to write. You can refer to the most popular one and then write simulation essays.

You should open a new account, because once your grades are published, and others see all the eunuchs on your homepage, it is not good for the book.

What is "the heavens are infinite"? You might as well✍invent historical texts