My Vest Has Become an Emperor in the Fight

....... So 1. The protagonist and the vest share a soul, what will happen if someone else kills the vest or reads the memory 2. What is the luck here directly proportional to? 3. How much luck is needed to realize the heaven-level fighting skills... 4. The luck value and the location range of those fighting skills incarnations do not affect the consumption of luck 5....... Does it have a specified location range limit? 6. What is the relationship between the vest and the protagonist, can it be integrated? 7. How is your external avatar released... (Can you specify or...) 8. The butterfly effect is too small... 9. What is the current relationship between Xiao Xun'er, the protagonist and Xiaoyan 10. Does the external avatar start from a baby? ... Still, 11. What was the protagonist's age before time travel...? From time to time, he looks at women, such as Ya Fei, why is he so shy?... Seeing that scene, the whole person... 12 The horse Yaoxuan who shares his soul with you is also very fascinated..., An alchemist does not shake people first, alone He ran directly to the desert, had to shout out the fighting skills level in a fight, and as mentioned before, Medusa was not brainless, and she had not had much feelings for Yaoxuan for four years, but only had a slight affection. Then they started fighting and killed someone. Isn't letting a sixth-level alchemist go to death? Before the fight in front of Yaoxuan, she told Medusa not to be too narcissistic. She knew that leaving would leave troubles, and she had a good impression. Not much, I'm still dawdling there, not letting go of my skills, and what the hell is the reason why I'm given heaven-level fighting skills and so on later... Why is Medusa crying again later... Is the relationship so good... Later... 12... 13.... No wonder

The obvious point is that there are many clones and there are many storylines involved, but the author's division of these stories is extremely unreasonable. For example, the clones from the Soul Clan have very little plot, and the same is true for the clones from the Ancient Clan. However, the clones from the Ancient Clan also defeated the Soul Clan Fighting Saint in public and pretended to be cool. The protagonist was forced into a marriage contract without any regard for his feelings. It looked really disgusting, but I can still bear it here. The key is that the protagonist Xiao Tian actually accepted it. He had clearly stated that he liked Yun Yun, but he still accepted the marriage contract made by Xiao Zhan and the Gama royal family. Even though he didn't like Yao Ye, he still When traveling with Yao Ye, she didn't tell her clearly, making it seem like you could still accept it. She also got married and had a relationship with Yao Ye. During the bridal chamber, she clearly told her that she had no feelings for Yao Ye and that she had someone she liked. After hearing this, Yao Ye continued to seduce the protagonist like a cousin. The protagonist hasn't withstood the temptation yet. It's so disgusting.

Naoren Pain Isn't the name of your book Ma Jia? You update a lot of girls every day and I can tolerate it But isn't your core selling point your vest style? The ancient soul clan just writes a plot and is done? The Yao Clan's vest has quite a lot of plot, but the romance routine is disgusting. How long will it take for the women around me to cause trouble? Writing too much about your avatar can kill you? Isn't your core selling point a vest?

The novel you wrote is really rubbish. I really don't want to comment on it at all. It's really rubbish. It always uses heaven-level fighting skills. Heaven-level fighting skills are extremely precious among several major races. In your case, they are like fucking cabbage. It's purely funny. I'm so fucking speechless.

The most important thing about a fandom vest is not the vest or the protagonist, the most important thing is the person you, the vest, face. Because you are writing a fan work, those characters already have a personality in the readers' minds. If you don't write the original personality well, or don't have a better reason for changing the personality, it will be difficult to write it down later, and the readers will feel uncomfortable watching it. If there is no good event, or if it takes a long time for you to change, then you cannot make major changes. Maybe there can be some minor changes because of the protagonist, but you can't blur his original character.

To be honest, contrary to the mainstream criticism in the comment area, my overall opinion of your two books is not bad, but there are also big problems in my opinion. I just want to talk about my feelings. I have no plans to talk about what I think of later. In fact, as we all know, the underlying design of a novel is very difficult. I would like to talk about the main plot logic of the protagonist here. Generally speaking, when writing a novel, you must first write the main plot outline. Even an eccentric author who writes whatever comes to his mind should have a rough idea of ​​how the story will go in the future. Then the author will definitely want the protagonist to act according to the logic of the outline, but I think this is actually not a simple matter, because the design of the protagonist has his own set of behavioral logic. When the author forcibly arranges for the protagonist to follow the outline, if the protagonist's character, behavioral logic, etc. Are not considered, it will cause a great conflict in the reading sense. I think this is the poisonous point and failure of many novels. What do you mean by simpler? That is to say, when the author asks the protagonist to do something next, you feel that it is forced and unreasonable. For example, the main character licks a woman he doesn't know because the author's outline has determined that this is the heroine. There is a super big guy who wants to take revenge because of a small friction, even to a childish level, because there will be a cool plot next and he will be the villain who was slapped in the face. It's too much waiting. Because as readers, when reading novels, especially in the early stages of the novel, we tend to view the protagonist from the perspective of a completely rational person, and are more sensitive to the protagonist's abrupt actions. If you only make rough preparations before writing a novel, it will be difficult to get far, but most ordinary authors do not have the time, energy, or even the ability. The system text provides considerable convenience in this regard. It is a trick for the authors. You don't need to explain why the protagonist does what he does. Asking is about the system task. You don't need to explain why the protagonist can handle this difficulty so cleverly. Asking is because the temporary plug-in rewarded by the system is just right. You also don't need to explain why the protagonist can learn this, learn that without being probed, etc., Asking is the cheat given by the system. But tricks are tricks after all, and they are not omnipotent. Once it exceeds the scope of system failure, such as the problem of dog licking, or the lack of subjective initiative of the protagonist, readers will feel that he is a puppet squeezed by the system, or the system will give rewards for solving the next crisis in advance, or even straightforward readers can guess how to solve it at a glance, which will still lead to a considerable bad impression. Moreover, tricks are tricks after all, and an excellent novel still needs a smooth and reasonable underlying design. This is why there are few truly top-notch novels with systematic writing. Those who want to be a great author cannot escape these basic skills. Going back to your books, Lao Wang, I have felt that the luck value system you developed is very good since I first came into contact with your books. It is equivalent to a system-like trick in fan fiction, and it solves many logical problems in fan fiction, such as why you follow the original protagonist, why you help the original owner to save the original owner, why you don't solve the problem in advance since you are in the protagonist's group, why you participate in the original plot, etc. Many fan fictions cannot explain this part clearly, which I have to say is a pity. I think this luck value system is very cleverly avoided. It is only designed that the protagonist wants to become stronger, and the luck required to become stronger comes from the emotions of the named characters in the original work, and luck is omnipotent. To put it bluntly, it is a variant of the mall system. It does not design in detail what can be redeemed, and at the same time hides the specific amount of luck, allowing the protagonist to have full initiative, and the only task is to arouse the emotions of the original character. It is a pity that it is more in line with the protagonist behind the scenes, and other fan fiction is not easy to use. In my opinion, the emotional scenes that occupy a large space in both Lao Wang's books are a natural extension of the logic of the luck value system, and the love with the female character is used to trigger emotional luck. But there is a saying that this is extended logic after all. It is "the need to arouse emotions" that leads to "choosing to fall in love", not the other way around. So "the need to arouse emotions" can lead to many other options. I personally do not reject your series of plots of love and female competition. In my opinion, there are many other reasons why many people don't like it. For example, one thing may be that the treatment of female characters is too single, which will cause aesthetic fatigue. The protagonists of the two books have too many talented teenagers, and the number of vests is not limited. Like some female characters, there is no limit to the number of female characters. Whether it is suitable or not, you can use other methods to gather wool. For example, Gu Xun'er in this book is unlikely to dismantle Xiao Yan's cp. Then you can also open an elder or senior vest in the academy to gather wool. Many people don't like Nalan Yanran. It's hard to fall in love, so you can continue to wear the teacher's vest. If you can't control the male vest, just open the female vest. If you feel uncomfortable with the female vest, you can use the animal vest, the weapon vest, the Dan vest, the strange fire vest. Why do you always hang yourself from a tree? I will talk about the emotional drama in detail later, but just like the luck value leads to many love plots, I think your luck value can be further refined.

With the foreshadowing of the previous book, I hope that this new one will get better and better If this book is finished, I think it would be more interesting if I could open a new book with a huge world view such as Zhetian The above is my personal opinion

I am going to talk about the specifics of the two books in detail. In my opinion, compared to the so-called "romantic issues", the combat power of the two books is the most outrageous. If the luck value creates a good novel environment, then the combat power setting of the two books is the biggest spoiler. Let's talk about the previous book first. I remember the protagonist Tomie and the biggest vest Itachi very clearly in the finals of the Soul Master Competition. One was 69 and the other was 71. The 71 Itachi easily defeated the Poison Douluo. Then when the two of them kill Douluo at level 80 and above 95, you will write a story. The behind-the-scenes flow can completely hide their strength to advance the plot. Yes, of course you did the same thing. The protagonist Tomie didn't use his full strength, but it doesn't prevent the hidden combat power from destroying the original combat power level. That is to say, you shouldn't at least design Tomie to participate in the title Douluo battle after the finals. Itachi can capture Dugubo with one move, and at most the saury can come out and take people away. The original work is only a hundred chapters old at this time. Even if the plot of the Killing City ends, it is not even half of the original work. Then when the main protagonists of the original Poseidon Island plot are sixty or seventy, Tomie and Itachi will definitely be titled Douluo Realm. What else is there to do in the exam? Tomie is afraid that he can give Poseidon a question. At the beginning, the design of the Sharingan Spirit shows too many things that are outrageous Oh, the sacrifices of other gods should not be taken out. Once it was taken out, it turned out that the protagonist group and the golden generation of Wuhun Temple also made sacrifices to upgrade their cultivation levels and ride on rockets. The Tsukuyomi illusion can cross the realm instantly (the first few chapters were released when Itachi left level 66 and returned to level 68 Soul Douluo of Xingluo). There are also a lot of superficial hang-ups such as Kamui, Saury, etc., And the subsequent plot cannot be written. Back to this book, this time the vests are divided into batches, the ancient war generation, Yaoxuanhunyu Xiaotian generation , but it doesn't make sense. Xiao Tian can break through the Nine-Star Dou King at any time. He can beat the low-star Dou Zong when he breaks through. Now it's obvious that the Dou Emperor is going to Zhongzhou. How can Xiao Tian's Dou Emperor be strong enough to compete with the low-star Dou Zong? How do you unfold the plot in Zhongzhou? After the three-year agreement is over, the family-killing plot will definitely be gone. Xiao Yan will probably continue to follow the plot of the black corner of the academy, but for the protagonist Xiao Tian, this section is omitted. , When the original work Xiao Yan kills Yunshan in the second three years to take revenge and enters the Dou Emperor, then the protagonist will not all be a Dou Zun. Compared with the Dou Zun realm of the Majia Ancient War, it is still the same reason. The original work does not have half of the Dou Zun realm but the protagonist is invincible. Of course, some people say that the protagonist can continue to become stronger even if he is invincible. After all, he is behind the scenes. He just needs to continue acting and absorb his luck. Yes, it is theoretically like this, but the problem is that from the perspective of a fan, there is nothing more to write. When the protagonist is already invincible, the difficulties and dangers of the original work cannot happen at all. In the past, the plot will only be greatly reduced, such as the plot of the Little Doctor Fairy, the Snake Tribe and the Alien Fire plot, but later it will be impossible to publish it. Just like the first three-year agreement, firstly, the Yunlan Sect has a half-ancient clan background, and secondly, Xiao Tian is a junior protector of the Soul Palace who can defeat the original work, so the plot of annihilation cannot happen. Similarly, with the relationship between Yun Yun and Nalan Yanran, there is no plot of killing the Yunlan Sect, not to mention the old Yao, Xiao Tian is also a disciple of the Yao. If this continues, the plot of the original work will be almost destroyed. If you don't write your own plot, there will be nothing to write. However, not everyone will buy the self-written plot, but Lao Wang's self-written plot is all about falling in love. Of course, it can also be said that the protagonist can direct and design his own enemies. Yes, I think so too. This may be a good solution. A large proportion of the imbalance in combat power between the two books is that the protagonist and the vest are too powerful apart from the original protagonist group. Although the protagonist helps the original protagonists to upgrade The level is already very fast, but the protagonist is still riding the rocket very fast. In fact, this is really unnecessary, and the luck value system requires the protagonist or vest to be beside the original owners, so we can only give up the invincible protagonist to solve all problems, and instead use a vest to either serve as a half-matched opponent or a benevolent rescue target (Yao Xuan). So I think there is a big problem in the last book. Tomie solved all the problems by following the seven monsters. If the original plot is allowed to happen, he will have to hide. All the protagonists in the vest can't beat it. They will drag themselves back and regret when encountering problems. The final result is that all the male supporting characters stay in fawning, Tang San regrets that they can't help, the female characters fall in love, and the protagonists have no story at all. This book is also starting to show signs of happening. Xiao Tian took over the original work and Xiao Yan's plot exploded everything and accelerated the plot. The three-year appointment at the Alchemy Conference was not able to interfere, so he fell in love. So I want to read the story of Yaoxuan and Hunyu more. At least it is the original story of Medusa and the Little Medical Fairy combined with the author's original (stitched) story. At least it will have content to read. The protagonist's strength does not need to be so exposed. For novels, fighting across levels is a very common and classic plot. However, generally authors will design the protagonist to be able to reach a smaller realm if he is excellent. A larger realm requires a price, either a secret method or a one-time ability, because they all know that the reason why leapfrogging is cool is because it is not common. Once it is too much and too outrageous, it will feel nothing. I personally think that Lao Wang should try to create some vests for non-genius boys, and then find ways to strengthen some of the forces or enemies in the original work. In fact, for example, the soul clan, the source of all evil, should give some evil vests to help them, so that the ancient war will not be invincible in the mainland, and the Soul Emperor dares to dream. By the way, I personally don't like the latest plot setting of Nalan Yanran's defeat. I originally thought it would be best to design a draw. A new motivation and reason can be designed for Xiao Yan to become stronger. He cannot always use chasing the protagonist as motivation. The original work also has different stages in each stage. At this time, Yao Lao will not The Xiao family can't be destroyed even if they are caught, so they might as well use Naran Yanran. When Gu Zhan made the agreement, he only talked about victory and defeat. Here, Gu Zhan could have pretended to be dissatisfied with the fact that Xun'er's boyfriend failed to win, and was not prepared to speak for Xun'er.

Not even a female supporting role, how much luck do you have?

The author of "Dou Po: My Vest Has Become an Emperor" has not updated it yet. This book is quite good, please update it soon, update it, update it, update it.

This book is so well written, what's so good about it? Let me tell you slowly. First of all, the writing style of this protagonist is very cool, and the author does not have double standards. On the one hand, he opposes arranged marriages, but on the other hand, he arranges marriages for the protagonist. The protagonist is decisive in killing. He has been licking Medusa for five years in the Snake Tribe. He was stabbed in the back by the Snake Tribe when he was on the verge of death. He then broke out and killed only the culprit. Well, Medusa was not included. Although she almost beat the protagonist to death because she was greedy for the protagonist's property, the protagonist could not move him. This book is very exciting. It was so exciting that the protagonist escaped from the snake people and was captured by Medusa. He could have won the battle, but it was because Medusa made a suicidal bet that the protagonist would not kill her and was taken away by the anti-kill seal. Well, it is really well written, the title is fantasy, and the content is quite romantic. The protagonist is also the best actor, and while he appears to value love and justice, in his heart he keeps taking advantage of the relatives of the supporting characters. Every aspect has been covered in the writing. You could say he is decisive in killing and decisive, but he is also indecisive and indecisive when faced with difficulties. You could say he is egoistic? He is also good at making money. When someone takes advantage of him, he is imprisoned and stabbed in the back. For example, Yun Yun obviously has no feelings at all in her heart, and just for some luck points, she writes that she is an innocent virgin and is in love with Yun Yun. I don't know how to vomit at all, really. You have to believe me, it's really beautiful.

In fact, what I like the most is Huang's words: The enemy defeated in my hands will never be regarded as an opponent by me. I will give you time to catch up until you are out of sight. I think it's more realistic. Although Emperor Ye Tian's suppression of all enemies is pretentious, it doesn't have the artistic conception of Emperor Huangtian's words. It just feels like it's just pretentious. After all, it's okay for peers, but when you meet someone who is much stronger and can shoot you to death immediately, I feel that this sentence feels awkward 😥

It's a bit disgusting to accept Lan Yanran as a disciple inexplicably. Although we know it is for luck, there is no foreshadowing to make it so abrupt. At least explain why you do it. And in the eyes of others, Gu Zhan is a person who takes the path of invincibility, so only people with strong strength or talent can attract his attention. Now what qualifications does Xiao Yan have to attract his attention? If it is for the Emperor Jade, it is wrong! You might as well say that it was because of his brother that he deliberately trained Xiao Yan or something. If it was for Xiao Xun'er, that would be wrong. In the end, it didn't matter whether he accepted her or not. . . , The author would like to see if he can explain it from the perspective of ancient warfare in the next few chapters.

I can't stand it anymore. I feel like you write the same thing when writing books. A good fantasy is turned into a romance by you. The female characters in it are seriously inconsistent with the original work, especially Queen Medusa. Your writing is a mess. I feel like you haven't read the original work carefully. The fan is not making it up.

Blind guess follow-up: Medusa chose the ethnic group, and the vest sadly left. By chance, a new confidante (little medical fairy) was unlocked. Medusa found that life without a vest became very painful, and unexpectedly he got another dog... Well, no, it was another woman. She was so angry that she wanted to hack the mistress to death. The protagonist politely distanced herself and called her queen, and Medusa remembered the stupid things she had done before when she was "bewitched" by the snake man, and could only watch them stay together and fly together. Follow-up: Medusa chases her husband at the crematorium

Is there anyone out there who, like me, left this book just to see how the discussion forum would criticize it?

To be honest, my impression of Medusa is that of a strong and competent queen. If she really stabbed her in the back, she would never ask for forgiveness or understanding. She would only continue to protect the snake people silently, and then die alone. Or maybe after explaining the funeral affairs, you secretly protect that person all the way until his death. But it will never be like this now, like a licking dog in a palace drama.

Dou Po Zhi I will be a eunuch when I put it on the shelf?

Brothers, which genre do you think this novel belongs to (multiple choice questions) 1. Mentally retarded and powerful novels 2. Running water and awkward novels 3. Stallion lotus novels 4. Romance harem novels 5. Prostitute eunuchs for money 6. Fine fairy grass novels 7. Fengshendingliu novels

The plot related to Xiao Tian and the royal family is poorly written, and the plot development is blunt and deliberate.

This ancient site is very strange, other vests are fine, but this ancient site makes me a little disgusted

Another one? Which book does the author want to update? If you give me an accurate answer, we won't dare to watch it like this, just because we're afraid that you'll suddenly stop updating it at some point!

This god set up and wrote this broken plot

When there was just such a commotion when Tianjie was released, I knew that this book was already broken, let alone the ambiguous plot that was poisonous to death. It is written in the same way as the previous book, but this one is not even as good as the previous one. Douluo in the previous one is just that big, and his normal upper limit of strength is just like that. This one, huh, is just messing around You can practice it if you are given the Heaven Level? Laughing to death, the lower limit is not up to standard, and it is still hot to the touch. Or is it that only the poor can only reach the heaven level, or that only the heaven level can express the so-called "sincerity"? Laughing to death, that's so funny

The protagonist's father was so frightened by an arranged marriage that he almost wiped out his entire family, and then he gave it to his other son again. He's addicted, right?

I'm really convinced, the early stage was pretty good, but why did it turn into a romance drama as you write it down? You can have emotional scenes, but if you only have 60% of the whole story, you'll be bored. This is a fantasy novel, not a harem novel.

I feel the same as Douluo Ue, who turned into a romance as he wrote it. He picked up a bunch of female protagonists purely for luck, pulled and deceived his feelings in various ways, and has fallen into the devil's way. This kind of scumbag is no longer popular. It's disgusting to watch, and everyone likes to watch the three-dimensional righteousness.

I enjoyed reading it until I got married, but after that I kept getting addicted and couldn't stand it anymore 😒

At first I thought it was the protagonist playing with women, but later I found out that it was the protagonist being played by women.

If you are so good at writing romance, why not write a variety of daily novels, such as Yukinoshita, Kasumigaoka, Eiriri, Shinomiya... Wouldn't these backgrounds look great? As long as you are willing to update it and the characters are not too outrageous, it will definitely become a masterpiece of fairy grass Forget it, forget it, you can't do it, you will be a eunuch if you write it. I'm counting on you, I might as well pray that someone in the comments section will write about this topic.