Harry Potter Becomes the Dark Lord

How should I put it? Lao Deng is not a good person, but he is greedy for other people's property. It is a failure. The Potter family is not a big and prosperous family. Lao Deng is not bad at potions, and he is the only pure-blood phoenix. It's in someone's hand. Just pluck out two hairs and bleed some. It's such a big forbidden forest and you won't be greedy for your family's property, which is not big or small. I don't think Lao Deng is a good person, but greedy for these three melons and two dates is too low.

Can what you write be called Harry Potter? You are just pretending to be cool and trying to copy the routines of fantasy novels like Harry Potter. The protagonist's character is so familiar, and he pulls off such a cool dick that it makes me squirt.

I don't know where the author's ill will towards Dumbledore comes from. Dumbledore refused to serve as Minister of Magic during the Voldemort period, and was also the undoubted greatest white wizard in the wizarding world who defeated Grindelwald. Although Dumbledore made mistakes in his youth, which caused the family to break up, But he regretted it for the rest of his life, refused his rights, and committed himself to Hogwarts to restrain himself from making mistakes. In this book, Dumbledore actually embezzled the Harry Potter family's inheritance and let the young protagonist take it back. The author is belittling Dumbledore in terms of both his thoughts and abilities...

I have read so many Hogwarts fan novels, but there is no book where it is difficult to catch Pettigrew and still let him run away. This is the only one. I feel that the protagonist's mobility in this book is really bad! This protagonist is really bad! It doesn't work even if it's hanging

Emmm, if you write like this, you will probably send it out soon. You have written the White Devil too badly.

Something magical happened in my comments section. To clarify, I have a different understanding of Dumbledore, who is a more complex character. It is not the so-called stepping on and supporting. When Dumbledore fell in love with Grindelwald, he proposed that "wizards dominate Muggles" and "for the greater good", and these became the creed of the first generation Dark Lord Grindelwald's saints organization. As for why Dumbledore later gave up the idea he proposed and turned to letting wizards keep it secret, strictly abide by the law of secrecy, and prevent wizards from contacting Muggles, it is unknown. This game is going to dig deeper. As for what you call the Phoenix Dumbledore family, Aberforth is in the small town of Hogsmeade. All property is concentrated in the Order of the Phoenix. As a fund to resist Voldemort, the organization needs funds to operate. This book not only contains James Potter's personal handover, but also contains the fact that Dumbledore was short of money when he founded the Order of the Phoenix, as well as the Deathly Hallows. Only the owner of Potter Manor and the Wizengamot can accept the Potter family's quota. This is also to control part of the magical world. Going back to this book, it can be said that Voldemort is an enemy that must be killed, and this is just revenge. If the protagonist wants to create this era, he will inevitably touch everything that the geniuses Grindelwald and Dumbledore faced back then. What exactly is "for the greater good"?

It's really exaggerated to darken Dumbledore. When Voldemort was a student, Dumbledore wouldn't even use Legilimency to deal with him. When this book meets Harry Potter, he directly uses Legilimency, nb. If Dumbledore was really so bottomless, it would be impossible for Voldemort to develop.

The idea is quite good, but the writing style is based on a mindless white text. There is no sense of mystery in the magical world at all. Instead, it has a sense of deja vu of thirty years in the east of the river and thirty years in the west of the river. Do not bully the young man into poverty.

Has the author actually read the original work? Could it be that he has only seen the movie? After only reading thirty chapters, there are two very fatal problems with the basic setting of Harry 1. Why did Deng insist on fostering Harry in his uncle's house? Because Lily set up a blood protection spell, and only in his uncle's house can Harry be guaranteed to survive 100%. And unlike his aunt, his uncle is middle-class and a person who cares about face. He will definitely take Harry with him when he goes out, and Harry will get a share of gifts (although it is the cheapest). His punishment for Harry is limited to housework and confinement (only for uncles), which satisfies the conditions of the blood protection spell - family affection 2. Harry's ancestral property, it is a joke in the book that it is said to be corrupted by Lao Deng. Rowling made it very clear in the original book that although Harry's ancestor was a potions master, he had become poor by Harry's grandfather's generation. It was not until his grandfather Fleamont invented a new shampoo formula that he became a nouveau riche. His surname came from the Muggles around him who ridiculed Frémont as "Idle Potter". The formula was sold after he had a son in old age (James). James and Lily did not have a manor until their death. They were just in a good family situation, so how could they talk about house elves? The Potter family's only valuable invisibility cloak (one of the Three Holy Artifacts) and the Marauder's Map invented by James were not in the hands of Old Deng. Rowling didn't say anything, but the basic guess was that Peter had stolen it, because in the original novel, Old Deng originally wanted himself to be the secret keeper to protect Harry. As a result, Sirius committed suicide and asked Peter to be the secret keeper. Even Old Deng, the most powerful fighter at the time, and his best friend Lupine were kept in the dark, and Sirius' original plan was to sacrifice himself.

Beautifully written, it fits our mood when we first watched Harry Potter. We really hate waiting for this old bee.

When I saw Chapter 13, I made a stupid mistake and dismissed it. James Potter was written as James Potter. There are only 4 of the 6 Weasley sons. Harry who traveled through time did not know about the goblin war and knew about the Potter family home. The author just played a mobile game and read a few fan books. He started messing around without using the most basic Baidu, and slipped away.

The second design should be more rigorous, right? How did Hermione know about Harry Potter when she went to Diagon Alley for the first time? I got to know Harry through books, okay~_~

Since he is a reborn person, doesn't the protagonist know about Snape's dedication and regret? Not to mention building a good relationship, at least don't rub salt into the wound.

The writing is okay. Finally, I am no longer the kind of Slytherin who pretends to be independent at the same time. Keep writing, there will be a market for it. It's just that Dumbledore is a bit too strange and doesn't fit in with the character setting of the original work. You could say he is the White Devil, but he's not that nasty.

You can yo-yo after seeing the third chapter🌝🌝🌚🌚

The part about family property seems to have been overdone. Regarding Lao Deng's strength and popularity, he really has worldly desires and what happened to Fudge. Didn't the original Invisibility Cloak also be given to Harry at Christmas? When writing about the black-hearted Lao Deng, it is better to write about controlling people's hearts.

I have to say that I gave up the book because the author didn't know what kind of Porter he was describing. Whether it was a demon king or a self-centered leader, they couldn't do this operation of binding one's magic power to others. It can only be said that the author has never been a leader. In fact, it is a small bug, but it gave me the feeling that a mouse excrement ruined the pot of soup. The so-called Porter is just a pervert.