The Era of Secret Arts

The plot development is good, there is a battle of wits, and the pace of the novel is good. But Luke is not portrayed well. The tool man who completely advances the plot has no "human" feeling. 1. The novel mentions that Luke is a fan of scenery and drama. Then the protagonist refuses to leave in Raging Wave City? After having a clear sky to solve the existential crisis, since you like to see the scenery, shouldn't you walk around? The characters don't match the setting. At the same time, Luke did not commit any of the seven deadly sins and was a living saint. 2. Then Luke should have his own intentions in Raging Wave City. Love power? Love beauty? Craving power? Nothing at all. It's all just to advance the plot. You don't have the desire for power, but you want to climb up? Even if you write that Luke has the desire to be emperor, the rationality will be greatly enhanced, and the plot will be easy to explain. I wrote about Luke who wanted to protect himself, but did not fake his own death to escape. He profited from the clear sky and hid himself in the city. I have to jump up and down for fear that I am not conspicuous enough. If it weren't for the aura of the protagonist, he would have died long ago. Do you know that the game is exactly the same as another world? There are no top gods in this other world watching, and they notice your anomaly? You are not pretty at all, but you have to write about a female character who has an affair with the protagonist. It's disgusting. Either you don't write about the ambiguity, or you don't want to be a eunuch. The power depends entirely on the needs of the plot. Luke is not afraid of a big boss suddenly popping up and kills him directly. After all, games are just games and may not be exactly the same as reality. But Luke was not afraid at all, so he just told the author to tell him, don't worry, it won't happen. 3. The relationship between the eldest princess, Princess Dale and Luke was not well written, which made Luke's help to them seem inexplicable and like a licking dog. Luke has no lust, no infatuation, and no love for the princess. Why and how to help them. Written Luke becomes like a dog licker. The eldest princess has a cooperative relationship with Luke, and she even had murderous intentions towards Luke. Why do you keep helping her? I don't know, there is no reason, but I keep doing it. Luke is like a great loving fairy, helping here and there, for no reason, all out of love. 4. The structure of the power system is not in place. I wrote several types at the beginning, but in the end only the secret technique was written, and the others were just general backgrounds. At the same time, even the secret skills are not written much, they appear entirely according to the needs of the plot.

I finally understand why a book with such a good subject matter and a good world view has so few monthly tickets. The early stage was very good and the plot progressed smoothly, but it became more and more biased towards Machiavellian calculations. The author grasped the theme and wrote around the secrets! What I want to see is the growth of the protagonist through secret techniques, not calculations.

Qingkong didn't feel right after her awakening, and her character was no longer three-dimensional before her awakening. The coldness and mystery before awakening are more oppressive and more in line with Qingkong's setting. I even think she is more like a woman with rich emotions, just like someone in the book speculated that she is the protagonist's adoptive mother, but she is not good at expressing it. The side description further reflects Qingkong's power and mysterious relationship with the protagonist. , More attractive to readers. For example, when confronting the dean, he showed his willingness to fight the world for the protagonist, and when the protagonist was in desperate situation, he surprised the eldest princess with his long-distance running and guarding. After awakening, she was too lively and talked too much, but she lost her cold and mysterious characteristics. It overlapped with Xun'er's character. It felt like Qingkong had become a powerful Xun'er, a heroine instead of an independent second protagonist. This prevented readers from thinking about her behavior pattern and lost her mysterious and cold characteristics. Well, in short, I think the author in the early stage intentionally or unintentionally made them more three-dimensional and outstanding in order to mislead people in the book about the relationship between Qingkong and the protagonist, and to make Qingkong not behave like puppets in the eyes of the world! The later awakening seems to be a temporary change of character in order to satisfy the readers, which is abrupt and counterproductive. Because in the readers' minds, Qingkong doesn't need to wake up at all, she is a living person. I think the author has already brought her to life in the early stages. She has long since awakened and is silently guarding the protagonist! !

The clear sky and green hair painted by the AI ​​of the boss in the group are really difficult to draw

Why can't I watch such a beautiful subject matter? After some reflection: I am tired of novels. The second one is so nonsensical. It was quite interesting to see Pigfoot trying to impersonate the detective at first. Then when the characters created in the game came out, they felt ridiculously big and ready for the end. Fortunately, the existence time is limited. Then the game character goes to the real world to find things stored in the warehouse. The combination of reality and the game, feeling the wind, yin or yin, yang or yang, is a false world. The pig's feet become a game player.

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The thrill of Machiavellian plot and anti-corruption is irresistible.

To be honest, the more I look at it, the more outrageous it feels. I feel that the protagonist should not be the Secret Intelligence Bureau, but the commissioner of Raging Waves City. I have to complain. 1. The Secret Intelligence Service should be an intelligence agency, right? Does it have the power to inspect smuggling? Shouldn't this be under the control of the Customs, Navy, Anti-Smuggling Bureau, and Public Security Bureau? How can your intelligence agency intervene in local government affairs? It is a big taboo for good power to be offside. 2. The protagonist makes a bet with the navy. If I remember correctly, he is only an official and should not have the power to bet the company's finances, because the ownership belongs to the company. Even if the protagonist wins, he cannot get the other party's ship. 3. The company wants to blockade the protagonist. Their ship is the ship of an imperial merchant, which means they are not robbing or smuggling. The protagonist is not a navy, so what right does he have to attack other people's warships docked on Skull Island? Interfering with political power is a taboo in any era. 4. The first model developed by the protagonist is an all-metal battleship with full combat power and almost inverted abilities. Wouldn't people from other countries risk their lives to assassinate the protagonist and obtain the blueprints? I feel like I don't know whether I have fallen into a misunderstanding or you have fallen into a misunderstanding. Anyway, you think the princess and the protagonist are very powerful, but in my opinion, the protagonist is just superficially powerful, but very insubstantial. The protagonist's allies are all newly promoted, with little foundation and unable to penetrate into the grassroots. Those new aristocrats or old aristocrats are the ones who control a large number of workers and serfs. And the existing power of Raging Wave City is simply unable to fight against the empire. For example, let me give you an example, if I am the emperor or prime minister or two princes, and I abuse my power because the princess interferes in politics, I depose the princess and let the protagonist enter the capital. If you were the protagonists, would you go or not? If you go, I will arrange for someone to take your place. If you don't go, it will prove that you are evil, disobey, and send troops there. You have a group of lazy spies and pirates under your command. It's okay if you let them gather information. You also have a group of police officers. It's okay if you let them bully the unruly people. Do you expect them to fight against the regular army? And these people have no loyalty to you. They are all here for money and because they think you have a good background. When the empire issues a wanted order, who will be by your side?

It's a pity. If the clone were a 3-meter-long monster with a body full of spikes and heavy Kai, holding a giant saw chain axe, and starting the battle as a plasma generator, it would be much more interesting to develop. But the result is a bean sprout elf with a soft fighting style. The more you look at it, the more uncomfortable it becomes.

Personally, I feel that the first experience cliff in the plot was when Christina was pushed to become the queen. The quality was very unstable later on. There were some outstanding plots, but most of the plots were mediocre. The barbarian plot and the elf forest plot were not very good. After arriving in the Dragon Kingdom, the plot completely collapsed... How to put it, the early part in Raging Waves City was very good, and after arriving in the imperial capital, it was still good. The story in the winter capital was also good, but after returning, the excitement level dropped drastically.