Occult Era

The plot development is good, there is a battle of wits, and the pace of the novel is good. But Luke is not portrayed well. The tool man who completely advances the plot has no "human" feeling. 1. The novel mentions that Luke is a fan of scenery and drama. Then the protagonist refuses to leave in Raging Wave City? After having a clear sky to solve the existential crisis, since you like to see the scenery, shouldn't you walk around? The characters don't match the setting. At the same time, Luke did not commit any of the seven deadly sins and was a living saint. 2. Then Luke should have his own intentions in Raging Wave City. Love power? Love beauty? Craving power? Nothing at all. It's all just to advance the plot. You don't have the desire for power, but you want to climb up? Even if you write that Luke has the desire to be emperor, the rationality will be greatly enhanced, and the plot will be easy to explain. I wrote about Luke who wanted to protect himself, but did not fake his own death to escape. He profited from the clear sky and hid himself in the city. I have to jump up and down for fear that I am not conspicuous enough. If it weren't for the aura of the protagonist, he would have died long ago. Do you know that the game is exactly the same as another world? There are no top gods in this other world watching, and they notice your anomaly? You are not pretty at all, but you have to write about a female character who has an affair with the protagonist. It's disgusting. Either you don't write about the ambiguity, or you don't want to be a eunuch. The power depends entirely on the needs of the plot. Luke is not afraid of a big boss suddenly popping up and kills him directly. After all, games are just games and may not be exactly the same as reality. But Luke was not afraid at all, so he just told the author to tell him, don't worry, it won't happen. 3. The relationship between the eldest princess, Princess Dale and Luke was not well written, which made Luke's help to them seem inexplicable and like a licking dog. Luke has no lust, no infatuation, and no love for the princess. Why and how to help them. Written Luke becomes like a dog licker. The eldest princess has a cooperative relationship with Luke, and she even had murderous intentions towards Luke. Why do you keep helping her? I don't know, there is no reason, but I keep doing it. Luke is like a great loving fairy, helping here and there, for no reason, all out of love. 4. The structure of the power system is not in place. I wrote several types at the beginning, but in the end only the secret technique was written, and the others were just general backgrounds. At the same time, even the secret skills are not written much, they appear entirely according to the needs of the plot.

From the current point of view, the structure of the world view is quite attractive. The organizational structure of Nutao City, Cape District, Secret Intelligence Bureau, and Public Security Bureau is very good. It has created a flesh-and-blood city, and I can also feel the turbulence of factional struggle. I feel that some detailed descriptions can be added. For example, a detailed introduction to Shelley's motorcycle can allow readers to better understand the technological development level of the background world (add some detailed parameters and so on). The character's resume also makes the person and the world more fulfilling. The sailboat mentioned later is mentioned briefly, with wind power, steam power, iron sheets and so on. I personally thought it would make this world more fulfilling if I could introduce which shipyard in the empire built which class of ship. After I finished chasing it, I looked through the author's previous works, and it didn't feel like it was written by one person. . . I hope the follow-up will not collapse, I am looking forward to this steam magic alchemy punk world

To be honest, the logic of your new Beijun part is very illogical. Because your book has a relatively strict logic, I want to argue with you. First, as a ruler, it is hard for me to imagine that during a war, Qingkong, a humanoid nuclear bomb that is obviously biased towards the opponent, would be invited to his capital. Is this really a humanoid nuclear bomb? Which ruler would allow a nuclear bomb that does not belong to him (not to mention a nuclear bomb that is obviously in the enemy camp, with the switch on the other side) to hang around in his capital, even if the risk is very small. If I were the one, I would definitely not allow Qingkong to come to the capital at this time. Even if the college had to invite Qingkong, I would try every means to prevent her from coming. And this also raises a question, why is the Bei County Government's control over Bei County College so weak? Although this is a government, under normal circumstances, educational institutions like the college are extremely dependent on the outside world for resources, and it is impossible to be immune to outside influence. Second Clear Sky obviously had a special purpose in telling the truth in this situation. In addition to the relationship between Clear Sky and the suspected Shuojin people released by the meteorite to the outside world as mentioned above, it is guessed that the meteorite came to the capital of North County. For modern intelligence agencies, it should not have been discovered until so late, and it was a single person. I hope the author can come back to this point. Thirdly, for Princess Daier to come to Beijun, this is the most illogical place. During the war, the princess of the enemy empire will send out two signals when she comes to her capital. First of all, the war is going well. The enemy's high-level officials have already sent the princess over to ease the situation. Even if it is an abnormal visit, this is absolutely unfavorable to the empire because it will not benefit the empire at all. It will stimulate Beijun's will to fight. The second will show the weakness of the imperial royal family to the outside world. If the princess comes out privately, it will expose the complete chaos of the empire's top-level command system. If not, refer to the previous article, the majesty of the imperial family will be greatly weakened. Even though Meteor Star has exerted the power of the empire before, the direction of war propaganda must be to promote itself by picking up the favorable ones, and to promote the other party by picking up the unfavorable ones. If Princess Del still wants to be responsible for her identity, she should be with her sister. As for she wants freedom, but for a princess, especially Princess Del's temperament, although she pursues freedom, she must at least be worthy of her identity, and at least it will not cause such great damage to the empire. In the real world, a modern country like the empire may have collapsed in the past few days, and even if the good situation brought about by the meteorite before is not jumped, it will be greatly damaged. I can understand that Princess Dai'er is a supplement to the content that cannot be written, but I personally think that if you don't write about the princess at this time, write more about how the five major civilizations responded to the Moonlight Queen, or write about the opposition between angels and demons. Since Dongdu is a node in the demon plane, how can it not be paid attention to by heaven. I personally like this book very much, but I have no choice but to find a book club to share my views on this book with the author, so I can only post my opinions in the post. I hope the author can see it. Finally, I wish the author a better and better article.

I don't know if the author will read it, but I still want to talk about the two perspectives of the game and reality. It is best to switch the protagonist's name. The real one is called Luke, and the game one is called Clear Sky. To say something funny, I don't know if other people have encountered it, but I have encountered it: When I read novels, I am one of those who read quickly. The first paragraph is about the detective thinking about the mission, and the next paragraph is about Qing Kong going to do trouble. The key protagonist's name is Luke, because I read novels relatively quickly and don't have much time to organize my thoughts. This makes me think The image of the elephant became "the calm and calm Inspector Luke slaughtered the gangsters and the red dragon with extraordinary gorgeous ice and snow elegance." Only when I read about the beginning of the action, did I realize which "Luke" it was, but if I immediately changed the imaginary picture, there would be a sense of fragmentation, and the emotion would not be in place when reading, which is regrettable. What's more, don't you know that Qingkong is not the protagonist's doppelganger after reading it? Don't some people really think that Qingkong is an independent person? In a word, if a lot of the subsequent plot consists of two protagonists, Luke, it will be confusing. The characters in the imaginary picture cannot be switched in time, which will greatly affect the reading experience. The last words, Miss Qingkong is the eternal god! ! !

The writing is good, but there are some places where I really can't help but complain. The title of the book is purely a scam, and it is named "The Era of the Secret Arts", but most of the length or the real content is the protagonist's conquest of the civilization in the transition period by crossing the information gap and capital means. As the signature supernatural power of the secret arts, it cannot be said that it is absent, but it is better than nothing. It is purely for the plot. I need to mention that in male channels, if you write about supernatural power, as long as the supernatural power allows, the protagonist does not say how strong it is, but it must be fully developed. As a result, the description of the protagonist's extraordinary power is symbolic. As an ordinary person who has traveled through time, the protagonist himself does not seem to care about the extraordinary power. It would be better not to add extraordinary power and simply write about the protagonist's capital means and put it in a historical perspective, which would be more in line with the content of the novel.

After watching the pirated version for two months, I suddenly felt so sorry for the author I downloaded it back to the starting point and read the original version. Those who used to be free will continue to make up for it. Come on, author, I support you😃

Come on, the authorｸﾞｯ!(๑•̀ㅂ•́)و✧My personal impression is that the plot has always been interesting and the writing is also very good (!). Most importantly, I didn't feel like I was losing strength along the way. I hope the author will continue to persevere (*ˊૢᵕˋૢ*)

The writing is very good, I have been a bookworm for 12 years. This theme has great potential, is also very novel, and the setting is also very good. I believe you can succeed. I hope the author can write more details about the three cunning rabbit caves. A chapter on making money from farming. The fighting scenes could use some inner description. Looking forward to becoming the master behind the world.

It feels like "starting with an archangel". The new books I opened before are really hard to explain in one sentence. I hope this one won't be messy.

I finally understand why a book with such a good subject matter and a good world view has so few monthly tickets. The early stage was very good and the plot progressed smoothly, but it became more and more biased towards Machiavellian calculations. The author grasped the theme and wrote around the secrets! What I want to see is the growth of the protagonist through secret techniques, not calculations.

Qingkong didn't feel right after her awakening, and her character was no longer three-dimensional before her awakening. The coldness and mystery before awakening are more oppressive and more in line with Qingkong's setting. I even think she is more like a woman with rich emotions, just like someone in the book speculated that she is the protagonist's adoptive mother, but she is not good at expressing it. The side description further reflects Qingkong's power and mysterious relationship with the protagonist. , More attractive to readers. For example, when confronting the dean, he showed his willingness to fight the world for the protagonist, and when the protagonist was in desperate situation, he surprised the eldest princess with his long-distance running and guarding. After awakening, she was too lively and talked too much, but she lost her cold and mysterious characteristics. It overlapped with Xun'er's character. It felt like Qingkong had become a powerful Xun'er, a heroine instead of an independent second protagonist. This prevented readers from thinking about her behavior pattern and lost her mysterious and cold characteristics. Well, in short, I think the author in the early stage intentionally or unintentionally made them more three-dimensional and outstanding in order to mislead people in the book about the relationship between Qingkong and the protagonist, and to make Qingkong not behave like puppets in the eyes of the world! The later awakening seems to be a temporary change of character in order to satisfy the readers, which is abrupt and counterproductive. Because in the readers' minds, Qingkong doesn't need to wake up at all, she is a living person. I think the author has already brought her to life in the early stages. She has long since awakened and is silently guarding the protagonist! !

Why can't I watch such a beautiful subject matter? After some reflection: I am tired of novels. The second one is so nonsensical. It was quite interesting to see Pigfoot trying to impersonate the detective at first. Then when the characters created in the game came out, they felt ridiculously big and ready for the end. Fortunately, the existence time is limited. Then the game character goes to the real world to find things stored in the warehouse. The combination of reality and the game, feeling the wind, yin or yin, yang or yang, is a false world. The pig's feet become a game player.

The clear sky and green hair painted by the AI ​​of the boss in the group are really difficult to draw

{"NickName":"Archangel is here","UserId":301204245}Clear Sky

The thrill of Machiavellian plot and anti-corruption is irresistible.

To be honest, the more I look at it, the more outrageous it feels. I feel that the protagonist should not be the Secret Intelligence Bureau, but the commissioner of Raging Waves City. I have to complain. 1. The Secret Intelligence Service should be an intelligence agency, right? Does it have the power to inspect smuggling? Shouldn't this be under the control of the Customs, Navy, Anti-Smuggling Bureau, and Public Security Bureau? How can your intelligence agency intervene in local government affairs? It is a big taboo for good power to be offside. 2. The protagonist makes a bet with the navy. If I remember correctly, he is only an official and should not have the power to bet the company's finances, because the ownership belongs to the company. Even if the protagonist wins, he cannot get the other party's ship. 3. The company wants to blockade the protagonist. Their ship is the ship of an imperial merchant, which means they are not robbing or smuggling. The protagonist is not a navy, so what right does he have to attack other people's warships docked on Skull Island? Interfering with political power is a taboo in any era. 4. The first model developed by the protagonist is an all-metal battleship with full combat power and almost inverted abilities. Wouldn't people from other countries risk their lives to assassinate the protagonist and obtain the blueprints? I feel like I don't know whether I have fallen into a misunderstanding or you have fallen into a misunderstanding. Anyway, you think the princess and the protagonist are very powerful, but in my opinion, the protagonist is just superficially powerful, but very insubstantial. The protagonist's allies are all newly promoted, with little foundation and unable to penetrate into the grassroots. Those new aristocrats or old aristocrats are the ones who control a large number of workers and serfs. And the existing power of Raging Wave City is simply unable to fight against the empire. For example, let me give you an example, if I am the emperor or prime minister or two princes, and I abuse my power because the princess interferes in politics, I depose the princess and let the protagonist enter the capital. If you were the protagonists, would you go or not? If you go, I will arrange for someone to take your place. If you don't go, it will prove that you are evil, disobey, and send troops there. You have a group of lazy spies and pirates under your command. It's okay if you let them gather information. You also have a group of police officers. It's okay if you let them bully the unruly people. Do you expect them to fight against the regular army? And these people have no loyalty to you. They are all here for money and because they think you have a good background. When the empire issues a wanted order, who will be by your side?

It's a pity. If the clone were a 3-meter-long monster with a body full of spikes and heavy Kai, holding a giant saw chain axe, and starting the battle as a plasma generator, it would be much more interesting to develop. But the result is a bean sprout elf with a soft fighting style. The more you look at it, the more uncomfortable it becomes.

Personally, I feel that the first experience cliff in the plot was when Christina was pushed to become the queen. The quality was very unstable later on. There were some outstanding plots, but most of the plots were mediocre. The barbarian plot and the elf forest plot were not very good. After arriving in the Dragon Kingdom, the plot completely collapsed... How to put it, the early part in Raging Waves City was very good, and after arriving in the imperial capital, it was still good. The story in the winter capital was also good, but after returning, the excitement level dropped drastically.

There are six divisions in Nutao City, and the leader of a big gang in one division is at level 80 or 90. Officially, the city lord must have someone above level 100. Raging Waves City is just a city that is almost forgotten by the empire. The imperial city of the empire must be full of people with level 100 like dogs walking around at full level. This combat power is too exaggerated. Although it is fun to watch the protagonist pretending to be awesome, a gang leader is almost at level 30 or 40. Don't let the combat power collapse. It depends on how the author manages it. In the future, there will be 150-level demigods and 200-level true gods.

Shen Nong is here. For me, this book is definitely a fairy tale, and it suits my taste. This book seems to me to be similar to Please Don't Interrupt My Cultivation of Immortality. It has extraordinary power, the feel of an official novel, the unique charm of the steam age, the protagonist's outlook on life is charming, and in short, it has a lot of appetite. Moreover, the female characters are well-portrayed and have a harem-like tendency, but they are not annoying or witty. The attitude towards the heroine is much better than that of the book Xiu Xian. There is no doubt about the fairy grass, but there are also screening readers. It has a strong political color. Readers who just want to see the extraordinary may not like it.

Quit the circle and stop writing. It's always disgusting. What the hell are you writing about?

I originally wanted to complain about Luke's slow power improvement and the slow progress in solving Clear Sky's power limit, but then I looked at the table of contents and it was only 200 chapters and 500,000 words long. Oh, it turns out it's not that the progress is slow, but that the updates are slow.

Hey, it's not a high-quality product yet. The starting point is honey behavior.

The wine was warmed in the clay stove, and Lu Weng, who was opposite the door, got drunk and boasted: "When I was young, I didn't like scriptures, and I loved puppet shows. I once made a silk puppet with blue hair and colorful clothes, and the carvings were as real as the paintings. The puppets acted out stories from the story, and the fish and dragons changed. Everyone in the hall was applauded." "That night I fell asleep with a box of terracotta warriors in my arms. In my dream, I suddenly arrived at a country called Jin Zun. The customs and customs were completely different from those in China. I was accompanied by only a woman, wearing red makeup and holding a sword. She said that she wanted to repay her great kindness and would protect me forever. I entered Jin Zun's country, governed the country and became an ordinary soldier, and became a general and prime minister, just like a legend in the story. I still clearly remember the things I experienced over the decades." "I was scalded by fire in my sleep and woke up. I found myself lying on the couch. The candle that had been knocked over at some point ignited the quilt and the wooden box. I hugged the burning wooden box and ran to the water tank, but it was too late. The puppets in the box had been burned black by the fire." "I felt lost and confused, and I felt like I had been reborn. Later, I picked up the scriptures again, passed the exams for academic status, and never had that dream again."  Another round of wine was added, and I was also drunk: "Luke Lu, I have no trace of the dream, how can I remember it so clearly after waking up from the dream! Zhuang Zhou dreamed of butterflies, and butterflies dreamed of Zhuang Zhou. Maybe it was Lu Gong who was dreaming about the Jin Zun Kingdom, or maybe the Jin Zun people were transforming into Lu Gong in their dreams and wandering around the middle earth!" "The name of Jin Zunguo will remain in history. Old man, I am safe and well. It's all a sweet dream! It's all a sweet dream, hahahaha!" Lu Weng was completely drunk, otherwise how could he get the wine pot from the fire with his bare hands? I was also completely drunk, otherwise how could I see the bright red dragon pattern shining on the back of Lu Weng's hand?

With a maxed-level account, you are acting as a waiter and engaging in officialdom fighting? Isn't this a fantasy novel? Can't you just go and write about the officialdom? The so-called fantasy elements can only be mentioned when you need them. They are not reflected at all at ordinary times. The environment and background settings of your world are just like a joke. Are you playing a stand-alone game? Moreover, this book doesn't even have a theme. I wonder what the main character is doing? Sometimes in order to survive, sometimes for leisure, neither farming nor promotion, I occupy a small place and start to expand. If you play fantasy, you just sweep it away with force. If you play farming, you just write something honestly. In the end, you have nothing and I can't understand what you are writing.

I originally thought it was a battle story, but after reading it I found it was a Quan Dou story, which was inexplicably confusing. But the various struggles are written really well!

Later, Qingkong has self-awareness and doesn't want to watch it.

After reading it, the ending should be that humans took out the elemental Great Ivan and fired it at the Golden Valley, and then the Shuojin people surrendered

After reading it, it's hard to finish it in one sentence. It suddenly ended at the climax. I feel like there's not at least a million pages left. Alas, I finally found a book that I liked, but it's a pity that it's not finished. . . . . . .

The author has explained everything he has told, and the last few pictures have been completed as smoothly as possible before the author lost control of the plot. Such a grand background cannot be grasped by one person. Try to finish it before it gets out of control, avoid collapse, and at least give readers a space for daydreams. It's a bit regretful, but it's acceptable. After reading it again and being mentally prepared, I can accept this ending. After reading it in one go, this is indeed the ending it should be. In the process of reading, you can understand that the author is trying his best to write this book, and you can also see that he is struggling at the end of the writing. In the end, this book has a brilliant plot and world view. It is an excellent novel about another world. He has written a different world.