I Sell Zanpakuto in Tokyo

Write down your preferred character design, Japanese or Western name, Zanpakuto name. Original designs must include accompanying abilities and have a high probability of appearing in this book. PS: Please exclude domestic characters; the current situation makes me hesitant to get too involved with domestic people and events.

So far, the only thing that bothers me is the selection process for the Grim Reaper. If that's the case, there are hardly any combat personnel; they're all high-ranking officers. Furthermore, other team leaders can arbitrarily discard their team members. I believe no leader would dare do that. Up to this point, the protagonist seems like just a tool, almost as if he doesn't exist at all.

This is written too casually. Even if you're trying to act like a guru, at least have some class.

It's pretty pointless. I was drinking a beverage, halfway through, when I suddenly realized it was several days past its expiration date. Not only did I waste a bunch of book coins, but the book was also ruined. The plot was completely confusing. I've read so many books about behind-the-scenes manipulators. This is the most bizarre one. The main character feels like a mere plot device.

Katen Kyokotsu should actually be one sword, not two. Shunsui split into Katen and Kyokotsu to hide the Ise family's Eight Mirrors Sword, with Kyokotsu responsible for concealing the sword. Therefore, at least for now, the Katen Kyokotsu distributed by the protagonist should be a single sword, not two swords.

The main character has far too little screen time. I've read several books recently that are like this; they update for several days in a row, and the main character hasn't even appeared with a name. They're more like NPCs connecting the story than main characters.

The premise is good, but it lacks a core; the protagonist doesn't even know what he wants to do. It alternates between a school setting and a slice-of-life romance. You could set a goal for the protagonist, such as restoring the Soul Society or the Seireitei, becoming a true Soul King (the Japanese version of the King of Hell). Since your title is related to Zanpakuto, it will attract Bleach fans.

That's it for you. If your next book doesn't have at least two hundred chapters, I definitely won't come back to read it. Who can stand Old Qie?

While Zanpakuto do have varying strengths and weaknesses, a captain-level Zanpakuto's strength lies with the captain, not solely with their sword. A captain shouldn't be chosen based on their sword's power. Furthermore, many characters in Bleach possess captain-level strength or even surpass it. What about the masters chosen by those Zanpakuto?

This subject matter could actually have been written in a more interesting way. For example, each Zanpakuto's owner has a backstory. The protagonist enters the world to sell swords, but also withdraws from it to observe the masses, occasionally stepping back in to show off, depicting various stories of sword sales, which are then connected in the end. Of course, this not only tests the author's writing skills but also their life experience…