A Certain Hogwarts Secret Cult Leader

Very delicate and wonderful, the characters and scenes are lifelike, the plug-in style is quite natural and not too abrupt, Congratulations 👏👏[fn=63 ] Since the success of Lord of the Bathroom, more and more authors are willing to try delicate and complicated writing styles, and are willing to try to fill in daily life to enhance the serious and immersive feeling. This is good news for old bookworms. Speaking of which, there have been many excellent HP fan works recently. In addition to this book, there are also Hogwarts: The Dark Arts Awakening, I was chosen by Grindelwald and went to Hogwarts The days of drawing cards at Hogwarts, Fortunately, the main plot is in Hogwarts (currently discontinued) These few books, I would like to call you the new generation of HP fans, the Four Heavenly Kings~ Manual funny. Why don't the five writers just become friends with each other and have sex? The works will be updated together. Whoever docks his tail first will be the dog. 🐶

When the will of the world appeared, it was basically in a "collapse" position 1. Dialogue and speech: The protagonist can have Chinese speeches, but why do other characters also have them? 2. Private article: An analysis of the original work in the form of dialogue is possible, but it is too long... More than ten paid chapters in a row 3. Plot: A lot has happened, but the protagonist has just entered school and the rhythm is so tight. How should the protagonist develop? The will of the world actually ended up in person. It was too low. He could be an auxiliary (or more suitable) but he wanted to be a warrior Before and after the conversation with Dumbledore, the character began to collapse and gradually separated from the main line - the Secret Cult (after reading other comments, it is said that the protagonist finally changed the scene later) later, but the esoteric religion disappeared) There are many things, which can only be used as introductions or foreshadowings, and can be mentioned briefly, but there is no need to throw them all out at once. If you say too much, it will become a drama (this is a brief introduction) PS. The beginning is very good.

To put it bluntly, there is neither a secret sect nor a leader in this book. These two concepts are only a shell in this book. Comrades who came here for the esoteric world view can leave, but those from Hogwarts can still stay and see the author's private life in the magical world.

Which path will the protagonist choose? Lamps and cups both need people, casters need to burn themselves, ghouls need dead people, priests and dancers...

I liked it at the beginning, but when I saw the young lady being kidnapped, I kind of gave up. The plot was too bloated and messy. Things happened one after another before school started, without giving any chance to breathe. There was no fun in reading fan fiction. Moreover, school hasn't started yet, which means you haven't entered the story yet. The main plot events of the book are just thrown at me. If these events were written during the summer vacation after school starts, I may be more accepting. But now the prologue part (for HP fans, I think it is considered a prologue before school starts, and the main story begins after school starts) is so bloated and messy that it is difficult to have the desire to continue reading.

I didn't see how Mansu developed. It was all trivial things in reality, and there were all kinds of Riddlers. It seemed like I had watched it but didn't understand it. Isn't the protagonist's level up? Is Mansu no longer developing? Ever since Yindelaixi was taken away, he has been unable to understand. I like to watch the protagonist upgrade and use his abilities to surprise others, and I also like to watch the plot where the protagonist makes others respect and surprise him in Mansu. But there is nothing behind it. Off topic. The protagonist seems dispensable now.

This is a story about building a Mansu step by step in the world of Hogwarts, so there is no mysterious atmosphere in the esoteric world view at the beginning. But as the plot progresses step by step and the impact deepens step by step, everything will be revealed. I wanted to write a story that would be accessible to most readers. So, don't ask me again if there will be other Si Chens, other signatories! Now there is only one woodland in Mansu, why do you need so many? I have a huge headache! The protagonist hasn't even finished first grade yet! Finally, thank you to all readers for supporting this book!

The beginning is obviously very good But in the end, the pace is too fast and there are a lot of nonsense without going to school. After going to school, campus life did not take long to create a sense of the world Then I opened the dungeon directly, and it was still a ridiculously long dungeon Basically, the Esoteric Cult was rarely mentioned directly I wanted to see the campus life at Hogwarts and it became the teaching of the history of magic It was really interesting. . Let's wait until the copy is over.

Don't dig such a big hole. The world's will has come out. In dozens of chapters, the subordinates were directly captured by the Dark Lord. What's this? You only planted a few trees, and your sex status has not been improved yet.

I don't like the setting of this world's will. Real.

The characters in the book are all in the Riddler. This is a guessing game during the Lantern Festival. The protagonist is often in a situation where he doesn't know what's going on, what he's doing, and how to deal with it next. I suggest you stop trying to write a mental breakdown. Don't write where you think. There are so many branch lines, how do you fill in the pit?

When you look at the profile, you can tell that he is an old esoteric cultist. Some church leaders spend their entire lives working part-time.

I think this book should be an inspiration to the author. Everything has a proper state. It should not be too brain-burning. Characters can have conversations but not all of them. When eating, pay attention to the combination of meat and vegetables. Long dialogues are obviously not what a good novel should have.

I wrote twenty chapters of dialogue. After Dumbledore finished the dialogue, I started writing the dialogue of the will of the world. You can write a branch line to introduce the world view, but you haven't started the main line yet and haven't started writing anything in the first year. I really want to write a side line and finish the Grindelwald branch first. The side plot and the main plot have not been developed yet. You first introduced me to the will of the world. You introduced more than 20 chapters. Voldemort can't even win. Then you told me that you want to be the enemy of the will of the world? Originally, the game settings are cumbersome. The branch line and the main line are dual-player while still writing the will of the world.

When I see the world, it makes me so embarrassed that I can't stand it anymore😖

The Night Watchman is the god who guides the way forward, the god who illuminates and drives away darkness, and the god who shows no mercy.

I felt something was wrong when I saw the first chapter on the shelf. Fortunately, I checked it on Baidu. What the hell is written in the back? Was it a ghostwriter?

There is a problem. In the simulator, Si Chen is the source of everything. Whether it is the ebb and flow of the tide or the rotation of the earth, it is all because of Si Chen's passion. Human activities are also subconsciously controlled by Si Chen. It wasn't until he became an immortal that he barely gained independence. The HP world is still running without Si Chen, so can the newly appeared Si Chen still control the waking world like in the simulator?

The second design is amazing at first glance, but it soon becomes anti-locking and boring setting supplements. When writing fan fiction, complex settings are a taboo. The more secondary settings there are, the more they will conflict with the original settings and offset the flavor of the original work. The more complex the system, the lower the reading fluency will be. Because text, as a medium of expression, has limited ability to shape images. The author may have a clear idea of ​​what his second hypothesis is, but what is ultimately conveyed to the reader through words will never be as clear as what he thinks in his heart. So the best fanfic is to dig deep into the original setting of the original work while also opening up a little bit of trouble for the protagonist. We all know that if a game has uncontrolled cheating, people will quickly lose interest. The same goes for a novel... The character design of the protagonist is okay, and I accept it, but the restoration of the character in the original work is really poor. It can only be said that it has only its appearance but no spirit. Just like Snape would never praise Dumbledore. He didn't like Dumbledore, but was rather resentful, feeling that Dumbledore didn't protect Lily enough. If Voldemort hadn't been too powerful to resist, Snape would never have made an agreement with Dumbledore. He didn't like Dumbledore's style, thinking it was "pedantic". He doesn't really like to play tricks, but if he has to, he can do it very well. Dumbledore is not a good guy either. His purpose is the deepest in the whole play. Voldemort was plotted to death by him, how could he be kind? He would joke with Harry because he had a purpose in training Harry. He joked at the press conference, showing weakness to Gilford to avoid meaningless involution. Remaining to other students and teachers, he was deep and wise at all times. The author's original characters are very poor, and the ability to restore the original work is also weak. It seems that there are only tsundere and hidden clumsiness... These two methods are somewhat lacking in portrayal. Make the characters very thin. I don't know if it's because of his lack of writing skills or lack of experience... But looking at the protagonist, I don't think the author's writing skills are weak. The portrayal of the protagonist is quite successful. The writing is also very smooth. So, that's it, I don't necessarily have to read it, maybe I'll come back and read it again if I'm short of books.

This book is very similar to "Kingdom Blood". The author has something, he writes well in the early stage, but he makes the same mistakes in the middle stage. There are too many things he wants to write, and he doesn't make any choices. He just crams them all into it as if he is excited about it. Kingdom Bloodline is an outrageous one-night TM event with seven or eight turning points. The book Secret Cult is the same. As soon as the god is born, the powerful protagonist will rush to the streets, and then there will be a 30-year copy. It is too outrageous. This thirty-year span is completely freeing oneself. It is understandable that the author really wants to write about too many things. Whether it is the secrets of the founding of Hogwoods, the mysterious master, underground fighting, or even the daily life of the protagonist in his childhood when he first opened the dungeon, it is a very interesting plot worth writing... The structure of the Esoteric Cult is also too big, and there is no myth about the Esoteric Cult that is not groundbreaking. Really, any event can be written as the ending of a novel. It is better to just take a trick and only write the history of the early development of the Esoteric Cult, and then finish the book directly after reaching a certain level, and then start a new book to write about the mature world where the Esoteric Cult and the magical world blend, write the history of the later development of the Esoteric Cult, and use a copy or something to write about the history of the integration of the Esoteric Cult and the magical world. Come on, author! Take good care of you!

I'm sorry, I apologize. I shouldn't have scolded the author. Thank you very much for your willingness to open a new book😭