Yan Yue's Journey to Immortality

Monks compete for life with people and with heaven. According to the world of cultivation created by the author, countless people have died in order to enter a sect. The competition is so fierce. In the world of cultivation, talent, luck, and character are indispensable. But according to Wen Zhi in the author's book, her talent, luck, and talent are good, but she is too naive. To put it bluntly, Stupid, if you want to write better, it's not enough to have an outstanding protagonist. The supporting characters are equally important. Cultivation is never done alone. You can write one or two supporting characters with good talents, good temperaments and easy-to-use brains to become friends with the heroine. You can also write a few villains with amazing talents and vicious minds. Personal feelings I think this is more attractive than a supporting role like Wen Zhi. There is also the protagonist's mother. I know that she is very good to the heroine, but I personally think that some of the mother's scenes can be reduced, because most people who read fairy tales like to watch the protagonist grow step by step, fighting against people and the sky, and overcoming various difficulties. In the end, The most important thing about the fairy tales that finally stand out from hundreds of millions of monks is the word "xia". Every time I write about the protagonist's mother, it gives me a very disconnected feeling, like I am watching an ancient romance heroine lead her family to live a good life. In other respects, the author writes very well. Come on, you must keep writing.

In the world of cultivation, even if the heroine has an excellent talent, she is not arrogant but takes things one step at a time. Moreover, the family in the book is also very good at accompanying the heroine to grow up, which makes people feel very warm. The character positioning of the supporting characters is very clear. In this huge world of cultivation, many supporting characters and passers-by are gradually established to support the world. Moreover, the heroine is not the Virgin Mary. What should happen? Such things are not at all intellectually depressing, the evil will be repaid, and the opportunities for the secret realm dungeon are also very reasonable and cleverly arranged. The overall impression is very good, and there is still a lot of room for improvement. It would be better if the growth process is more careful, such as advancing to new cultivation levels and breaking through these. It would be better if it could be written more carefully, but this still does not change the fact that this is a good book.

New author bows online Dear little darlings, thank you very much for clicking in to read my book, bow~🙇 It is my first time to write a book about cultivating immortals, and there may be many shortcomings in it. During the reading process, if you think there are problems, you can always raise them, and I will correct them in time. Thank you for reading~Two bows🙇

I like the values ​​​​of the heroine. I will not offend others unless they offend me. If someone offends me, I will destroy them all 😄😄

Yes, I like the heroine, she is very brave.

You are so talented, you are actually recommended. Come on, come on, I will always be optimistic about you.

It was the first time I saw that Xiuxian could bring his family into the sect. At the same time, why did her friends follow the heroine wherever she went? Can't she independently hunt for treasures? Also, the sect selection is a selection of individuals. Why is this novel written like a group adventure? There are also handyman disciples who are dedicated to serving the heroine. It is okay for the heroine to give spirit stones occasionally, but isn't it weird to ask for spirit stones every time she asks a question? This is the author's first time writing a novel. I feel so bored. This novel's combat, adventure, and competition are just average.

The only way to relieve worries is to renew.

It doesn't feel like cultivating immortals, but rather like playing a cultivating immortality game. This is the pursuit of the great road. I have been in retreat for several years. It's not like clearing levels and ranking. Can't the heroine be uniquely beautiful?

The writing is pretty good, keep up the good work. The update is just a bit slow. The most important thing is that there is no CP. I like it so much.

Hello, young lady, this is Yuxiao, and I'm here to pursue your contract.

I just read the eight chapters in the catalog on the 29th, and I feel like you should be going to school or doing something else today. After waiting for 14 days and finally being able to sign the contract, I still felt uneasy. I originally wanted to ask you if you have any tips for signing the contract, but I don't seem to be able to even write the application instructions.

It's good-looking, but not enough!

Zhi'er...🤭, it's so hard to speak. . . . .

Come on together!

Not much required, 100,000 updates per day. If not, they will be arrested and locked up in a small dark room.

I can't see that the sect cares about qualifications at all. They only care about level. I'm so speechless.

Why is it that when a sect selects a group of people, it feels like those with higher cultivations have an advantage, but as for qualifications, it depends on whether they have high cultivations. It is quite strange to select disciples in this way. Those who are qualified are young and low-level, and deserve to be eliminated.

Everything is fine, except for being a bit wordy and some plot points could have been omitted or made concise, but it ended up being too much and too detailed.

Why haven't you updated in the past few days?

This won't be a series in my lifetime, right?

The writing is okay, but the most exciting moments are missing.

It's wonderful, the plot constructed by the author is very rich, and it reads very smoothly. The description of the characters is just right, and the branches and main lines of the article change naturally and are interlocking. In addition to this book, I am also following "The Monk Family" and read more than a thousand chapters in one go! There is a shortage of books. Do you have any good book recommendations?

The word count is a bit short, so it's not boring.

I feel like there are too many supporting roles, which is a bit annoying.

There are at least ten or twenty in one chapter. Can't we not include so many (and) and (of)?

Write an introduction, otherwise I really don't know what story would be unattractive.